tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post1374280439459502894..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #119Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-11446206566191483382009-01-21T16:59:00.000-05:002009-01-21T16:59:00.000-05:00Aha! I know who you are... I didn't read all the ...Aha! I know who you are... I didn't read all the entries and searched on Stu until I found this. Absolutely great job on this piece. This easily could have cracked the lineup, and I'm sure it was close.Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-16460560931500784912009-01-20T22:51:00.000-05:002009-01-20T22:51:00.000-05:00Great job with pacing, entertainment value, techni...Great job with pacing, entertainment value, technical skill, storytelling, and voice! And welcome to the Forties Club!!<BR/><BR/>Thanks for being a wonderful part of the contest.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-28382342647076332632009-01-19T12:17:00.000-05:002009-01-19T12:17:00.000-05:00On you way to get something you are categorically ...On you way to get something you are categorically shedding aspects that are redundant...very well scriptedceedyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17767787593275846653noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-89159165449157434732009-01-18T20:31:00.000-05:002009-01-18T20:31:00.000-05:00A dark vision from a psychopath's eyes. You perfec...A dark vision from a psychopath's eyes. You perfectly captured that sense of superiority and detachment that such a person must feel, right before he's violent. <BR/><BR/><I>To take something is to make it yours</I> is such a chilling, fantastic line. And I loved that you trusted the reader to interpret the ending. Powerful, intelligent writing, Stuart.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-21008298211495019942009-01-18T17:20:00.000-05:002009-01-18T17:20:00.000-05:00I love the main character's existential rant. Iron...I love the main character's existential rant. Ironically, each sentence is pregnant with meaning. Dark and desperate. I like it!<BR/><BR/>janabluesugarpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14775769108087898456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-54160627699288896232009-01-17T17:34:00.000-05:002009-01-17T17:34:00.000-05:00Excellent insight into one man's hatred for societ...Excellent insight into one man's hatred for society. I'd like to know what's made him this way, but in a short piece like this it doesn't need spelling out. Fantastic writing and definately one of my favourites so far.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-68785669568649677432009-01-17T01:21:00.000-05:002009-01-17T01:21:00.000-05:00Cat, I had a totally different interpretation of t...Cat, I had a totally different interpretation of the final line. Perhaps because I'd just read one about death and killing. I assumed the MC was running toward the girl, to push her over the balcony. The MC has a bit of teenage know-it-all disdain for the people around him. He already views them as lifeless, colorless, rubber corpses. Why not push one off the balcony to see if she bounces?PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-57940042882862114052009-01-16T15:25:00.000-05:002009-01-16T15:25:00.000-05:00Well written, I like your character and his philos...Well written, I like your character and his philosophic mental judgments. Funny that he ran from the girl. Great image with the rubber off his shoes and the rubber corpses.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-55908741298269417422009-01-15T07:40:00.000-05:002009-01-15T07:40:00.000-05:00This is chilling - rubber corpses, very inventive....This is chilling - rubber corpses, very inventive. Diabolical character!K.Lawson Gilberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11204234196229710524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90756499217346214432009-01-15T03:59:00.000-05:002009-01-15T03:59:00.000-05:00Loved the embedded philosophy!Good one :)Loved the embedded philosophy!Good one :)Sameera Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05249126041067834608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-37949277953354095472009-01-15T01:55:00.000-05:002009-01-15T01:55:00.000-05:00well structured, helps to put accents where they a...well structured, helps to put accents where they are needed.Lenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09787400183444796423noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2056813662267096002009-01-15T01:04:00.000-05:002009-01-15T01:04:00.000-05:00I really like it...even if I am not totally sure o...I really like it...even if I am not totally sure of what is going on. I read it several times too.<BR/>Shoes in the opening graph and at the end....nice tie.<BR/>Good job.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-27422157924903773642009-01-14T21:47:00.000-05:002009-01-14T21:47:00.000-05:00well honed :Dwell honed :Dlaughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-56222053104912761602009-01-14T21:16:00.000-05:002009-01-14T21:16:00.000-05:00The line breaks are strategically placed, giving t...The line breaks are strategically placed, giving the reader time to reflect.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44184296949006887682009-01-14T20:49:00.000-05:002009-01-14T20:49:00.000-05:00I like stories such as this that have as much cont...I like stories such as this that have as much context beneath the words as the words to themselves. And also that there is a little left over at the end so that our imaginations can continue on and work out their own conclusions as to what those last few lines portend.J.C. Montgomeryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05681137099755243041noreply@blogger.com