tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post1930512714396110157..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #62Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger18125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81949187832556829842009-07-26T20:00:48.439-04:002009-07-26T20:00:48.439-04:00I'm actually a bit relieved that we get to lea...I'm actually a bit relieved that we get to leave them to their night. That sword is going to fall, I think. And someone is going to be under it.<br /><br />Welcome to The Forties Club!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13681554847659143242009-07-20T18:18:36.996-04:002009-07-20T18:18:36.996-04:00Great tension and conflict. I especially like:
“...Great tension and conflict. I especially like:<br /><br /><i>“The truth is a sword dangling dangerously over our lives and you’d rather not be underneath when it falls. No one controls their own destiny. You should know better.”</i>Jade L Blackwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15321787298101881675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-14831706192548952852009-07-20T03:57:31.136-04:002009-07-20T03:57:31.136-04:00I don't know why I missed this, but very glad ...I don't know why I missed this, but very glad I eventually found it. Yes, I think your muse has returned, this is fine and absorbing writing!Peternoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-41909863314443027252009-07-20T01:07:52.627-04:002009-07-20T01:07:52.627-04:00I thought about posting this comment earlier, but ...I thought about posting this comment earlier, but didn't. Not sure it would help or over-explain.<br /><br />The man is fate personified, driving his poor victim to the point of doing the one thing she feels she has control over: whether she lives or dies. <br /><br />As we can see, she failed. Fate intervened. The wine is the blood she attempted to spill, but he was able to salvage enough-enough to let her live.<br /><br />Fate and control over one's life is a concept I constantly muse about. How much we really have, how much is out of our hands. And when we attempt suicide, is this an act of desperation, arrogance...I dunno. <br /><br />My character is tired of all that fate has thrown her way, and is looking for a way to take back control. <br /><br />I am thinking she can; especially after all these supportive comments. Hmmm.J.C. Montgomeryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05681137099755243041noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-35627477370954354582009-07-18T07:20:09.054-04:002009-07-18T07:20:09.054-04:00JC - very compelling and leaves the reader baying ...JC - very compelling and leaves the reader baying for more. I would like to know what the games are. I think your Muse is back - please write the story and end this wonderful suspense. ;0)JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-70659707453629799632009-07-15T21:52:11.975-04:002009-07-15T21:52:11.975-04:00Wow, JC - powerful writingWow, JC - powerful writingAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53923318344235130292009-07-15T20:22:30.210-04:002009-07-15T20:22:30.210-04:00I seesawed between sex-slave and suicide. And why ...I seesawed between sex-slave and suicide. And why is the liquid "all he could salvage?" I have no doubt this will be niggling away at me for a while.B. Nagelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07620736939701035617noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-54536737022118924432009-07-15T10:54:23.714-04:002009-07-15T10:54:23.714-04:00I do like the description and dialog, the way you ...I do like the description and dialog, the way you zoom in on the drops and then pan back to them smoothly. Yes, I get that she attempted suicide, possibly as an escape from whatever "games" he keeps her up late with. That's the part I don't really get.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49026956237529835432009-07-14T18:13:57.176-04:002009-07-14T18:13:57.176-04:00I guessed she tried to kill herself, hence the gau...I guessed she tried to kill herself, hence the gauze on her wrist. A tense tale.BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-76855705284343127132009-07-14T12:53:57.422-04:002009-07-14T12:53:57.422-04:00So well written I'm completely unbothered by t...So well written I'm completely unbothered by the vagueness. Perfect just the way it is.Hoodiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17616427797201977083noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-35229500602573220672009-07-12T16:25:36.682-04:002009-07-12T16:25:36.682-04:00So much hinted at. I love how the picture is drawn...So much hinted at. I love how the picture is drawn in bits and pieces. Awesome.Sarah Laurensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09252565450452195395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-85302365862023807412009-07-12T15:30:40.286-04:002009-07-12T15:30:40.286-04:00very nicely done, jc :)very nicely done, jc :)laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-84423931469120511352009-07-12T10:00:03.846-04:002009-07-12T10:00:03.846-04:00I'm hungry!
I'm hungry for more. I like l...I'm hungry!<br /><br />I'm hungry for more. I like leaving stuff to readers imagination, but this is just too much suspense.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-25519711658667661162009-07-12T08:16:05.243-04:002009-07-12T08:16:05.243-04:00The truth is you better not know the truth! Leave...The truth is you better not know the truth! Leave us wondering and with an ominous sensation. Good one.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-32845992792878699662009-07-12T07:51:54.717-04:002009-07-12T07:51:54.717-04:00Suspenseful indeed! I love the dialogue, and thou...Suspenseful indeed! I love the dialogue, and though I'm left with questions, I think that was your intent. Very nice!Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-11739187566264932472009-07-12T07:22:28.690-04:002009-07-12T07:22:28.690-04:00The edge of the seat is a great place to be - grea...The edge of the seat is a great place to be - great suspense!Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44449008878341935042009-07-12T06:42:19.003-04:002009-07-12T06:42:19.003-04:00Nice build-up with the suspense, but I'm with ...Nice build-up with the suspense, but I'm with Laurel on this one. I'm wondering what fate might bring. You had me on the edge of my seat.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-20927714660183663462009-07-12T01:04:14.807-04:002009-07-12T01:04:14.807-04:00I'm not sure what's going on there but it ...I'm not sure what's going on there but it sounds like a troubled relationship! I liked the sense of conflict in the body language and dialogue and the visual of the red wine soaking onto the gauze was effective.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.com