tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post115098099977189238..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #8Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger24125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151954812361682982006-07-03T15:26:00.000-04:002006-07-03T15:26:00.000-04:00Jason,Thank you for your comments. This was a fun ...Jason,<BR/><BR/>Thank you for your comments. This was a fun contest and a fun story to write. <BR/><BR/>I find it interesting that you say "she." A few people have asked the sex of the protag. To me the character was male. Perhaps I need to add more clues the next time I attempt a story like this. <BR/><BR/>Anyway, thanks! Can't wait for August.Jaye Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09407478042834459126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151941208891076462006-07-03T11:40:00.000-04:002006-07-03T11:40:00.000-04:00Jaye, very nice pacing! I love the setting of the...Jaye, very nice pacing! I love the setting of the scene by peering in the window of this character, then showing she's an instrument of horror. Wonderful storytelling! A high scorer.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151564222267560592006-06-29T02:57:00.000-04:002006-06-29T02:57:00.000-04:00Excellent! What I think you did really well was to...Excellent! <BR/><BR/>What I think you did really well was to show the bad guy as he is in his own mind -- completely rational and logical in the way he approaches his insanity. <BR/><BR/>And I loved the "unnecessary flourishes" bit. Nothing like laughing while you're being creeped out.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151558699991776492006-06-29T01:24:00.000-04:002006-06-29T01:24:00.000-04:00KL: Thank you for the compliment about Silence. I ...KL: Thank you for the compliment about Silence. I think the monsters that inhabit the real world are far scarier than those that are imagined.Jaye Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09407478042834459126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151545099162140442006-06-28T21:38:00.000-04:002006-06-28T21:38:00.000-04:00Wow! This is terrifying as in "Silence of the Lam...Wow! This is terrifying as in <BR/>"Silence of the Lambs" terrifying. The guy was so "normal" in the beginning....but guess that is how it is. Really impressive story/writing...but disturbing.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151508033572776632006-06-28T11:20:00.000-04:002006-06-28T11:20:00.000-04:00Thanks, Roy. But I'd hate to attempt the art of th...Thanks, Roy. But I'd hate to attempt the art of the long sentence, after all I've seen the master at work. <BR/><BR/>JLB, thanks! Glad you liked it.Jaye Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09407478042834459126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151506190595109232006-06-28T10:49:00.000-04:002006-06-28T10:49:00.000-04:00That was totally excellent!That was totally excellent!Jade L Blackwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15321787298101881675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151464336068294022006-06-27T23:12:00.000-04:002006-06-27T23:12:00.000-04:00I like it--creepy, alright--but your sentences are...I like it--creepy, alright--but your sentences are too short. :)Royhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13374537094067415065noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151347735872260592006-06-26T14:48:00.000-04:002006-06-26T14:48:00.000-04:00Thanks, everyone! Cavan, I haven't read him. I saw...Thanks, everyone! <BR/><BR/>Cavan, I haven't read him. I saw the American Psycho movie though. It's odd you mentioned Ellis here. He's been coming up a lot lately in other areas. Perhaps I need to check him out.Jaye Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09407478042834459126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151343358415027592006-06-26T13:35:00.000-04:002006-06-26T13:35:00.000-04:00Hey, if this had more gore and a bunch of disaffec...Hey, if this had more gore and a bunch of disaffected people saying how great they looked, it could be in a Bret Easton Ellis novel. :)<BR/><BR/>Good job. I liked it.Cavanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08510431598334392123noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151279372847614682006-06-25T19:49:00.000-04:002006-06-25T19:49:00.000-04:00I like how this guy sounds so normal at first then...I like how this guy sounds so normal at first then the thrashing starts and you pull out the terror. Nicely done!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151241959760373762006-06-25T09:25:00.000-04:002006-06-25T09:25:00.000-04:00Ouch!What an ending!Flowing and gripping.Good stuf...Ouch!<BR/>What an ending!<BR/>Flowing and gripping.<BR/>Good stuff.Mellyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17461471128865537538noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151201480212012372006-06-24T22:11:00.000-04:002006-06-24T22:11:00.000-04:00Good to see things from the POV of a negative char...Good to see things from the POV of a negative character. Nicely done.Bhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151179705913918732006-06-24T16:08:00.000-04:002006-06-24T16:08:00.000-04:00great stuff--creepygreat stuff--creepyAnthony Rapinohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11581208296144295224noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151177006559052492006-06-24T15:23:00.000-04:002006-06-24T15:23:00.000-04:00Thanks, Jeff and Scott. I'm thinking a fear of sca...Thanks, Jeff and Scott. I'm thinking a fear of scalping isn't so irrational. Although I'm not sure it happens too oftent hese days. But you never know.Jaye Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09407478042834459126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151148727174387462006-06-24T07:32:00.000-04:002006-06-24T07:32:00.000-04:00You know, I have an irrational fear of being scalp...You know, I have an irrational fear of being scalped. Thanks Jaye. I like the pacing of this piece, how you allude to the pioneers, then take us back there at the end.Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151145916176031192006-06-24T06:45:00.000-04:002006-06-24T06:45:00.000-04:00Great work, Jaye. I like the pioneer of pain line ...Great work, Jaye. I like the pioneer of pain line too.Jeffhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06106410070220667314noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151092806361442412006-06-23T16:00:00.000-04:002006-06-23T16:00:00.000-04:00Emeraldcite, glad you liked it.Forrest, you're pun...Emeraldcite, glad you liked it.<BR/><BR/>Forrest, you're puntastic. <BR/><BR/>Jim, it is fun. I'm taking an online class about predators with a forensic psychologist, and I think the influence is clear here.Jaye Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09407478042834459126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151071810135245062006-06-23T10:10:00.000-04:002006-06-23T10:10:00.000-04:00Ah, but the dark stuff is fun. Well done!Ah, but the dark stuff is fun. Well done!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151038017916515702006-06-23T00:46:00.000-04:002006-06-23T00:46:00.000-04:00Very hairy ending, Jaye.Very hairy ending, Jaye.For The Treeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14843514742081569820noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151036936830609202006-06-23T00:28:00.000-04:002006-06-23T00:28:00.000-04:00Very nice work. Great feel to the story!Very nice work. Great feel to the story!emeraldcitehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11495241111424476230noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1150987120884539662006-06-22T10:38:00.000-04:002006-06-22T10:38:00.000-04:00Ha! Thanks, Jer. Glad you liked it. I have no idea...Ha! Thanks, Jer. Glad you liked it. I have no idea where the dark stuff comes from. It only happens in short stories. My novels are romantic comedies and rarely involve scalping, poison or torture. Although, I'm sure some agents and editors might argue that last point.Jaye Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09407478042834459126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1150986444368471972006-06-22T10:27:00.000-04:002006-06-22T10:27:00.000-04:00Excellent--scary and weird. Love it. And in your p...Excellent--scary and weird. Love it. And in your picture you look so normal. JerJerilyn Dufresne, authorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02720391625949782016noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1150981797921772472006-06-22T09:09:00.000-04:002006-06-22T09:09:00.000-04:00Pioneer of pain Love that. Now I have to think abo...<I>Pioneer of pain</I> <BR/><BR/>Love that. Now I have to think about why she needs scalping.Floodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14341265651121116197noreply@blogger.com