tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post1749317603789014158..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #37Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger18125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-76529475075552036092008-03-06T15:53:00.000-05:002008-03-06T15:53:00.000-05:00ooh... sneakiness... very coo, love the imagery!ooh... sneakiness... very coo, love the imagery!AngelConradiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09423318903817661244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22619234789174247702008-03-04T15:05:00.000-05:002008-03-04T15:05:00.000-05:00I hope she can find a "spark" with her husband. I...I hope she can find a "spark" with her husband. I had hoped that the "lover" scene was part of the same couple's memory, but, alas, another infidelity story... sigh.Ainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08402176500997528105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80458631330128094652008-03-04T09:55:00.000-05:002008-03-04T09:55:00.000-05:00Glad to see the winter is over. You handled this ...Glad to see the winter is over. You handled this with a great deal of tenderness. Well done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-85079289932346331802008-02-29T15:01:00.000-05:002008-02-29T15:01:00.000-05:00Terri, I think it all comes through. The juxtapos...Terri, I think it all comes through. The juxtaposition between her two times at the tree is very clear and poignant.Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-28617522871138711142008-02-28T12:25:00.000-05:002008-02-28T12:25:00.000-05:00The parting with her lover was incredibly charged ...The parting with her lover was incredibly charged - made me want to go smooch my hubby. I love writing that does that. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-34214901425532452432008-02-27T10:46:00.000-05:002008-02-27T10:46:00.000-05:00Thank you all for the feedback. pjd, you're quite...Thank you all for the feedback. pjd, you're quite correct, infidelity was the issue indeed. After reading the first few comments I was afraid I'd failed miserably with my intention. It was very difficult to fit it all into 250 words! <BR/>So thanks all; for the compliments and the constructive criticism.Terrihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03158421102740382411noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-61447347029006596772008-02-26T16:57:00.000-05:002008-02-26T16:57:00.000-05:00It's hard to justifiably use two time frames in su...It's hard to justifiably use two time frames in such a small word count but you pulled it off beautifully without it feeling lacking.<BR/><BR/>I had a very real emotional response to this. Great job.Hoodiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17616427797201977083noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-41978205387011251472008-02-26T16:51:00.000-05:002008-02-26T16:51:00.000-05:00Terri,A vignette of a woman touched by passion who...Terri,<BR/>A vignette of a woman touched by passion who choses the responsible path. A moral worthy of Aesop!<BR/>Well done.<BR/>relrelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09030572981830789370noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-84182438092145065272008-02-26T16:01:00.000-05:002008-02-26T16:01:00.000-05:00This is a lovely turning of chapters - kind of lik...This is a lovely turning of chapters - kind of like how a memory floats through your brain and then back out again.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-11411726289046456922008-02-26T13:57:00.000-05:002008-02-26T13:57:00.000-05:00It is interesting to see how the very same story e...It is interesting to see how the very same story evokes different feelings within commenters :)<BR/>For me it was not the same couple, but the woman wes not resigned or sorry in the second - although the passion she used to have in the first was definitely not there, too.<BR/>A really interesting setting, I'd like to see what/why/when...etc.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72646896975828103152008-02-25T21:49:00.000-05:002008-02-25T21:49:00.000-05:00Another one I really liked! The first man was her ...Another one I really liked! The first man was her lover, right? It felt all romantic and urgent with her lover, while with her husband it was more indulgent. I thought it was very well done.Ello - Ellen Ohhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311917335471167591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-9492673787095252812008-02-25T20:11:00.000-05:002008-02-25T20:11:00.000-05:00I liked the two-stories-in-one narrative here. I, ...I liked the two-stories-in-one narrative here. I, too, thought that the man in the first section was not her husband later. But I could be wrong. <BR/><BR/>Very interesting comparison between passion and a bit of complacency. Well done! :)Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-4885903217872785062008-02-25T18:27:00.000-05:002008-02-25T18:27:00.000-05:00Interesting that some found it sweet. I understoo...Interesting that some found it sweet. I understood that infidelity was the issue here.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33604564687902774122008-02-25T14:28:00.000-05:002008-02-25T14:28:00.000-05:00A poignant and sweet story. I love the latent pas...A poignant and sweet story. I love the latent passion in the first part of the story, nice evocation of emotion - though I wish I'd known why they couldn't explore their relationship further. In a way, this begs for further telling, something a bit longer.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04871239587214383387noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-78091590869566225462008-02-25T13:06:00.000-05:002008-02-25T13:06:00.000-05:00That tree is developing a reputation for hearts be...That tree is developing a reputation for hearts being broken between it. I'm still not sure I quite get the switch at the end...is this as suggested above a juxtaposition with another couple or is it the same couple many years later? Either way, very sweetly written.DBA Lehanehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12902739256082564278noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-55604957574662672682008-02-25T12:50:00.000-05:002008-02-25T12:50:00.000-05:00I could almost feel the romantic tension between t...I could almost feel the romantic tension between the lovers...nicely juxtaposed with the "ho hum" relationship between husband and wife. Nicely done.bluesugarpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14775769108087898456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-84343080418699107992008-02-25T12:39:00.000-05:002008-02-25T12:39:00.000-05:00Very sweet.Very sweet.Bethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38871622986014039552008-02-25T12:26:00.000-05:002008-02-25T12:26:00.000-05:00Well crafted story.Well crafted story.BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.com