tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post2398419268923434058..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #62Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger27125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-28229076497207227882009-01-20T22:07:00.000-05:002009-01-20T22:07:00.000-05:00Congratulations on the honorable mention!Great job...Congratulations on the honorable mention!<BR/><BR/>Great job with pacing, entertainment value, technical skill, storytelling, and pacing! And welcome to the Forties Club!!<BR/><BR/>Thanks for being a wonderful part of the contest.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-15115401788822086352009-01-19T12:43:00.000-05:002009-01-19T12:43:00.000-05:00I am reading along and get to the ending, and I'm ...I am reading along and get to the ending, and I'm like, "ha?" - then I laughed. I loved this ending.<BR/>Great twist. <BR/>You did a great job getting us involved in the character and then turning the tables on us. loved it.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-75451684464018220402009-01-19T01:18:00.000-05:002009-01-19T01:18:00.000-05:00Great twist, totally unexpected ending.Such down-t...Great twist, totally unexpected ending.<BR/>Such down-to-earth dialogue, very realitic. Enjoyed it :)Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17286909482780350161noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-54624215121105584742009-01-18T22:07:00.000-05:002009-01-18T22:07:00.000-05:00That was funny! loved the ending - nice twist. Sub...That was funny! loved the ending - nice twist. Subtle and understated, yet reveals a powerful "ah ha."<BR/><BR/>janabluesugarpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14775769108087898456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-4338061214904331152009-01-18T14:19:00.000-05:002009-01-18T14:19:00.000-05:00Good one, Precie! I really enjoyed reading it! V...Good one, Precie! I really enjoyed reading it! Victoria sure was doing her job quite skillfully. Very nice!<BR/>:)Ainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08402176500997528105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-23155556519245287822009-01-18T14:15:00.000-05:002009-01-18T14:15:00.000-05:00Nice twist in the end! I have a couple of friends ...Nice twist in the end! I have a couple of friends doing their masters is psychology! Would let them know the technique! :-D<BR/><BR/>Loved Pete's comment above too: "A therapist is a lot cheaper than a husband, and this one seems to be providing exactly the same services" I am laughing my ass off on this one! :-DAniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-26871626256049282482009-01-17T10:28:00.000-05:002009-01-17T10:28:00.000-05:00Nice ending, very unexpected! I actually though t...Nice ending, very unexpected! I actually though the person he was talking to was his wife or girlfriend! I'm glad he burst through, and good job on the dream description.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10416014559532407532009-01-16T11:43:00.000-05:002009-01-16T11:43:00.000-05:00Loved the twist....Loved the twist....ceedyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17767787593275846653noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-28587275552812326722009-01-15T10:52:00.000-05:002009-01-15T10:52:00.000-05:00That was very clever, and I love being surprised.That was very clever, and I love being surprised.Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24294188024166099842009-01-14T14:52:00.000-05:002009-01-14T14:52:00.000-05:00I was hoping for zombies :Pno zombies in any stori...I was hoping for zombies :P<BR/><BR/>no zombies in any stories this time!<BR/><BR/>the reference to sudoku was funny :)<BR/><BR/>Cheers!<BR/><BR/>NPallavhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09597178864833810868noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1390517702124129602009-01-14T13:57:00.000-05:002009-01-14T13:57:00.000-05:00now that I did enjoy. Nice one.now that I did enjoy. Nice one.The Preachermanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10224135811862587701noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58913534437269079592009-01-14T11:30:00.000-05:002009-01-14T11:30:00.000-05:00I don't know what she's so torqued about. A thera...I don't know what she's so torqued about. A therapist is a lot cheaper than a husband, and this one seems to be providing <I>exactly</I> the same services. (Enjoyed it. :-)PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45515568189033371792009-01-13T20:21:00.000-05:002009-01-13T20:21:00.000-05:00Like most of your comment-makers [i tried "comment...Like most of your comment-makers [i tried "commenters" but apparently it is not a word ;-)], I loved the twist. Great job at turning a simple moment into an intriguing story!anna jhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17456544191094478165noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-52658396714965361942009-01-13T18:40:00.000-05:002009-01-13T18:40:00.000-05:00Precie, I loved this. You captured the frustrati...Precie, I loved this. You captured the frustration of being not seen in a relationship beautifully here. Nice twist making it with therapist.