tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post2130395587015236401..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #9Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger28125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-84802528009538382572009-01-20T21:19:00.000-05:002009-01-20T21:19:00.000-05:00Great job on pacing, entertainment value, technica...Great job on pacing, entertainment value, technical skill, storytelling, and voice! And welcome to the Forties Club!!<BR/><BR/>Thanks for being a wonderful part of the contest.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-34332398054644557772009-01-18T17:35:00.000-05:002009-01-18T17:35:00.000-05:00Scary!!! I loved it (and I'm never letting my litt...Scary!!! I loved it (and I'm never letting my little ones step on an escalator again). <BR/><BR/>janabluesugarpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14775769108087898456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10816908034696351702009-01-18T16:16:00.000-05:002009-01-18T16:16:00.000-05:00Yikes! And I always hesitate. We have no escalator...Yikes! And I always hesitate. We have no escalators in town and only one in the nearby city's mall - which I rarely go to.<BR/>Great story. This one was really good.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-31321971781551296002009-01-18T04:31:00.000-05:002009-01-18T04:31:00.000-05:00I have written a scary movie of sorts on Ascension...I have written a scary movie of sorts on Ascension.... do read it when you get time! http://foolishnessofthings.blogspot.com/2009/01/fyeo-ascension-revisited.html<BR/><BR/>You are a character in it as well! :-DAniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3727351111771125312009-01-17T06:09:00.000-05:002009-01-17T06:09:00.000-05:00A very spooky tale... One should never doubt an ur...A very spooky tale... One should never doubt an urban legend! :-D<BR/>Great job Rachel!Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-32489043724255973762009-01-17T01:24:00.000-05:002009-01-17T01:24:00.000-05:00Ha, ha, ha, ha. I find this pretty funny, mostly ...Ha, ha, ha, ha. I find this pretty funny, mostly because the contrast between the voice and the action. Reading and crocheting? This is really twisted. Well done.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-25263296359403289932009-01-15T06:01:00.000-05:002009-01-15T06:01:00.000-05:00Another goodie. Loved the mundane name and habits ...Another goodie. Loved the mundane name and habits of the underworld monster, great contrasts.McKoalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01457446171624585099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-47397562114255504962009-01-14T19:57:00.000-05:002009-01-14T19:57:00.000-05:00Well, I just love this. It is so original, so crea...Well, I just love this. It is so original, so creative. I am such a fan of urban legends. I hope you win!!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-17045285462391987712009-01-13T14:58:00.000-05:002009-01-13T14:58:00.000-05:00I was totally hooked!! The tension in this one is ...I was totally hooked!! The tension in this one is especially well drawn.<BR/>Awesome!<BR/>:-)Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11794946908789120139noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2193165658762616952009-01-10T12:01:00.000-05:002009-01-10T12:01:00.000-05:00Eeeek, she seemed kind of nice to start with, alth...Eeeek, she seemed kind of nice to start with, although I did wonder what she lived on ...Patsyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12263765378083045973noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-9170495245003326922009-01-10T01:17:00.000-05:002009-01-10T01:17:00.000-05:00What lies beneath the stairs ... scratch that ... ...What lies beneath the stairs ... scratch that ... what lies beneath the escalator. Hey, everybody's got to live somewhere. And eat too!JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-25746565798027838172009-01-09T18:03:00.000-05:002009-01-09T18:03:00.000-05:00excellent..boogeyman...err...boogeylady monster......excellent..boogeyman...err...boogeylady monster...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-41456228294431292172009-01-09T08:11:00.000-05:002009-01-09T08:11:00.000-05:00Nice Rachel, very imaginative and delightfully cre...Nice Rachel, very imaginative and delightfully creepy.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-77394715914632138942009-01-08T19:19:00.000-05:002009-01-08T19:19:00.000-05:00Nicely doneNicely doneAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-64630785783882531162009-01-08T14:11:00.000-05:002009-01-08T14:11:00.000-05:00wow Rachel .. its so scary !!!wow Rachel .. its so scary !!!Anil Sawanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09598267987035726165noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-79028064255485287332009-01-08T11:29:00.000-05:002009-01-08T11:29:00.000-05:00OMG!My story could be a sequel to yours :)Awesome ...OMG!My story could be a sequel to yours :)<BR/><BR/>Awesome take!Sameera Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05249126041067834608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-26228379071965508902009-01-08T09:03:00.000-05:002009-01-08T09:03:00.000-05:00I'm taking the stairs from now on! What a great p...I'm taking the stairs from now on! What a great piece...you had me from the first line. :)Ruinwen Dagoriellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17838849121945131543noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-34149162148929749552009-01-07T21:59:00.000-05:002009-01-07T21:59:00.000-05:00oh, wow! That reached out and grabbed me....;) S...oh, wow! That reached out and grabbed me....;) Strong images and very well written piece.K.Lawson Gilberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11204234196229710524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45250469701467834192009-01-07T18:49:00.000-05:002009-01-07T18:49:00.000-05:00rachel, that's a grabber for sure... love it! :)rachel, that's a grabber for sure... love it! :)laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58540645125391953932009-01-07T16:25:00.000-05:002009-01-07T16:25:00.000-05:00The whole time I thought it was a homeless person ...The whole time I thought it was a homeless person living under the escalator. The ending was both unexpected and breathtaking. As has been said before "WOW!"JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-48730834285229701792009-01-07T16:07:00.000-05:002009-01-07T16:07:00.000-05:00And I thought I only had to check under the bed .....And I thought I only had to check under the bed ... Liked this.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-60409590707137061082009-01-07T16:00:00.000-05:002009-01-07T16:00:00.000-05:00I like this a lot. Especially those first two lin...I like this a lot. Especially those first two lines. Totally draw me in.<BR/><BR/>PaulAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-42835521972978167902009-01-07T14:09:00.000-05:002009-01-07T14:09:00.000-05:00I love your unique, imaginative interpretation her...I love your unique, imaginative interpretation here. Very creepy and merciless. I'll never hesitate before stepping on the escalator again. ;) <BR/><BR/>Something about her crocheting down there and eating "sweets" makes it that much more diabolical. Excellent detail.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-52016106855379535032009-01-07T13:45:00.000-05:002009-01-07T13:45:00.000-05:00Enjoyed this - clever.Enjoyed this - clever.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44445686534994025512009-01-07T13:42:00.000-05:002009-01-07T13:42:00.000-05:00Wow, great imagination. Excellent.Wow, great imagination. Excellent.wrath999https://www.blogger.com/profile/10964105112015979524noreply@blogger.com