tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post1521239675477462008..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #77Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72738314036186081612009-07-27T07:47:45.992-04:002009-07-27T07:47:45.992-04:00Such a Gothic flavor. I liked that. Not common a...Such a Gothic flavor. I liked that. Not common anymore. I wonder what goes on within those walls.<br /><br />Welcome to The Forties Club!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90688011813421986362009-07-20T19:00:31.713-04:002009-07-20T19:00:31.713-04:00Okay: now I'm ready for the rest of the story!...Okay: now I'm ready for the rest of the story! :DJade L Blackwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15321787298101881675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-41361066983699241422009-07-18T05:48:50.459-04:002009-07-18T05:48:50.459-04:00Congratulations on taking that first step into fla...Congratulations on taking that first step into flash fiction. CoN is a fantastic place to develop your writing skills and to meet other writers. <br /><br />I like the sinister undertones but it also brought Beauty and the Beast to mind. It could be the start of a gothic horror or a fine romance. ;0)JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58703939061758997882009-07-16T00:34:48.853-04:002009-07-16T00:34:48.853-04:00Like Bernard, I am intrigued by the "all I re...Like Bernard, I am intrigued by the "all I require" phrase. There's a lurking sinister element to it. I get the sense that this is the opening scene for a long drama. Grant never touches her, but through what he requires of her, her slowly turns her into something else, either better or worse than she is now. Depends on how you envision it.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-12317926675123378322009-07-15T10:49:34.519-04:002009-07-15T10:49:34.519-04:00Great work Amy :D
I thought I would stop by here t...Great work Amy :D<br />I thought I would stop by here too, hm, wonder what number Dottie hasBlodeueddhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03435479623560871881noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-16878532378736860852009-07-15T09:10:10.719-04:002009-07-15T09:10:10.719-04:00This had a little Edgar Allen Poe feel to it. '...This had a little Edgar Allen Poe feel to it. 'and all that I require of you' Intriguing.BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-59008168011639428292009-07-15T00:08:33.476-04:002009-07-15T00:08:33.476-04:00Amy C:
I'm new here, too, so absolutely do no...Amy C:<br /><br />I'm new here, too, so absolutely do not take any comment of mine to heart.<br /><br />IMHO it's way better to leave people wanting more. This vignette felt complete, like a snapshot or a scene, but the reader knows something came before and something comes later. You did something right if the reader cares WHAT came before or comes later. Just my two cents.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-16171433283378112732009-07-14T21:05:49.798-04:002009-07-14T21:05:49.798-04:00Love the visuals provided, strong imagery.
Longin...Love the visuals provided, strong imagery.<br /><br />Longing for more of this story.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08688849410604429533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-54473862584051552462009-07-14T14:12:46.057-04:002009-07-14T14:12:46.057-04:00Thanks for your feedback. I have never done one of...Thanks for your feedback. I have never done one of these flash fiction short stories before. A friend of mine steered me toward this contest, and I had fun! <br /><br />Is it bad to be left wanting more? Does that mean that it's not a proper flash fiction?<br /><br />After I wrote this I realized that it represents my need to get a job and my fear of actually getting one. I hadn't noticed at first.Amy Chttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12832983748006739171noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-66589354611974865212009-07-14T11:52:01.122-04:002009-07-14T11:52:01.122-04:00The disfigured man reminded me of Hannibal. But I ...The disfigured man reminded me of Hannibal. But I could be way off the track.<br /><br />Like others I too am left wanting more...Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-64910497858164375052009-07-13T16:35:36.276-04:002009-07-13T16:35:36.276-04:00It also left me with questions, but nevertheless I...It also left me with questions, but nevertheless I enjoyed it very much! Hope to learn more about your characters!Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-27887491716423402102009-07-13T06:53:44.288-04:002009-07-13T06:53:44.288-04:00It is a good set up, well written, nice setting an...It is a good set up, well written, nice setting and descriptions. It needs more of a plot to work as flash I think, as it leaves too many questions. It's an excellent start to a longer short story.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44831221052632734832009-07-12T20:30:19.141-04:002009-07-12T20:30:19.141-04:00I've no idea what happens next but I get the i...I've no idea what happens next but I get the impression it can't be good. <br /><br />I like this so far. I would love a little more info, be it what the position entails, how he became scarred, a hint as to whether he is a bad guy or a good guy, why the interviewee wants the job so badly.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-19044072279677980822009-07-12T20:17:20.100-04:002009-07-12T20:17:20.100-04:00i'm with sarah, missing something?i'm with sarah, missing something?laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-4249329549812239072009-07-12T19:58:55.112-04:002009-07-12T19:58:55.112-04:00A job's a job eh?
I want more of this. My cur...A job's a job eh?<br /><br />I want more of this. My curiosity is in overdrive. Who is she and who is he?<br /><br />Must be a front runner here I reckon. A short that leaves you wanting more.<br /><br />Good stuff<br /><br /><br /><br /><br />Four DinnersThe Preachermanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10224135811862587701noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-65009576045740172292009-07-12T19:56:42.578-04:002009-07-12T19:56:42.578-04:00Good scenario--the disfigurement, the interview, t...Good scenario--the disfigurement, the interview, the wine. I liked the conflict of the story.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-14023473954882414162009-07-12T19:39:34.947-04:002009-07-12T19:39:34.947-04:00Very interesting. I like the setup, but I think I&...Very interesting. I like the setup, but I think I'm missing an inside piece with not knowing the players. Could be wrong.<br /><br />Does this reference real people? Seems like it.Sarah Laurensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09252565450452195395noreply@blogger.com