tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post114597171381489932..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #18Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146540543262065512006-05-01T23:29:00.000-04:002006-05-01T23:29:00.000-04:00Jim, loved the fantasy-ish genre here. Quite a fu...Jim, loved the fantasy-ish genre here. Quite a full story for so few words. Great morality lesson also.<BR/><BR/>High marks for pacing, enjoyment, and storytelling.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146232552866392392006-04-28T09:55:00.000-04:002006-04-28T09:55:00.000-04:00I liked the "different" approach with the lamps to...I liked the "different" approach with the lamps too. Overall, the story has an eerie effect and indeed has the seeds of a bigger story. Thanks for sharing :)Bhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146178604034304922006-04-27T18:56:00.000-04:002006-04-27T18:56:00.000-04:00You gave me the shivers. I wanted to curl up and ...You gave me the shivers. I wanted to curl up and hide too. I think the others are right about expanding this. You have a dozen different directions you could take this story. Best of luck with it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146175273761449062006-04-27T18:01:00.000-04:002006-04-27T18:01:00.000-04:00Jim, definitely develop this story. Matrix red pi...Jim, definitely develop this story. Matrix red pill blue pill choice - good call and first one to use that theme. I felt the fear but wonder - if she had imagination could she change the vision and thus the course of her future? That's the messsage I read - am I close? :-) LyndonLynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11998346902027037420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146025172689453172006-04-26T00:19:00.000-04:002006-04-26T00:19:00.000-04:00It was different. Different is good. I liked it.It was different. Different is good. I liked it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146016226982096212006-04-25T21:50:00.000-04:002006-04-25T21:50:00.000-04:00Great story.... I would love to read more!Great story.... I would love to read more!Robinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17517751302431903689noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1145987129692032802006-04-25T13:45:00.000-04:002006-04-25T13:45:00.000-04:00There is great potential for a longer story here.There is great potential for a longer story here.Erik Ivan Jameshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05564245949077955844noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1145978466459373542006-04-25T11:21:00.000-04:002006-04-25T11:21:00.000-04:00Very creative use of the lights. Well done. :)Very creative use of the lights. Well done. :)Jeffhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06106410070220667314noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1145978118603335172006-04-25T11:15:00.000-04:002006-04-25T11:15:00.000-04:00Oh yeah... loved it. Very inventive.Oh yeah... loved it. Very inventive.Bethany K. Warnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06679355745067316748noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1145975898309104882006-04-25T10:38:00.000-04:002006-04-25T10:38:00.000-04:00Thanks for the comments so far! I really apprecia...Thanks for the comments so far! I really appreciate them.<BR/><BR/>One typo that I'm waiting on Jason to correct - fifth paragraph, the first after the break, should read "She could have been dead..." I had to retype the whole story off my Palm to my computer this morning due to technological difficulties (my Palm absolutely refused to sync with my computer), and I accidentally dropped a word in the process. That should hopefully clear up that bit of confusion.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1145975286250509842006-04-25T10:28:00.000-04:002006-04-25T10:28:00.000-04:00The sort of thing that makes one want more.The sort of thing that makes one want more.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1145973681806211932006-04-25T10:01:00.000-04:002006-04-25T10:01:00.000-04:00Excellent story, Jim. Loved your entry. JerExcellent story, Jim. Loved your entry. JerJerilyn Dufresne, authorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02720391625949782016noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1145973509522388292006-04-25T09:58:00.000-04:002006-04-25T09:58:00.000-04:00Loved the non-traditional use of the lamps, here. ...Loved the non-traditional use of the lamps, here. Very compelling story.Floodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14341265651121116197noreply@blogger.com