tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post114662101079202032..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Twenty-Three in MotionJason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger18125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146890492340562172006-05-06T00:41:00.000-04:002006-05-06T00:41:00.000-04:00Good luck, Jason! Ann Marie has some great artwork...Good luck, Jason! Ann Marie has some great artwork to choose from.<BR/><BR/>I tried poetry, but readers would have made more sense of a drunken monkey than what I was writing. You, however, have done a fine job.<BR/><BR/>I agree with Bernita about the "fumes of laughter..." Noise pollution has never sounded so poetic.Floodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14341265651121116197noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146886486635111612006-05-05T23:34:00.000-04:002006-05-05T23:34:00.000-04:00Cate, I'm humbled. =) If I've done that for you,...Cate, I'm humbled. =) If I've done that for you, then this poem has been a great success.<BR/><BR/>Lluvia, welcome to The Clarity of Night! The compliment is much appreciated. I very much hope to see you back!<BR/><BR/>Ann Marie, poetry isn't the easiest creation for me. ;) On short notice, I could do something brief, but not something over 100 words. I'll have to rely on my effort here. Thanks for the invite, though!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146868196579025632006-05-05T18:29:00.000-04:002006-05-05T18:29:00.000-04:00Hi Jason. Someone entered with several pieces and...Hi Jason. Someone entered with several pieces and I did not limit the entries. Whip up another one you too. I am contacting everyone because this just happened. <BR/><BR/>Ann MarieAnn Marie Simardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17940225347124201538noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146867288584436102006-05-05T18:14:00.000-04:002006-05-05T18:14:00.000-04:00I love this poem!I love this poem!sandrahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02191006536623459661noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146837782915588892006-05-05T10:03:00.000-04:002006-05-05T10:03:00.000-04:00Your poem is fabulous, Jason. I feel the clipped, ...Your poem is fabulous, Jason. I feel the clipped, efficient swaying of the train, the sounds of the people and the engine and the stopping. Then, beyond that, a deeper layer of heaviness and emotion. Beautifully done! Good luck!Catehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10202276151927596999noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146771923763528012006-05-04T15:45:00.000-04:002006-05-04T15:45:00.000-04:00Bhaswati, much appreciated! It's my journey from ...Bhaswati, much appreciated! It's my journey from the city to the 'burbs.<BR/><BR/>Kelly, just keeping you on your toes. :D<BR/><BR/>Scott, that's alright. It's better to have a piece you're satisfied with.<BR/><BR/>Bernita, thanks. :) Sometimes it really is a blast to weave those tasty phrases.<BR/><BR/>Melissa, this poem is about the feelings I have coming down from a social event.<BR/><BR/>Terri, a fellow train commuter! Peace on, sister. ;)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146769815016558252006-05-04T15:10:00.000-04:002006-05-04T15:10:00.000-04:00I identify wholeheartedly with this - it's like yo...I identify wholeheartedly with this - it's like you took a peek into my mind because it describes me on the train to & from work.<BR/>"I'm feigning sleep<BR/>Swirling in music<BR/>Burdened with memories..."<BR/><BR/>Great work.Terrihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03158421102740382411noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146767246705461992006-05-04T14:27:00.000-04:002006-05-04T14:27:00.000-04:00I'd have to echo Bernita - "Swimming in fumesof la...I'd have to echo Bernita - "Swimming in fumes<BR/>of laughter and conversation." is quite powerful.Melissa Amateishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16086267508858187716noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146755154070435902006-05-04T11:05:00.000-04:002006-05-04T11:05:00.000-04:00"fumes of laughter and conversation"Such a good in..."fumes of laughter and conversation"<BR/>Such a good inclusive image.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146744654922408672006-05-04T08:10:00.000-04:002006-05-04T08:10:00.000-04:00I don't think I'm going to make it. I started a s...I don't think I'm going to make it. I started a short story that will exceed the word limit, and I don't want to rush it.Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146722899117837272006-05-04T02:08:00.000-04:002006-05-04T02:08:00.000-04:00Great writing, Jason! A new side we hadn't yet see...Great writing, Jason! A new side we hadn't yet seen. Good luck!! =DKelly (Lynn) Parrahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04827605655761900263noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146719266477594062006-05-04T01:07:00.000-04:002006-05-04T01:07:00.000-04:00Very nice, Jason. Taut, stark, and so very urban. ...Very nice, Jason. Taut, stark, and so very urban. I am sure a lot of us relate to this.Bhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146707146970246432006-05-03T21:45:00.000-04:002006-05-03T21:45:00.000-04:00Scott, definitely enter if you can. Ann Marie pra...Scott, definitely enter if you can. Ann Marie practically exudes poetry. I'm looking forward to seeing what folks send in!<BR/><BR/>Ann Marie, thanks for stopping by! I know you can't speak until you finish judging. ;)<BR/><BR/>BeadinggalinMS, so cool this struck a chord for you! I left a note for you on your blog. I hope the wedding is wonderful! :D<BR/><BR/>Mermaid, great comparison! I once wrote a scene from the perspective of a car rearview mirror. It does give a fascinating perspective. A forward image of the past as it slips away.<BR/><BR/>Martyn, thank you! It's so important in poetry to push the boundaries of image and expression. It's nice when I tap into a little of that magic.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146702443515798322006-05-03T20:27:00.000-04:002006-05-03T20:27:00.000-04:00"Paste reflections of broken mirrors behind my eye..."Paste reflections of broken mirrors behind my eyes" is a particularly effective line.Martynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17678628763585554800noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146680889488357712006-05-03T14:28:00.000-04:002006-05-03T14:28:00.000-04:00'Paste reflectionsOf broken mirrorsBehind my eyes....'Paste reflections<BR/>Of broken mirrors<BR/>Behind my eyes.<BR/>Whisper the truths<BR/>I know I must hear'<BR/><BR/>This reminds me of the symbolic rearview mirror in cars. We drive and see the blurred images of the past. We try to hold the mottled distortions of color and air in our hands, in our minds, only to let them slip through our fingers and blow back into the wind of nothing.<BR/><BR/>Hey, I think you inspired me to write something:)mermaidhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15895749686844178804noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146666816890106272006-05-03T10:33:00.000-04:002006-05-03T10:33:00.000-04:00Jason your submission is awesome. I really like t...Jason your submission is awesome. I really like this. Your words describe how I have been feeling this week. <BR/>I will be MIA the rest of the week and weekend. Wedding is on Saturday. I wanted to drop by and say HI and see ya later! :)<BR/>p.s.<BR/>Is it possible for the mother of the groom to have cold feet? haahaaLindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08665167693563457389noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146666100266802642006-05-03T10:21:00.000-04:002006-05-03T10:21:00.000-04:00Hi.... thanks... I cannot comment but I'd love to....Hi.... thanks... I cannot comment but I'd love to... I will link back soon with everyone, just waiting a little. <BR/><BR/>Thanks<BR/><BR/>Ann MarieAnn Marie Simardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17940225347124201538noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1146657701659167112006-05-03T08:01:00.000-04:002006-05-03T08:01:00.000-04:00Cool Jason, thanks for the link. Now I need to ch...Cool Jason, thanks for the link. Now I need to churn the idea mill. Two days. Tick tock...Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.com