tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post114610211596012032..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #27Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146586908584124152006-05-02T12:21:00.000-04:002006-05-02T12:21:00.000-04:00Forrest, an intriguing idea. A small peep hole op...Forrest, an intriguing idea. A small peep hole opens into another time. Very nice use of physics too! I caught the pin-hole camera effect in the inverted images.<BR/><BR/>Good marks for pacing and storytelling.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146240181934722452006-04-28T12:03:00.000-04:002006-04-28T12:03:00.000-04:00Gripping scene there.Gripping scene there.Bhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146195102014134812006-04-27T23:31:00.000-04:002006-04-27T23:31:00.000-04:00My take was that he was watching a 19th century sc...My take was that he was watching a 19th century scene, snapped back to reality, tried again but the scene had changed. Sort of a time portal a la Star Trek experience. I still wouldn't want to go to sleep that night. Good descriptive voice. Work on the ending a bit to help the reader transition with you, but over all nicely done. LyndonLynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11998346902027037420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146169490053874302006-04-27T16:24:00.000-04:002006-04-27T16:24:00.000-04:00I snuck another one past you both! This was him lo...I snuck another one past you both! This was him looking through a hole in the wallpaper into the "next room" and seeing the aftermath of a murder, only to come back to himself as NYPD Blue's theme music played on the TV. And more importantly, the wall he was looking through was the hall wall. So he couldn't have been looking through the wallpaper into anything but sheetrock.<BR/><BR/>Decidedly paranormal. Call the paramedics. Grab a parachute. It's a parable. Sorry to have confused you!<BR/><BR/>ForrestFor The Treeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14843514742081569820noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146167541414357472006-04-27T15:52:00.000-04:002006-04-27T15:52:00.000-04:00This comment has been removed by a blog administrator.For The Treeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14843514742081569820noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146137004635269142006-04-27T07:23:00.000-04:002006-04-27T07:23:00.000-04:00I agree with Bernita, confused. I was doing fine r...I agree with Bernita, confused. I was doing fine right up to the ending. I also agree, vivid description. You do that very well.Erik Ivan Jameshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05564245949077955844noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146132300550494212006-04-27T06:05:00.000-04:002006-04-27T06:05:00.000-04:00Vivid description but I'm confused... is this an o...Vivid description but I'm confused... is this an optical illusion or a paranormal incident?Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.com