tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post115673483202644244..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #60Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1157721700989475642006-09-08T09:21:00.000-04:002006-09-08T09:21:00.000-04:00You did a great job giving the voice a child's per...You did a great job giving the voice a child's perspective. The opening lines were brilliant! Great hook. Good marks overall.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1157125983522001612006-09-01T11:53:00.000-04:002006-09-01T11:53:00.000-04:00You put us in his head...Well done.You put us in his head...<BR/>Well done.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156829134612123282006-08-29T01:25:00.000-04:002006-08-29T01:25:00.000-04:00The tension in this piece is so raw and palpable. ...The tension in this piece is so raw and palpable. I was there with the kid, rooting for him. Oh, the agony of disobeying parents just once and having to pay for it. Well done!Bhaswatihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15397144389576029618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156796510161715472006-08-28T16:21:00.000-04:002006-08-28T16:21:00.000-04:00The story moved realistically. I like how you ende...The story moved realistically. I like how you ended the story...no "happily ever after" ending ...but room for one. One never knows in life how it is going to go. Good story.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156793281816653272006-08-28T15:28:00.000-04:002006-08-28T15:28:00.000-04:00A child's nightmare-- finding out that the parent'...A child's nightmare-- finding out that the parent's were right after all.<BR/><BR/>Nice last line.Marcailhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00305200432784995636noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156788461985626912006-08-28T14:07:00.000-04:002006-08-28T14:07:00.000-04:00what emotion and energy! you conveyed his panic a...what emotion and energy! you conveyed his panic and fear so well. <BR/><BR/>the last line was great. <BR/><BR/>good job!anne frasierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13044828332429421657noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156780933791056712006-08-28T12:02:00.000-04:002006-08-28T12:02:00.000-04:00I too can't think of anything more scary than a ch...I too can't think of anything more scary than a child trapped like that. I can relate to his not wanting to feel his leg to see how bad it really is. Yikes!<BR/>good stuff!annahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07274795863426882004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156769841046258132006-08-28T08:57:00.000-04:002006-08-28T08:57:00.000-04:00This actually reminds me a Rescue 911 call I saw s...This actually reminds me a Rescue 911 call I saw several years ago. A terrifying thought to think of a child trapped underground like that.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156747803865710932006-08-28T02:50:00.000-04:002006-08-28T02:50:00.000-04:00Good story, nice descriptions."Surely, that would ...Good story, nice descriptions.<BR/><BR/>"Surely, that would make it easier for God to hear"<BR/><BR/>I really liked that line.<BR/><BR/>BDbriliantdonkeyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05159881776835603748noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156741252830016492006-08-28T01:00:00.000-04:002006-08-28T01:00:00.000-04:00Terrifying. Scarier to me than the murder ones be...Terrifying. Scarier to me than the murder ones because it's a fear I can relate to. So sad. Love the ending.<BR/><BR/>Funny sidenote though, the kid I kept picturing was a scrawny curly-haired redhead because of the Rafe on Survivor a couple of seasons back. LOLJonihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18109855683749612076noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156738465106025292006-08-28T00:14:00.000-04:002006-08-28T00:14:00.000-04:00Horrifying. This taps into a healthy fear bred of ...Horrifying. This taps into a healthy fear bred of all those "farm accident" cautionary films we were shown in school when I was a kid. Ugh!<BR/><BR/>Well done!bekbekhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17935766604154823539noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1156736258357836682006-08-27T23:37:00.000-04:002006-08-27T23:37:00.000-04:00Oh man, this is my biggest nightmare come true. H...Oh man, this is my biggest nightmare come true. Heartbreaking too that it's about a kid.Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.com