tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post2222308746266424734..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #4Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger26125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81076395523484457622009-01-20T21:14:00.000-05:002009-01-20T21:14:00.000-05:00Thanks for being a wonderful part of the contest!Thanks for being a wonderful part of the contest!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-76070464051756571192009-01-19T05:40:00.000-05:002009-01-19T05:40:00.000-05:00Hey Peter, Miri from RB here :)Great take on the p...Hey Peter, Miri from RB here :)<BR/>Great take on the prompt, and love the story & style! Nicely doneAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-27468650609111672972009-01-17T01:37:00.000-05:002009-01-17T01:37:00.000-05:00Rising up to the gutter indeed - where they both a...Rising up to the gutter indeed - where they both are! Great take on the prompt. Nicely done!bluesugarpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14775769108087898456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-8884794531941137012009-01-16T13:05:00.000-05:002009-01-16T13:05:00.000-05:00Well written, seedy character and interesting dial...Well written, seedy character and interesting dialogue, very intriguing.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-69262320062095915112009-01-14T22:44:00.000-05:002009-01-14T22:44:00.000-05:00Nicely written.Good dialogue. Definitely interesti...Nicely written.<BR/>Good dialogue. Definitely interesting characters and you brought that across easily.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-32745636779329773562009-01-13T12:08:00.000-05:002009-01-13T12:08:00.000-05:00A whole story waiting to be written lies behind th...A whole story waiting to be written lies behind this one. Very interesting characters! Well written!Vesperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12417602625059442986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-57054213805191361592009-01-11T08:42:00.000-05:002009-01-11T08:42:00.000-05:00The dialogue in this one is rich with detail!Very ...The dialogue in this one is rich with detail!<BR/>Very nice. I wish I could read the next episode of this story.Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11794946908789120139noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-71167919192049275112009-01-10T07:23:00.000-05:002009-01-10T07:23:00.000-05:00You've given us a good insight into the characters...You've given us a good insight into the characters - I hope they get what's coming to them!Patsyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12263765378083045973noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-19633522267142254142009-01-09T20:27:00.000-05:002009-01-09T20:27:00.000-05:00Nice use of foreshadowing. It's not easy to do in...Nice use of foreshadowing. It's not easy to do in so few words.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-77096650839156588452009-01-09T17:27:00.000-05:002009-01-09T17:27:00.000-05:00nasty and sharp... the cool side of humanity..nasty and sharp... the cool side of humanity..Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-35887196962536144152009-01-08T19:27:00.000-05:002009-01-08T19:27:00.000-05:00I always love good dialogue. Nice.I always love good dialogue. Nice.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-51973254269935731052009-01-08T15:54:00.000-05:002009-01-08T15:54:00.000-05:00Excellent, she'll get hers! Good stuff, very disc...Excellent, she'll get hers! Good stuff, very discriptive.peggyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04915565997583564023noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-65231760012175770702009-01-08T13:37:00.000-05:002009-01-08T13:37:00.000-05:00beautiful narration!beautiful narration!Anil Sawanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09598267987035726165noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-69375909051644632812009-01-08T12:08:00.000-05:002009-01-08T12:08:00.000-05:00Super. The harder they fall...Super. The harder they fall...Rachel Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13048590167153841615noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-77554565940857509852009-01-08T08:20:00.000-05:002009-01-08T08:20:00.000-05:00Strong piece. You really captured the essence of ...Strong piece. You really captured the essence of a tragic life changing moment. I hope she gets hers. :)Ruinwen Dagoriellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17838849121945131543noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-27228094339234667112009-01-08T00:43:00.000-05:002009-01-08T00:43:00.000-05:00You already know how I feel about this piece Peter...You already know how I feel about this piece Peter. And as you can see, many others feel the same.<BR/><BR/>Well done my friend, well done!J.C. Montgomeryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05681137099755243041noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-50844837461097502362009-01-07T21:36:00.000-05:002009-01-07T21:36:00.000-05:00Great characterization. Lots of story here for the...Great characterization. Lots of story here for the brevity.K.Lawson Gilberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11204234196229710524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-65559704160246767942009-01-07T18:39:00.000-05:002009-01-07T18:39:00.000-05:00very good job, pete :)very good job, pete :)laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-84894608008422131682009-01-07T15:33:00.000-05:002009-01-07T15:33:00.000-05:00Thanks everyone for your comments, it's very much ...Thanks everyone for your comments, it's very much appreciated - and unexpected. If you have your own pieces posted, please put the story name here so I can be sure I return the compliment.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-21792804033056858842009-01-07T13:33:00.000-05:002009-01-07T13:33:00.000-05:00Great job. We can visualize both characters in suc...Great job. We can visualize both characters in such a short amount of words.wrath999https://www.blogger.com/profile/10964105112015979524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-23637585986590475042009-01-07T13:06:00.000-05:002009-01-07T13:06:00.000-05:00Gritty, vivid take on the prompt. I love the natur...Gritty, vivid take on the prompt. I love the natural dialogue, and this line--"We both know she's just trying to climb out of the sewer, into the gutter."--really popped for me. <BR/><BR/>Love how you were able to weave a full-bodied narrative from this one episode. They're both nasty characters, but delicious. ;) Excellent!Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-47688248971570144432009-01-07T10:47:00.000-05:002009-01-07T10:47:00.000-05:00Excellent! I love this unique take on the prompt, ...Excellent! I love this unique take on the prompt, well done.<BR/><BR/>www.mypoeticpath.wordpress.comGeraldine https://www.blogger.com/profile/07410019941984295767noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87930330741552424162009-01-07T09:17:00.000-05:002009-01-07T09:17:00.000-05:00This story has tentacles far reaching past the esc...This story has tentacles far reaching past the escalator. Well done.BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-84698808333522069902009-01-07T06:07:00.000-05:002009-01-07T06:07:00.000-05:00Lovely and stark - I like the way you stripped it ...Lovely and stark - I like the way you stripped it back to reveal the lack of options. The inevitability of "Joe's" fate perfectly mirrored in the relentless upward motion of the escalator,<BR/><I>The escalator carrying me towards her faltered. Beyond redemption, its fate like mine, assured.</I>JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80600072797612194642009-01-07T06:05:00.000-05:002009-01-07T06:05:00.000-05:00A very different take.Amazing what conversations c...A very different take.Amazing what conversations can take place on an escalator :)Sameera Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05249126041067834608noreply@blogger.com