tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post115117949863578452..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #19Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger29125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1152184223562329722006-07-06T07:10:00.000-04:002006-07-06T07:10:00.000-04:00Thank you, Jason, for taking the time to point out...Thank you, Jason, for taking the time to point out what worked in the story. Now, I will look for further feedback from you to know what didn't. LOL. <BR/><BR/>Thanks a bunch!Bhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151951466085623562006-07-03T14:31:00.000-04:002006-07-03T14:31:00.000-04:00Sury, the descriptive distance from the violence w...Sury, the descriptive distance from the violence was chilling. Just like the cold emotions of the separatist. High marks for the power of the dramatic impact.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151722003501285392006-06-30T22:46:00.000-04:002006-06-30T22:46:00.000-04:00Thank you, Fran. I appreciate the kind words :)Thank you, Fran. I appreciate the kind words :)Bhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151710747562350382006-06-30T19:39:00.000-04:002006-06-30T19:39:00.000-04:00Great work. In particular, I love your punchy begi...Great work. In particular, I love your punchy beginning. A two-word command, followed by the strong image of "Her words stiffened his limbs every evening."<BR/><BR/>Great writing!Fran Piperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08177027484914337117noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151587874360190082006-06-29T09:31:00.000-04:002006-06-29T09:31:00.000-04:00Thanks, Elisha. I treasure your compliment because...Thanks, Elisha. I treasure your compliment because I loved your story :)Bhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151563913120059072006-06-29T02:51:00.000-04:002006-06-29T02:51:00.000-04:00I absolutely agree with others who admire the midn...I absolutely agree with others who admire the midnight theme, especially as it ties into the ending.<BR/><BR/>Wonderful.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151548046671921492006-06-28T22:27:00.000-04:002006-06-28T22:27:00.000-04:00Thanks, KLG, for the kind words. The world is prec...Thanks, KLG, for the kind words. The world is precarious, indeed, and the stories can't remain aloof from what happens either. <BR/><BR/>Glad you liked reading it :)Bhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151543070466846112006-06-28T21:04:00.000-04:002006-06-28T21:04:00.000-04:00This is a stunning piece. It is intelligently wri...This is a stunning piece. It is intelligently written and emotionally charged. Unfortunately, all too real in our precarious world.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151518866519753792006-06-28T14:21:00.000-04:002006-06-28T14:21:00.000-04:00Thanks, Anna!Thanks, Anna!Bhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151517560900054532006-06-28T13:59:00.000-04:002006-06-28T13:59:00.000-04:00Love when a piece starts with dialogue. Kept the ...Love when a piece starts with dialogue. Kept the pace up<BR/>kept the tension<BR/>I enjoyed !!annahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07274795863426882004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151472019645068492006-06-28T01:20:00.000-04:002006-06-28T01:20:00.000-04:00Thanks, Linda and JLB :)Thanks, Linda and JLB :)Bhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151458364506975242006-06-27T21:32:00.000-04:002006-06-27T21:32:00.000-04:00Well done! I love all the dark imagery - the piec...Well done! I love all the dark imagery - the piece truly feels like "it's always midnight" there.Jade L Blackwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15321787298101881675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151438999809440222006-06-27T16:09:00.000-04:002006-06-27T16:09:00.000-04:00Its always midnight here. So sad. Great story.Its always midnight here. So sad. Great story.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151430150011130942006-06-27T13:42:00.000-04:002006-06-27T13:42:00.000-04:00Amra, your compliment blows me away (blush). Your ...<B>Amra</B>, your compliment blows me away (blush). Your entry is great too!<BR/><BR/><B>Cesar</B>, thank you so much :)Bhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151382627204658662006-06-27T00:30:00.000-04:002006-06-27T00:30:00.000-04:00Great piece, Sury. Sad but really well told. Kudos...Great piece, Sury. Sad but really well told. Kudos!cesarcarloshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06521521008555753588noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151340108520256692006-06-26T12:41:00.000-04:002006-06-26T12:41:00.000-04:00Good to know I have company, Scott. LOLThanks, Jim...Good to know I have company, <B>Scott</B>. LOL<BR/><BR/>Thanks, <B>Jim</B>. <BR/><BR/><B>Bekbek</B>, that's a neat interpretation. To be honest, I didn't think that deep while writing that sentence, but it works!Bhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151332348607456022006-06-26T10:32:00.000-04:002006-06-26T10:32:00.000-04:00I love this visual: "three gun shots twisted his g...I love this visual: "three gun shots twisted his gait into a red rivulet." I immediately envisioned a twisted red cord, which in my mind tied/connected all the events/conditions together.<BR/><BR/>And they are all connected, usually. New technologies, new struggles, new expressions of old struggles.bekbekhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17935766604154823539noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151328613849361592006-06-26T09:30:00.000-04:002006-06-26T09:30:00.000-04:00I liked the psychological analysis built into the ...I liked the psychological analysis built into the story - we reassure ourselves about dangerous situations in order to cope with our fears and anxieties. Nicely played.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151321261996628622006-06-26T07:27:00.000-04:002006-06-26T07:27:00.000-04:00There is no spell checker in the comments section ...There is no spell checker in the comments section Bhaswati. I get busted all the time!Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151296308637067612006-06-26T00:31:00.000-04:002006-06-26T00:31:00.000-04:00Thanks, Jer and Melly. And sorry for the typo I ma...Thanks, Jer and Melly. <BR/><BR/>And sorry for the typo I made while replying to Scott. It should be "your guess," obviously. Ouch. :PBhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151289740233634062006-06-25T22:42:00.000-04:002006-06-25T22:42:00.000-04:00The overshadowing was accompanying the piece from ...The overshadowing was accompanying the piece from the beginning.<BR/>Very well executed!Mellyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17461471128865537538noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151270668363978252006-06-25T17:24:00.000-04:002006-06-25T17:24:00.000-04:00Wow. Excellent piece. JerWow. Excellent piece. JerJerilyn Dufresne, authorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02720391625949782016noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151243611847411522006-06-25T09:53:00.000-04:002006-06-25T09:53:00.000-04:00Thanks everyone. I appreciate all the kind words. ...Thanks everyone. I appreciate all the kind words. I loved your respective entries, too. Those of you who've submitted so far that is. Good luck to all of us!<BR/><BR/><B>Scott</B>, you guess is correct. The piece is drawn from a real incident. Years ago, when I was in school, a terrorist movement demanding a separate state of Khalistan was going on. The "terrorists" invaded our neighborhood and adjoning areas on the eve of a festival, killing several people. I was present at a venue they targetted. <BR/><BR/>Nothing happened to me or my family. We survived. Some of our acquaintances were less lucky, though.<BR/><BR/><B>Desiderata</B>, yes, we live amid an ever unpredictable atmosphere, don't we?Bhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151243410560167042006-06-25T09:50:00.000-04:002006-06-25T09:50:00.000-04:00I can empathise, neat meeting point -- living in s...I can empathise, neat meeting point -- living in strife-torn countries has its live hazards, yeah, back in my "terrortry" too.chong y lhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10365847893009738913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151236261397285092006-06-25T07:51:00.000-04:002006-06-25T07:51:00.000-04:00This piece hints at a political struggle in India?...This piece hints at a political struggle in India? I'd like to know more about this. So sad.Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.com