tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post1163669966690689870..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #19Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-36531009391409814032008-07-28T12:06:00.000-04:002008-07-28T12:06:00.000-04:00Don't walk, run!This is excellent! I can hear the...Don't walk, run!<BR/><BR/>This is excellent! I can hear the mother's voice so clearly-- you've captured her perfectly.Ainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08402176500997528105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-89168577517027367562008-07-23T23:43:00.000-04:002008-07-23T23:43:00.000-04:00I'm suppressing the urge to run. Run really fast ...I'm suppressing the urge to run. Run really fast and in any direction. That was super effective. Very authentic dialog and progression. High marks.<BR/><BR/>Congratulations on the Honorable Mention!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22352971160908315202008-07-23T09:34:00.000-04:002008-07-23T09:34:00.000-04:00Everyone -- Thank you so much for your supportive ...Everyone -- Thank you so much for your supportive feedback. I love how each commenter seems to have a unique viewpoint on what I have set out in front of you.Posol'stvo the Medvedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00573435137467134333noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-34489965579293091302008-07-19T21:15:00.000-04:002008-07-19T21:15:00.000-04:00This story is so packed with emotion. Great portra...This story is so packed with emotion. Great portrayal of the addict/parent and the damage that type of relationship can do, without the child ever saying a word.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-64948217410860018182008-07-19T09:57:00.000-04:002008-07-19T09:57:00.000-04:00so much said by implication, love it!so much said by implication, love it!laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-57166176573577563332008-07-18T18:28:00.000-04:002008-07-18T18:28:00.000-04:00I already commented, but once again the Blogger go...I already commented, but once again the Blogger gods ate it. Humph.<BR/><BR/>Take away the booze and that's my mom and brother. Very sad tale.Bethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-15062189362979380092008-07-17T15:52:00.000-04:002008-07-17T15:52:00.000-04:00I really like this. So much about your narrator c...I really like this. So much about your narrator comes through in how she thinks about her son. You deftly created two fully developed characters but only showed us one side. Love it.Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83516441256368630392008-07-17T08:32:00.000-04:002008-07-17T08:32:00.000-04:00It took a while for me to make it to this entry, b...It took a while for me to make it to this entry, but I'm sure glad I did. Great portrayal of the characters both. I could see the alcoholic and pathetic mother, and the kid trapped forever in taking care of her. Moving and very well done. You can be proud of this one!Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-30772077343827833982008-07-17T01:45:00.000-04:002008-07-17T01:45:00.000-04:00omg PLEEEZ don't let me be a mom like that...omg PLEEEZ don't let me be a mom like that...AngelConradiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09423318903817661244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44887162704482729292008-07-16T13:09:00.000-04:002008-07-16T13:09:00.000-04:00So sad. So disturbing. As much as I feel for the m...So sad. So disturbing. As much as I feel for the mother, I pray the son leaves. He can't save her. He needs to save himself. "Go....just go...anywhere but there."<BR/>(I know that sounds cruel. My heart does go out to her. Alcoholism is awful.)<BR/><BR/>Great writing.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-20218229736943028732008-07-14T17:16:00.000-04:002008-07-14T17:16:00.000-04:00This monologue reveals a lot about things this pie...This monologue reveals a lot about things this piece does not actually tell.<BR/>A great entry, and how strange that this was also inspired by the very same photograph.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-60172374519952879372008-07-14T12:20:00.000-04:002008-07-14T12:20:00.000-04:00Begs the question 'if you have to ask, you'll neve...Begs the question 'if you have to ask, you'll never know'.BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-41150165007940333862008-07-14T10:07:00.000-04:002008-07-14T10:07:00.000-04:00Pos - Congratulaions! So well written. This entr...Pos - Congratulaions! So well written. This entry will haunt me for a while.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-78617977208539403942008-07-13T23:11:00.000-04:002008-07-13T23:11:00.000-04:00OMG! I just want to yell to the son (I assumed it ...OMG! I just want to yell to the son (I assumed it was a son...) to run! Leave! Go to college out of state!. I love the way you wrote only one side of the conversation. It made me feel like I was the MC and she was speaking directly to me.<BR/><BR/>Nicely done!Sheri Perl-Oshinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08025716805041579831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-47633392194902064132008-07-13T17:35:00.000-04:002008-07-13T17:35:00.000-04:00The plea of a lonely alcoholic mother,my heart goe...The plea of a lonely alcoholic mother,my heart goes out to her.<BR/><BR/>Beautiful verse!Sameera Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05249126041067834608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58945584462457793722008-07-13T17:11:00.000-04:002008-07-13T17:11:00.000-04:00aw, shucks (blushes). thanks.Odd what a motorcycle...aw, shucks (blushes). thanks.<BR/><BR/>Odd what a motorcycle inspires you to. How many stories about death and suicide are there in this batch? Having ridden quite a bit, I just couldn't go there.Posol'stvo the Medvedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00573435137467134333noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2002204471348946142008-07-13T16:44:00.000-04:002008-07-13T16:44:00.000-04:00Sad portryal of an alcoholic and her child. I cou...Sad portryal of an alcoholic and her child. I could picture the whole vignette. It drew up some very disturbing feelings in me. <BR/><BR/>Well done.My crazy lifehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05631522969768435267noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-23268594060132353352008-07-13T16:42:00.000-04:002008-07-13T16:42:00.000-04:00Good imagery and description. I "saw" the whole s...Good imagery and description. I "saw" the whole scene. Well done. I love this entry!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22484690677176178432008-07-13T16:27:00.000-04:002008-07-13T16:27:00.000-04:00I agree wholeheartedly with Charles and Sarah, wh...I agree wholeheartedly with Charles and Sarah, what is amazing here is how you've managed to paint the character and life of the son, the one who never speaks. How he is imprisoned by guilt and manipulation by this needy, lazy, controlling mother. It's a painful picture you paint and you do it with great skill. So very very clever.<BR/><BR/>Well done.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83779351435606360512008-07-13T15:07:00.000-04:002008-07-13T15:07:00.000-04:00I second Charles--this is an amazingly adroit desc...I second Charles--this is an amazingly adroit description of the son, too. Very original take.<BR/><BR/>Her pain and neediness are going to eat him alive. I hope he gets out while he can. Those words could eventually suffocate him.<BR/><BR/>Strong and highly effective writing. I thought it was wonderful.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-26850542792908980692008-07-13T11:41:00.000-04:002008-07-13T11:41:00.000-04:00A lot of pain here. Interesting how I can see exa...A lot of pain here. Interesting how I can see exactly what the non-verbal character is doing and feeling despite you never showing them. Good stuff.Charles Gramlichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02052592247572253641noreply@blogger.com