tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post2063367646992114701..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #125Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-73464502099964314142010-01-18T20:08:35.127-05:002010-01-18T20:08:35.127-05:00my caveat
Something I Would Keep
"murmuring v...<br><br><a href="http://www.insearchofgiants.com/2010/01/commenting-on-silhouette.html" rel="nofollow">my caveat</a><br><br /><b>Something I Would Keep</b><br><br />"murmuring voices from the Koran til the devils took over" - eeps, eerie, dark, and very, very telling in just a single line. well done<br /><br /><b>Something I Might Tweak</b><br><br />I wasn't completely sure that the opening exclamation was because he was waking from the dream? He jumps up from the rickety bed, but that could have just been because he was lounging, with nothing to do. Maybe "sprang from sleep"?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-51200776681758918512010-01-18T11:36:03.803-05:002010-01-18T11:36:03.803-05:00I really liked this, and was hoping for more infor...I really liked this, and was hoping for more information.Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-73662764674089444482010-01-17T00:39:45.855-05:002010-01-17T00:39:45.855-05:00I like the word choice and tone, but would've ...I like the word choice and tone, but would've liked some back story to fill-in the gaps.James R. Tomlinsonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-15623961734413388862010-01-16T05:20:38.480-05:002010-01-16T05:20:38.480-05:00I love the intensity of this piece. You have capt...I love the intensity of this piece. You have captured madness and delusion very neatly and I like that there is confusion at the end. It compliments the beginning.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-46112260634127145432010-01-14T09:07:37.955-05:002010-01-14T09:07:37.955-05:00I like the way it's written, very intense.I like the way it's written, very intense.catvibehttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-23672901619384899392010-01-13T03:53:37.769-05:002010-01-13T03:53:37.769-05:00Visceral descriptions!Visceral descriptions!Kartikhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01067636999700672077noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38585491810565390542010-01-13T01:46:15.753-05:002010-01-13T01:46:15.753-05:00Thank you all for your comments...
I like critisis...Thank you all for your comments...<br />I like critisism and agree with what Bernita has said...<br /><br />Thanks for your reactions...i always expected a mixed response.Rohanhttp://cachememory.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83257200625343969762010-01-12T16:50:49.476-05:002010-01-12T16:50:49.476-05:00Echo Bernita on the language. I'm not sure I ...Echo Bernita on the language. I'm not sure I get the meaning of the rewind part and the emphasis of RED.<br /><br />I'm left with the impression that Ali is in Hell, but I also have the impression that I've read it wrong.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53884493216409350922010-01-12T12:19:06.616-05:002010-01-12T12:19:06.616-05:00Yeah, intense! The descriptions were very visceral...Yeah, intense! The descriptions were very visceral. Nice job.Deb Snoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-67058226362593106642010-01-12T10:57:10.030-05:002010-01-12T10:57:10.030-05:00Gritty and intense and left me wanting more. I am ...Gritty and intense and left me wanting more. I am interested in knowing this guy's story!Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-34324767371273620252010-01-12T09:33:31.958-05:002010-01-12T09:33:31.958-05:00what bernita said...what bernita said...laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24057563985381143762010-01-11T17:42:35.204-05:002010-01-11T17:42:35.204-05:00I need a 'part two' right about now!
Good...I need a 'part two' right about now!<br /><br />Good description of the poor chap.<br /><br />Nice one!DILLIGAFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16520650650468676361noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-61226078404685403462010-01-11T16:26:27.165-05:002010-01-11T16:26:27.165-05:00My only quibble is "who the heck."
Want...My only quibble is "who the heck." <br />Wanted a more robust expression to complement the hard edge of the rest of the piece.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-15719619938232543902010-01-11T15:39:37.135-05:002010-01-11T15:39:37.135-05:00I liked the fevered pace.I liked the fevered pace.Craighttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344917148662934359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-14669380252731913362010-01-11T15:29:32.165-05:002010-01-11T15:29:32.165-05:00Graphic and gory. Well written too.
But I too am ...Graphic and gory. Well written too.<br /><br />But I too am left wanting a bit more of the back story.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87411061507326084992010-01-11T14:30:49.689-05:002010-01-11T14:30:49.689-05:00I like the intensity in this piece. Wish there cou...I like the intensity in this piece. Wish there could be more to it though.lenahttp://www.thecolorsmagazine.com/noreply@blogger.com