tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post114601488963815097..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #22Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146586137236903502006-05-02T12:08:00.000-04:002006-05-02T12:08:00.000-04:00John, such a dark piece. So much is packed into t...John, such a dark piece. So much is packed into the last line. Almost elegant in its despair.<BR/><BR/>Great delivery with the last line.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146234963340618632006-04-28T10:36:00.000-04:002006-04-28T10:36:00.000-04:00Such poignancy in so few words! Very nice :)Such poignancy in so few words! Very nice :)Bhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146177048374971562006-04-27T18:30:00.000-04:002006-04-27T18:30:00.000-04:00PS, call me an edit freak, but one type, I think: ...PS, call me an edit freak, but one type, I think: "in each of our sons rooms" is possessive. Good job on the structure of the story though, which is most important. lgpLynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11998346902027037420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146176921661451142006-04-27T18:28:00.000-04:002006-04-27T18:28:00.000-04:00No. No, no, no. Don't do it. (That was me talki...No. No, no, no. Don't do it. (That was me talking to the dad.)<BR/><BR/>Yes. Yes, yes, yes. Keep writing. (That was me talking to you.)<BR/><BR/>LyndonLynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11998346902027037420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146119171150279672006-04-27T02:26:00.000-04:002006-04-27T02:26:00.000-04:00How beautiful, that he won't let her go alone. And...How beautiful, that he won't let her go alone. <BR/><BR/>And how sad. <BR/><BR/>Nice story.For The Treeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14843514742081569820noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146098705380883422006-04-26T20:45:00.000-04:002006-04-26T20:45:00.000-04:00Thanks for the good words! A lot of good stories h...Thanks for the good words! <BR/>A lot of good stories here.<BR/><BR/>JohnAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146050371751124702006-04-26T07:19:00.000-04:002006-04-26T07:19:00.000-04:00wow! Stumbled across you from another blog, wante...wow! Stumbled across you from another blog, wanted you to know I enjoyed it.all that's right, or nothttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09816461777219904707noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146049776706702442006-04-26T07:09:00.000-04:002006-04-26T07:09:00.000-04:00Pulls the heart from the breast.Pulls the heart from the breast.Erik Ivan Jameshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05564245949077955844noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146031749518688222006-04-26T02:09:00.000-04:002006-04-26T02:09:00.000-04:00Very, very good.Very, very good.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146015615936075782006-04-25T21:40:00.000-04:002006-04-25T21:40:00.000-04:00Very nicely done. Loved it.Very nicely done. Loved it.Robinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17517751302431903689noreply@blogger.com