tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post1779337622797549093..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #58Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-21872599375384540542008-07-24T17:10:00.000-04:002008-07-24T17:10:00.000-04:00Great action moment! A life in the day of organiz...Great action moment! A life in the day of organized crime, I guess. Very good writing. High marks overall.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87079507544199525392008-07-21T08:17:00.000-04:002008-07-21T08:17:00.000-04:00I'm so glad you entered, Mr. Schprock.What a stran...I'm so glad you entered, Mr. Schprock.<BR/>What a strange and ironic main character!<BR/>I like the way the story unfolds.<BR/>One of the best last lines!!SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-7028641916251309632008-07-20T15:51:00.000-04:002008-07-20T15:51:00.000-04:00Wild,very very wild.Nice piece of writing!Wild,very very wild.<BR/><BR/>Nice piece of writing!Sameera Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05249126041067834608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-6579808081321886362008-07-19T23:44:00.000-04:002008-07-19T23:44:00.000-04:00nasty but very effective....nasty but very effective....laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-70965834999403716112008-07-19T00:33:00.000-04:002008-07-19T00:33:00.000-04:00Dude, I just realized that this is Mr. Schprock's ...Dude, I just realized that this is Mr. Schprock's story. How could I have not seen that before! What I didn't say before is that I thought this had a real, gritty, private dick way about it, like Mike Hammer without all the big breasted women of course. I shoulda known. This has Mr. Schprock signature humor to it, buddy.Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22940880321253397982008-07-17T22:46:00.000-04:002008-07-17T22:46:00.000-04:00High marks for pacing and authenticity. Would love...High marks for pacing and authenticity. Would love to know who Lester is in relation to the main character.Posol'stvo the Medvedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00573435137467134333noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-30067837545710755892008-07-17T16:04:00.000-04:002008-07-17T16:04:00.000-04:00Such a strong voice which you have to have to pull...Such a strong voice which you have to have to pull off this story. I love this one!Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-65853628687225703692008-07-17T09:08:00.000-04:002008-07-17T09:08:00.000-04:00Awesome way to wrap it up.Awesome way to wrap it up.Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-86948005471361819592008-07-17T08:05:00.000-04:002008-07-17T08:05:00.000-04:00Harsh and callous - we almost feel sorry for this ...Harsh and callous - we almost feel sorry for this old guy being pursued by the crooked cop right until he lets him have it.<BR/><BR/>Very gutsy!JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-35586318658421687442008-07-17T02:49:00.000-04:002008-07-17T02:49:00.000-04:00rough indeed. not sure what to say.rough indeed. not sure what to say.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-12904575002728201692008-07-17T00:54:00.000-04:002008-07-17T00:54:00.000-04:00I can visualize the bullets hitting the body when ...I can visualize the bullets hitting the body when you write "drunken ballet step."JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53618797758462444512008-07-16T23:39:00.000-04:002008-07-16T23:39:00.000-04:00This was the Boston bad boy I was waiting to read ...This was the Boston bad boy I was waiting to read inside you. And of all the contests, this is my favorite thus far. Fantastic last line! <BR/><BR/>Why don't you people quit making voting so hard? Ugh, you making it in right before the deadline people! lolBethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-68524250847135452612008-07-16T22:29:00.000-04:002008-07-16T22:29:00.000-04:00Well written rough dealings.Well written rough dealings.BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18086237671663127362008-07-16T22:20:00.000-04:002008-07-16T22:20:00.000-04:00Very jarring to read, but also authentically portr...Very jarring to read, but also authentically portrayed. <BR/><BR/>This is a dark, ugly world, but one worth exploring. And the last paragraph was appropriately brutal. <BR/><BR/>Strong writing, and well paced.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.com