tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post114607142917909795..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #25Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146586591731138342006-05-02T12:16:00.000-04:002006-05-02T12:16:00.000-04:00Tsavo, great twist and economical use of language ...Tsavo, great twist and economical use of language in paragraph beginning, "Three little pigs...."<BR/>Those twisted observations in the picture were wonderful!<BR/><BR/>High marks for enjoyment and storytelling.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146239390569281462006-04-28T11:49:00.000-04:002006-04-28T11:49:00.000-04:00So surreal! I liked the manner in which the painti...So surreal! I liked the manner in which the painting and reality blur in this piece. Well done :)Bhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146194356616392002006-04-27T23:19:00.000-04:002006-04-27T23:19:00.000-04:00Nicely evocative, haunting fairy tale style. Ever...Nicely evocative, haunting fairy tale style. Ever the editor, though, the second to last paragraph: "it’s hearth ... it’s scent" - both its are possessives, not contractions. Otherwise, nice flow to your story. LyndonLynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11998346902027037420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146179771012870882006-04-27T19:16:00.000-04:002006-04-27T19:16:00.000-04:00Very nice. I like how you focused on the picture ...Very nice. I like how you focused on the picture showing how imagination can see what isn't there.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146148805974980962006-04-27T10:40:00.000-04:002006-04-27T10:40:00.000-04:00Every childs nightmare wrapped up in 250 words. I...Every childs nightmare wrapped up in 250 words. I liked this.Bailey Stewarthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00639029254352011915noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146129721368604242006-04-27T05:22:00.000-04:002006-04-27T05:22:00.000-04:00I liked this one a lot. Especially the twisted-fai...I liked this one a lot. Especially the twisted-fairy-tales bit.JPhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01544406500208399638noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146097201510640472006-04-26T20:20:00.000-04:002006-04-26T20:20:00.000-04:00I agree with Robin, I like the haunting imagery. G...I agree with Robin, I like the haunting imagery. Good job. :)Jeffhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06106410070220667314noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146095477543785412006-04-26T19:51:00.000-04:002006-04-26T19:51:00.000-04:00Great job with the haunting imagery. Loved it.Great job with the haunting imagery. Loved it.Robinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17517751302431903689noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146082800927796192006-04-26T16:20:00.000-04:002006-04-26T16:20:00.000-04:00I like the poetic sound of this. Eerie and evocat...I like the poetic sound of this. Eerie and evocative.Terrihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03158421102740382411noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146078859667621772006-04-26T15:14:00.000-04:002006-04-26T15:14:00.000-04:00Nice eerie touch and a good example of the pattern...Nice eerie touch and a good example of the patterns he sees with the use of pigs chasing the wolf bit..<BR/>Would like to see"images of the loved and the despised alike."<BR/>And "the wind blows...the clouds move...the bushes sway..." to make it more definite.<BR/>Really liked the smoke hanging in the hallway too.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146076027557017972006-04-26T14:27:00.000-04:002006-04-26T14:27:00.000-04:00My imagination followed yours into the painting. V...My imagination followed yours into the painting. Very good.Erik Ivan Jameshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05564245949077955844noreply@blogger.com