tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post1531966668954237739..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #84Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger32125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-35201456850702500262009-07-27T12:18:14.892-04:002009-07-27T12:18:14.892-04:00Thanks Jason for all your hard work, inspiring muc...Thanks Jason for all your hard work, inspiring much of writers' heart labour fromacross the <br />se7en Cs. Me inducted into 40s club? You maketh YL 20years younger! Must be a miss'd take somewhere --too much wine? I was born in 1947,knot 74!:) Have a tehtarik on Desi!:)<br /><br />PS: Tehtarik to all the 157 Other fellow particpants, and Jaye too, should you pass Koala Lumpur way! BTW, It's NORTH of Singapore:)chong y lhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10365847893009738913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10390843229705055162009-07-27T07:53:35.753-04:002009-07-27T07:53:35.753-04:00How's that for poetic justice. I'm just s...How's that for poetic justice. I'm just sorry the couple has to suffer to. Clever dialogue.<br /><br />Welcome to The Forties Club!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-4709074643685145582009-07-20T06:53:43.006-04:002009-07-20T06:53:43.006-04:00janeyV: Thanks for appreciation. You know "Ka...janeyV: Thanks for appreciation. You know "Karma" eh -- must be among the Wise ones:)<br /><br />As for Naomi (plusothers caught in matters of the heART), sometimes the Vision is blurred -- as in LoveIsBlind? YL, Desichong y lhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10365847893009738913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-37627387721085041392009-07-18T05:01:11.396-04:002009-07-18T05:01:11.396-04:00Just to add to the comments that I liked the forma...Just to add to the comments that I liked the format you used and I'm a big fan of Karma getting the last laugh.<br /><br />I feel sorry for Naomi though. It seems like she's paying a big price for being a bit thick.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-69917265129909434792009-07-17T20:55:54.868-04:002009-07-17T20:55:54.868-04:00Ranee: Thanks,glad you loved it.
MindMeanders: .....Ranee: Thanks,glad you loved it.<br /><br />MindMeanders: ...I like blowin' in the wind too, esp by Port Dickson sesside:) Come visit Malaysia and we can meander around...:)<br /><br />Angela: I got blown o'er by thy twister too; but your Protagonist should not bully any Indonesian maid when visiting NegaraKu!:( <br />Che3ers to all:):):), YLchong y lhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10365847893009738913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-55570314711090812332009-07-17T20:37:12.055-04:002009-07-17T20:37:12.055-04:00From beginning to end just a fabulous read and a w...From beginning to end just a fabulous read and a with great twist to boot, AWESOME! Loved it!Angelahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00167646431025933755noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53429047890300867572009-07-16T12:35:58.086-04:002009-07-16T12:35:58.086-04:00Mind blowing end... loved itMind blowing end... loved itAs the Mind Meandershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05289502626334651157noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44536632067452555552009-07-16T09:03:06.852-04:002009-07-16T09:03:06.852-04:00Excellent! I loved it.Excellent! I loved it.Ranee Kaur Banerjeehttp://www.raneespoems.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-48774773053752305132009-07-16T02:53:36.218-04:002009-07-16T02:53:36.218-04:00AV;
Am glad you enjoyed it. I compliment you to...AV; <br /><br /><br />Am glad you enjoyed it. I compliment you too for a great peice.<br /><br />Mona: YES, confession, revelation, STD -- they spread in strange ways, also wear differing clothes too,or three:):):)<br /><br />And pjd: appreciate all my fellow writers' sharing -- this 'hole-in-1' anecdote is LOST on a non-golfie like Desi:( but I know your meaning...Che3ers, YLchong y lhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10365847893009738913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49019041409638699072009-07-16T01:28:59.128-04:002009-07-16T01:28:59.128-04:00My favorite bit is how casual the pastor is with h...My favorite bit is how casual the pastor is with his discussion of their illicit and sinful activities. As in, "Oh, yeah, that par five on the back nine is tough. I usually try to hit left, over the trees, but it always catches me up. Ha, ha, ha!" Just another casual topic of conversation, lacking significance.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-84978652221122032392009-07-15T20:47:05.050-04:002009-07-15T20:47:05.050-04:00O Dear!
