tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post1252320816747413039..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #29Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger25125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-75166120445755717532011-07-29T08:02:48.825-04:002011-07-29T08:02:48.825-04:00Kind of horrifying, that moment. I see more death...Kind of horrifying, that moment. I see more death in that rebirth as memories are ripped away.<br /><br />Congrats on Forties Club!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39346960839336281702011-07-23T09:56:31.422-04:002011-07-23T09:56:31.422-04:00I really appreciate everyone's kind words. Th...I really appreciate everyone's kind words. Thank you to all who have been so generous with their comments.Claire Gillianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08389410834599445845noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-15227843851388286752011-07-23T05:53:28.750-04:002011-07-23T05:53:28.750-04:00Claire- I love that the developing foetus is compl...Claire- I love that the developing foetus is completely knowledgeable about its constant cycle of birth and rebirth. I also love that it has hopes for learning lessons this time - fully understanding that the life he is given will have hurdles that may not allow him to progress toward Nirvana. It's both beautiful and soul destroying. Your piece wil have me thinking for a long time to come.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-31752460724270361682011-07-22T21:19:11.594-04:002011-07-22T21:19:11.594-04:00I found the technical terms of moebius and heartbe...I found the technical terms of moebius and heartbeats, orientation, infinite space, to give this a SciFi feel and I liked the blend you've achieved of that with reincarnation.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14170148559429001125noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-57566252872844507552011-07-20T13:08:17.589-04:002011-07-20T13:08:17.589-04:00Well, if life is a Mobius strip, with no beginning...Well, if life is a Mobius strip, with no beginning or end, only the promise that God will make the final cut if we learn our lessons well enough, I'd like to have mine designed by Jean Giraud. <i> I can't do this again again!</i> That's a truth: <br /><br /> If my coming were up to me, I’d never be born<br />And if my going were on my accord, I’d go with scorn<br />Isn’t it better that in this world, so old and worn<br />Never to be born, neither stay, nor be away torn?<br /> <br />—Omar Khayyam<br /><br />Good writing and very thought provoking...Linda Ryan-Harperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15164148666810818891noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18131313380628589752011-07-20T07:20:50.538-04:002011-07-20T07:20:50.538-04:00I was entertained and amused by the story and your...I was entertained and amused by the story and your turns of phrase. Well done!Richard Levangiehttp://richardlevangie.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2546621011474218572011-07-19T16:00:23.176-04:002011-07-19T16:00:23.176-04:00The pain of birth goes both ways. Love the thought...The pain of birth goes both ways. Love the thoughts of past lives before the final push. ~Jana A.bluesugarpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14775769108087898456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33273088813075914262011-07-19T11:52:35.362-04:002011-07-19T11:52:35.362-04:00Thanks so much for the kind words.Thanks so much for the kind words.Claire Gillianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08389410834599445845noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58550412007265829612011-07-19T10:44:12.646-04:002011-07-19T10:44:12.646-04:00very cool and nicely done!very cool and nicely done!wrath999https://www.blogger.com/profile/10964105112015979524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18248091645963592322011-07-19T06:10:47.239-04:002011-07-19T06:10:47.239-04:00What a way to be born!! Excellent! Take care
xWhat a way to be born!! Excellent! Take care<br />xOld Kittyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13185547869183611159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1843378225282522112011-07-18T22:21:18.762-04:002011-07-18T22:21:18.762-04:00At first I thought old, and then with fingers and ...At first I thought old, and then with fingers and toes, I thought young... to find out..rebirth.<br /><br />Good job...<br /><br />Dottie :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08688849410604429533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-20610471815244286712011-07-18T21:28:24.984-04:002011-07-18T21:28:24.984-04:00Wonderful intro(intra?)spection, and I like how we...Wonderful intro(intra?)spection, and I like how well the voice sounds both old and young.<br /><br />I'm with Peter - the Mobius is an especially artful metaphor for this piece.Jade L Blackwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15321787298101881675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-11314958342659595982011-07-17T03:12:36.346-04:002011-07-17T03:12:36.346-04:00If only we could choose and not just have to take ...If only we could choose and not just have to take what we're given...fairyhedgehoghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14141089706966852951noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39158839807585268862011-07-17T00:45:37.031-04:002011-07-17T00:45:37.031-04:00Interesting that the memories of past life are sev...Interesting that the memories of past life are severed at birth, not at conception. You've done a good job of describing the state of transition--fear, anticipation, eagerness, reluctance. Mapping it onto a Mobius is a brilliant way to unify it. Nice work.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-17363655615050299622011-07-16T09:23:56.248-04:002011-07-16T09:23:56.248-04:00Like everyone said, it was predictable yet a wonde...Like everyone said, it was predictable yet a wonderful read.<br /><br />Thanks a lot for sharing.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-34680170741007117342011-07-16T00:20:46.429-04:002011-07-16T00:20:46.429-04:00Thank you all for your very kind comments. I'...Thank you all for your very kind comments. I'm glad it didn't turn out too obscure. I'd worried that it might. Cheers!Claire Gillianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08389410834599445845noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-60015639489077012262011-07-15T23:18:38.903-04:002011-07-15T23:18:38.903-04:00Makes me want to keep on reading, even after it ha...Makes me want to keep on reading, even after it has ended.Jam Lebrillahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18154153162691004541noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-41607448677533802042011-07-15T17:09:46.304-04:002011-07-15T17:09:46.304-04:00I love this...and dread it. :)I love this...and dread it. :)Preciehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05071233480999640713noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-69212415651164107202011-07-15T15:30:26.420-04:002011-07-15T15:30:26.420-04:00Your language is beautiful; it pulls your reader i...Your language is beautiful; it pulls your reader into your world, guiding them until the end. And what an interesting concept! I love the way you describe the beginning (which is also the end). Nice work.<br /><br />Thanks for sharing!Michele Zugnonihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12394802719932859470noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33931707406049803492011-07-15T15:00:01.331-04:002011-07-15T15:00:01.331-04:00although i saw it coming, i loved the concept. and...although i saw it coming, i loved the concept. and the title is great!SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-48494593274691846922011-07-15T14:51:06.653-04:002011-07-15T14:51:06.653-04:00All of the above plus...best title ever.All of the above plus...best title ever.Katherine Tomlinsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09696623795926663895noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-70165676812865641712011-07-15T13:54:05.732-04:002011-07-15T13:54:05.732-04:00love the way you narrated:)
very well done:)love the way you narrated:)<br />very well done:)Kunjalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15346731417236906278noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-19625898386433710282011-07-15T13:27:07.468-04:002011-07-15T13:27:07.468-04:00It seems like the pain of birth goes both ways. I...It seems like the pain of birth goes both ways. Interesting concept. Good job. =)Catrinanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-19996834504144288502011-07-15T13:22:53.159-04:002011-07-15T13:22:53.159-04:00Ha! I saw the end mid-way! Totally got it! :) Very...Ha! I saw the end mid-way! Totally got it! :) Very, very nice. :)Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24727376123727618872011-07-15T12:18:41.873-04:002011-07-15T12:18:41.873-04:00I love the way you trace these thoughts to the ver...I love the way you trace these thoughts to the very beginning:<br /><br />"Will I be pretty? What talents will I possess? Will I struggle or triumph? Will I be loved?"<br /><br />I like to think we have some grace period before it all kicks in!<br /><br />Nice work.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com