tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post114576493034192902..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #5Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156162043954019852006-08-21T08:07:00.000-04:002006-08-21T08:07:00.000-04:00Neatly done!And with just 2 commas, heh.Smooth flo...Neatly done!<BR/>And with just 2 commas, heh.<BR/><BR/>Smooth flow and confident craft. Kudos.Prashanthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15106950836291718325noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146498869198017922006-05-01T11:54:00.000-04:002006-05-01T11:54:00.000-04:00JP, really unique. Obviously poignant, but there'...JP, really unique. Obviously poignant, but there's something more. A depth of reality. A quiet acceptance. High marks in storytelling.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146072008836989532006-04-26T13:20:00.000-04:002006-04-26T13:20:00.000-04:00Good job bro! :)Good job bro! :)Lindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08665167693563457389noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146063319795608732006-04-26T10:55:00.000-04:002006-04-26T10:55:00.000-04:00Ditto on the two lights metaphor - good job tying ...Ditto on the two lights metaphor - good job tying the opening line to the conclusion. Your sentences are nicely descriptive - a bit longish (a little run on?) but it works for your style. So I say keep at it! Lyndon (Entry #24)Lynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11998346902027037420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1145919245255004972006-04-24T18:54:00.000-04:002006-04-24T18:54:00.000-04:00How sad that it was only on his death bed that he ...How sad that it was only on his death bed that he realized how much he loved his wife. Nice.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1145862887453384382006-04-24T03:14:00.000-04:002006-04-24T03:14:00.000-04:00Nice use of the two lights as a metaphor in the en...Nice use of the two lights as a metaphor in the end :)Bhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1145803106341340102006-04-23T10:38:00.000-04:002006-04-23T10:38:00.000-04:00I agree with Erik, I like your use of the two ligh...I agree with Erik, I like your use of the two lights at the end. Good job. :)Jeffhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06106410070220667314noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1145801007746203422006-04-23T10:03:00.000-04:002006-04-23T10:03:00.000-04:00I really enjoyed the story, very moving.I really enjoyed the story, very moving.Robinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17517751302431903689noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1145797066759136612006-04-23T08:57:00.000-04:002006-04-23T08:57:00.000-04:00A sad, but gentle tale. Your ending is good use of...A sad, but gentle tale. Your ending is good use of the "two lights" theme.Erik Ivan Jameshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05564245949077955844noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1145791934325472242006-04-23T07:32:00.000-04:002006-04-23T07:32:00.000-04:00Another nice use of light symbols.Technically, a l...Another nice use of light symbols.<BR/>Technically, a little confused by the sequence in the dreaming/thinking/waking bit.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.com