This should have been titled " When ...O Dear!<br /><br />This should have been titled " When Confession became Revelation".<br /><br />This is how it spreads...Monahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08615034229525061880noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-85972902166039494122009-07-15T07:23:44.331-04:002009-07-15T07:23:44.331-04:00Loved the style and story structure - intriguing, ...Loved the style and story structure - intriguing, and full of justice.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04871239587214383387noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-17757654170994597462009-07-14T22:00:33.434-04:002009-07-14T22:00:33.434-04:00karen:
Hey, I enjoy your poetic and prose-poetry ...karen:<br /><br />Hey, I enjoy your poetic and prose-poetry lots, will leave more footprints in future steals of your secrets.<br /><br />I too had/have problems with dialogue as recently as last year; improved a byte or two via Jason's CoN test drives:) Che3ers, YLchong y lhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10365847893009738913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-63186619621393498712009-07-14T21:56:51.504-04:002009-07-14T21:56:51.504-04:00hoodie:
Thanks for transiting hear:)
Hope we don&...hoodie:<br /><br />Thanks for transiting hear:)<br />Hope we don't meet too many of such scumbags in our transient stay on Mother GOoD Earth eh!:), YLchong y lhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10365847893009738913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81062502140875566632009-07-14T19:30:30.326-04:002009-07-14T19:30:30.326-04:00I'm glad to see him get his due -- so I think ...I'm glad to see him get his due -- so I think the ending suits perfectly. <br /><br />I still find dialogue extremely difficult to write.Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33919187485062315832009-07-14T12:07:01.482-04:002009-07-14T12:07:01.482-04:00What a tangled web we weave-
Scumbag.(The charact...What a tangled web we weave-<br /><br />Scumbag.(The character, of course!) Way to make it come full circle.Hoodiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17616427797201977083noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-42835540097866445362009-07-13T23:27:58.644-04:002009-07-13T23:27:58.644-04:00Dear all, and starting wit JR'sT and rolling w...Dear all, and starting wit JR'sT and rolling with Aniket,Adisha,Therese and Chris E, Thanks for similar compliments on the Structure. Actually I had the story idea sometime back, but the 250-word limit imposed on me just telling it via dialogue. I was a little apprehensive at first -- your positive assessment means I did right by my instinct. Cheers, I am enjoying slowly but steadily all your stories too, and I amhumbled by the company:) -- YL, Desichong y lhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10365847893009738913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-78253261281809021042009-07-13T16:57:04.333-04:002009-07-13T16:57:04.333-04:00I like how you structured this--relying on dialogu...I like how you structured this--relying on dialogue to tell a story, including building an atmosphere, is very challenging. But you pulled it off!!Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-21485110139321766212009-07-13T13:53:54.817-04:002009-07-13T13:53:54.817-04:00I liked the format here. All dialogue, but there&#...I liked the format here. All dialogue, but there's still atmosphere.Theresehttp://shoeism.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-17722882703097823372009-07-13T12:34:14.785-04:002009-07-13T12:34:14.785-04:00So thoroughly satisfyin to read something so perfe...So thoroughly satisfyin to read something so perfect... As Aniket says, the structure was amazing ... different yet it works for this piece !!Adishahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06757598390608351897noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-75728188273976345592009-07-13T10:20:33.866-04:002009-07-13T10:20:33.866-04:00I loved the fact that you experimented with the st...I loved the fact that you experimented with the structure here. Its a double edged sword, but seems to work wonders here.<br /><br />Good job.<br /><br />I loved the end and also totally agree with the point JR covered. Constructive criticism is the best thing one can get from a reader. Especially from ones so immensely talented as the one's around here.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2538462270021291362009-07-13T08:37:07.680-04:002009-07-13T08:37:07.680-04:00Dear wrath999:
Thanks for encouragement:)
Catvib...Dear wrath999:<br />Thanks for encouragement:) <br /><br />Catvibe: it's good to hear the ending works -- that's the testing part in SS writing. I'm glad you like it too.<br /><br />laughingwolf: sometimes we know that even the men in that white cloth are also "pretty" human, from both masculine and feminine aye/eye-points eh! ~~ YLchong y lhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10365847893009738913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-61943165283316581442009-07-13T08:30:53.201-04:002009-07-13T08:30:53.201-04:00Dear ALL comers who have shared with comments -- I...Dear ALL comers who have shared with comments -- I read all feedback in awe... Taking part in all CoN writes really rewards in the interactivity with fellow Writers.<br /><br />I am still prowling around to read your stories; will get to leave my footprints soon. -- YL, Desichong y lhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10365847893009738913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-79345230366725752312009-07-13T08:27:21.464-04:002009-07-13T08:27:21.464-04:00Thanks JR'sT, for good point wrt "Oh, I s...Thanks JR'sT, for good point wrt "Oh, I see! No wonder he says he's not free on Friday nights...playing poker..." I read it aloud; I wanted to include this point, but it seems superfluous and does seem NOT in the right place! Glad the ending hits:) YLchong y lhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10365847893009738913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-76243705002089239902009-07-13T07:33:29.518-04:002009-07-13T07:33:29.518-04:00good to see the 'father' get his due!good to see the 'father' get his due!laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.com