tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post113280038474515442..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Footsteps, Part 6 (Fiction)Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1132960770563829382005-11-25T18:19:00.000-05:002005-11-25T18:19:00.000-05:00Kelly, I hope the end is satisfying!Kara, yes! I'...Kelly, I hope the end is satisfying!<BR/><BR/>Kara, yes! I've just posted the last piece.<BR/><BR/>Bernita, thank you, thank you! I put a great deal of effort into my verb choice. I also try to limit myself to no more than one adjective per sentence.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1132948024744554502005-11-25T14:47:00.000-05:002005-11-25T14:47:00.000-05:00Jason, you have a superb command of verb.That's wh...Jason, you have a superb command of verb.<BR/>That's where a lot of us fall down.<BR/>The poltergeistic "skipped under the bed, clattered in the sink" provides a different layer to the imminence of flat-line.<BR/>I liked "smoked into the parking lot" too.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1132944280068326052005-11-25T13:44:00.000-05:002005-11-25T13:44:00.000-05:00ooh! I can't wait to see how this ends. Are we e...ooh! I can't wait to see how this ends. Are we ever going to find out what's going on??Kara Alisonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17382393133894023610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1132934717175090492005-11-25T11:05:00.000-05:002005-11-25T11:05:00.000-05:00Woo, good action and suspense, Jason! I have no i...Woo, good action and suspense, Jason! I have no idea how this is going to end, and very anxious to find out. =)Kelly (Lynn) Parrahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04827605655761900263noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1132930831787432732005-11-25T10:00:00.000-05:002005-11-25T10:00:00.000-05:00Farzad, thank you for the high praise!Mary Louisa,...Farzad, thank you for the high praise!<BR/><BR/>Mary Louisa, for you I will seriously try for later tonight.<BR/><BR/>Luke, thanks for the comment about the bird! I thought it was a stark contrast from what was occurring just a few floors up in the hospital room.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1132894283834963712005-11-24T23:51:00.000-05:002005-11-24T23:51:00.000-05:00Jason, I am on tenterhooks. Please finish TOMORRO...Jason, I am on tenterhooks. Please finish TOMORROW! And happy thanksgiving to you, too. :)Mary Louisahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08974198919020077796noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1132889001972348792005-11-24T22:23:00.000-05:002005-11-24T22:23:00.000-05:00Beautiful, absolutely marvelous! I had another vis...Beautiful, absolutely marvelous! <BR/>I had another vision in my head for the part 6, but I wasn't even close. Now that I read it, I can see that you took it to a very good direction.<BR/>A piece of art!<BR/>Keep going...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1132879646772911562005-11-24T19:47:00.000-05:002005-11-24T19:47:00.000-05:00Terri, I have to admit that I get a thrill out of ...Terri, I have to admit that I get a thrill out of getting people on the edge of their seats! Something must be right.<BR/><BR/>Stop back soon. I'll finish the story before the end of the holiday weekend.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1132865172976819142005-11-24T15:46:00.000-05:002005-11-24T15:46:00.000-05:00Aaargh! You tease!Happy thanksgiving, anyway ;-) [...Aaargh! You tease!<BR/>Happy thanksgiving, anyway ;-) <BR/>[<I>heart pounding, nose only inches from the screen</I>]Terrihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03158421102740382411noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1132845854520771072005-11-24T10:24:00.000-05:002005-11-24T10:24:00.000-05:00Jeff, have a great day!Jeff, have a great day!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1132844873402642962005-11-24T10:07:00.000-05:002005-11-24T10:07:00.000-05:00jason- Happy Thanksgiving. :)jason- Happy Thanksgiving. :)Jeffhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06106410070220667314noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1132843099515466902005-11-24T09:38:00.000-05:002005-11-24T09:38:00.000-05:00Livewire, I just couldn't squeeze the rest in with...Livewire, I just couldn't squeeze the rest in without making the post too long. Also, I just love those cliffhangers! Glad my descriptions seem to be on point. :)<BR/><BR/>Anne, so close. It's almost over.<BR/><BR/>.:A:., thanks! I think flow and pacing are the hardest part of writing to learn. The pace of writing and the pace of reading are so very different.<BR/><BR/>HAPPY THANKSGIVING EVERYONE!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1132835109079626262005-11-24T07:25:00.000-05:002005-11-24T07:25:00.000-05:00"Melissa's eyes bulged. The respirator choked and ..."Melissa's eyes bulged. The respirator choked and rattled. Mrs. Carr snapped awake. She leapt to the head of the bed. Desolation emptied her daughter's face. Screaming, she ran for help."<BR/><BR/>I like the flow in this bit.. : A : .https://www.blogger.com/profile/04410256917258728976noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1132814330118201752005-11-24T01:38:00.000-05:002005-11-24T01:38:00.000-05:00This is killing me, Jason.This is killing me, Jason.annehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08734374991569484126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1132805208751965272005-11-23T23:06:00.000-05:002005-11-23T23:06:00.000-05:00Gah! There better be one more! I really like the...Gah! There better be one more! I really like the line about dripping back into the haze... Your descriptions are what I would consider eerily accurate at times. Wonderful way of truly getting the feeling through.LiVEwiRehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10617307810655492590noreply@blogger.com