tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post115146750382896267..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #51Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1152072689825474412006-07-05T00:11:00.000-04:002006-07-05T00:11:00.000-04:00Jason, thanks. I was worried that it wasn't edgy o...Jason, thanks. I was worried that it wasn't edgy or shocking enough. I'm glad you liked it.writingblindhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16102434762522512019noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1152067494774023292006-07-04T22:44:00.000-04:002006-07-04T22:44:00.000-04:00Rebecca, congrats on the honorable mention!I like ...Rebecca, congrats on the honorable mention!<BR/><BR/>I like the covergence of the main character and the deer--this mistake of both. The consequences of that mistake are different. Guilt for her, death for the deer. Well written and paced. High marks overall.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151546628252836742006-06-28T22:03:00.000-04:002006-06-28T22:03:00.000-04:00Rebecca,"a small moment but one with consequences"...Rebecca,<BR/><BR/>"a small moment but one with consequences",,,,that line alone grabbed my attention the first time. Using it again was even that much better. Using it to show a paralell between the deer and the driver and the consequences of thier actions was flat out awesome. Great piece, thanks for sharing<BR/><BR/>INKAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151544622823631072006-06-28T21:30:00.000-04:002006-06-28T21:30:00.000-04:00Such vivid description and intense emotion with a ...Such vivid description and intense emotion with a handful of words. Very well done.Lisa Jordanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16334253815212707025noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151541149861269162006-06-28T20:32:00.000-04:002006-06-28T20:32:00.000-04:00A really talented, powerful way to capture a life ...A really talented, powerful way to capture a life changing instant. Well done.cesarcarloshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06521521008555753588noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151535661940630582006-06-28T19:01:00.000-04:002006-06-28T19:01:00.000-04:00You conveyed the emotions of this woman so realist...You conveyed the emotions of this woman so realistically through your writing. Living in NEPA I can't tell you how many times I have hit an animal. Honestly, that last paragraph reminds me of...me, when I hit an animal. The whole story rings true. Good writing.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151512949070191222006-06-28T12:42:00.000-04:002006-06-28T12:42:00.000-04:00Please don't sell yourself short. The writing is g...Please don't sell yourself short. The writing is good and the emotions strongly conveyed, despite the word limit. Great job.Bhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151508922917414192006-06-28T11:35:00.000-04:002006-06-28T11:35:00.000-04:00I loved it, Rebecca. You did a great job of cyclin...I loved it, Rebecca. You did a great job of cycling back to the original photo. Very nicely done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151506550104014512006-06-28T10:55:00.000-04:002006-06-28T10:55:00.000-04:00Thanks, everyone, for being so nice. I've read so ...Thanks, everyone, for being so nice. I've read so many other great stories in this contest that I'm not sure if mine can really compare. And Sue, thanks for giving me that idea about repeating the line again.writingblindhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16102434762522512019noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151505365171388062006-06-28T10:36:00.000-04:002006-06-28T10:36:00.000-04:00Well written - I think everyone can relate to this...Well written - I think everyone can relate to this piece either as an observer or a participant.Jade L Blackwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15321787298101881675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151504926304216942006-06-28T10:28:00.000-04:002006-06-28T10:28:00.000-04:00That line: "A small moment, but one with conseque...That line: <BR/><BR/>"A small moment, but one with consequences." <BR/> <BR/>It appears twice and as I read through I half expected it to be the final line of the story, though I do like that line: "she knelt in the snow and paid her penance to the moon."Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151500062975621982006-06-28T09:07:00.000-04:002006-06-28T09:07:00.000-04:00Uh, no you don't. I wouldn't bother to say anythi...Uh, no you don't. I wouldn't bother to say anything otherwise. I can totally relate to this piece, which is well written. There is nothing more painful than watching an animal die that you have killed.Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151468509910926662006-06-28T00:21:00.000-04:002006-06-28T00:21:00.000-04:00Yeah, yeah, yeah, I suck. Thanks, though, for pret...Yeah, yeah, yeah, I suck. Thanks, though, for pretending I don't.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151468280005363042006-06-28T00:18:00.000-04:002006-06-28T00:18:00.000-04:00I felt her helplessness at not being able to do an...I felt her helplessness at not being able to do anything the bring the moment back for the deer.<BR/><BR/>Touching, Rebecca.Floodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14341265651121116197noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1151468148359585602006-06-28T00:15:00.000-04:002006-06-28T00:15:00.000-04:00Great job, Rebecca! I really liked this one.Great job, Rebecca! I really liked this one.Jaye Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09407478042834459126noreply@blogger.com