tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post114597110365483765..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #16Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146540322016103922006-05-01T23:25:00.000-04:002006-05-01T23:25:00.000-04:00Lucretia, I'm impressed you built an entire histor...Lucretia, I'm impressed you built an entire history and storyline for the three objects. In so short a space, too!<BR/><BR/>High marks for enjoyment and storytelling.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146231761111600622006-04-28T09:42:00.000-04:002006-04-28T09:42:00.000-04:00Lovely piece of writing. This is prose that reads ...Lovely piece of writing. This is prose that reads like poetry. Great use of images to show a relationship falling apart.Bhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146179061310811472006-04-27T19:04:00.000-04:002006-04-27T19:04:00.000-04:00Ah, such beautiful prose. She should have been bu...Ah, such beautiful prose. She should have been burning the painting in the fireplace while she and the lamps watched it disintigrate.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146174452880632052006-04-27T17:47:00.000-04:002006-04-27T17:47:00.000-04:00Flood is always the first to mention the great lin...Flood is always the first to mention the great lines and images - so ditto that. The mood shifted so quickly with the second to last paragraph that I was caught unawares - if that was your intent, then it worked: I felt the betrayal. Just on a nit-picky note: you don't need a comma at "purchase them, was a rare miracle" nor in the last line at "three possessions behind, is a twist. . . ." For what it's worth. Nice crisp story. LyndonLynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11998346902027037420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146016531158090682006-04-25T21:55:00.000-04:002006-04-25T21:55:00.000-04:00Wow, fantastic story!Wow, fantastic story!Robinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17517751302431903689noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1145987373788396482006-04-25T13:49:00.000-04:002006-04-25T13:49:00.000-04:00The apostrophe image is unique. Creative writing.The apostrophe image is unique. Creative writing.Erik Ivan Jameshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05564245949077955844noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1145979213189700572006-04-25T11:33:00.000-04:002006-04-25T11:33:00.000-04:00I was also struck by the apostrophe image. Good jo...I was also struck by the apostrophe image. Good job. :)Jeffhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06106410070220667314noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1145979042199112812006-04-25T11:30:00.000-04:002006-04-25T11:30:00.000-04:00Wow, very good. Ditto on the apostrophe image.Wow, very good. Ditto on the apostrophe image.Jaye Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09407478042834459126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1145977885231982822006-04-25T11:11:00.000-04:002006-04-25T11:11:00.000-04:00Well done!That apostrophe image, particularly.Well done!<BR/>That apostrophe image, particularly.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1145973267834829882006-04-25T09:54:00.000-04:002006-04-25T09:54:00.000-04:00...twins became apostrophes on either side of our ...<I>...twins became apostrophes on either side of our bed, enclosing ‘us’ together...</I><BR/><BR/>Really great line.Floodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14341265651121116197noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1145972988182894782006-04-25T09:49:00.000-04:002006-04-25T09:49:00.000-04:00A knife twisted in the gut. Very well-written!A knife twisted in the gut. Very well-written!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com