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81602182530058120922009-01-13T17:05:00.000-05:002009-01-13T17:05:00.000-05:00Lena: Thanks! And, no, I wouldn't want to have th...Lena: Thanks! And, no, I wouldn't want to have that dream either!<BR/><BR/>strugglingwriter: Thanks! And LOL!!! I'm guessing people learn quickly not to talk about dreams. ;)<BR/><BR/>Ello: Thanks! Getting a laugh from you is a high compliment, oh, queen of comedy! After submitting tearjerkers in previous CoN contests, I really wanted to submit something funny. :)<BR/><BR/>harshad: Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it!<BR/><BR/>Aerin: :) :) :) Thanks, sweetie!<BR/><BR/>JR's Thumbprints: Thanks! When I first wrote this out, it was all dialogue so I knew I needed something. :)<BR/><BR/>Sameera: Thanks!<BR/><BR/>laughingwolf: Glad you enjoyed it!!<BR/><BR/>Sarah: Thank you! I'm glad it came across as I'd hoped. And I'm glad you liked my take on Jason's picture. <BR/><BR/>McKoala: Yes...I suppose even my humor leans toward tearjerker tendencies. :)<BR/><BR/>Lauri: Thanks!!<BR/><BR/>Chris: Thank you!!!!!!<BR/><BR/>Things are kinda busy in my corner of the world, but I hope to have some time tomorrow (Wednesday) to come back and comment on other entries!!Preciehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05071233480999640713noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-36560471333908209472009-01-13T17:04:00.000-05:002009-01-13T17:04:00.000-05:00Lena: Thanks! And, no, I wouldn't want to have th...Lena: Thanks! And, no, I wouldn't want to have that dream either!<BR/><BR/>strugglingwriter: Thanks! And LOL!!! I'm guessing people learn quickly not to talk about dreams. ;)<BR/><BR/>Ello: Thanks! Getting a laugh from you is a high compliment, oh, queen of comedy! After submitting tearjerkers in previous CoN contests, I really wanted to submit something funny. :)<BR/><BR/>harshad: Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it!<BR/><BR/>Aerin: :) :) :) Thanks, sweetie!<BR/><BR/>JR's Thumbprints: Thanks! When I first wrote this out, it was all dialogue so I knew I needed something. :)<BR/><BR/>Sameera: Thanks!<BR/><BR/>laughingwolf: Glad you enjoyed it!!<BR/><BR/>Sarah: Thank you! I'm glad it came across as I'd hoped. And I'm glad you liked my take on Jason's picture. <BR/><BR/>McKoala: Yes...I suppose even my humor leans toward tearjerker tendencies. :)<BR/><BR/>Lauri: Thanks!!<BR/><BR/>Chris: Thank you!!!!!!<BR/><BR/>Things are kinda busy in my corner of the world, but I hope to have some time tomorrow (Wednesday) to come back and comment on other entries!!Preciehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05071233480999640713noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-91632172051696848632009-01-13T14:52:00.000-05:002009-01-13T14:52:00.000-05:00I like this one. Great dialogue, and I also felt a...I like this one. Great dialogue, and I also felt a mixture of humor and sadness, but mostly sadness. Sufficiently opaque to leave the reader to fill in some of the blanks. <BR/>Well done!Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11794946908789120139noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10146691434492676042009-01-13T10:08:00.000-05:002009-01-13T10:08:00.000-05:00Nice twist at the end.Nice twist at the end.Laurihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11112458658109887868noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18650325062982585192009-01-13T05:55:00.000-05:002009-01-13T05:55:00.000-05:00funny, but sad, too.funny, but sad, too.McKoalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01457446171624585099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-61265012960483019222009-01-12T19:49:00.000-05:002009-01-12T19:49:00.000-05:00Good one, Precie! I loved the psychological strain...Good one, Precie! I loved the psychological strain, and breakthrough, here. Hard love sometimes works. From passiveness to assertive, in the blink of an eye. <BR/><BR/>Very unique, and well written, interpretation. Maybe she won't be having that dream anymore. ;)Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-6807944034909947762009-01-12T15:04:00.000-05:002009-01-12T15:04:00.000-05:00love the twist at the end ;)love the twist at the end ;)laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24399610219377859012009-01-12T14:33:00.000-05:002009-01-12T14:33:00.000-05:00Talk about negative psychology!Good one :)Talk about negative psychology!Good one :)Sameera Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05249126041067834608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-89178831491884011922009-01-12T14:30:00.000-05:002009-01-12T14:30:00.000-05:00Nice internal dialogue; it helps with the pacing o...Nice internal dialogue; it helps with the pacing of the story.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81557647796405992062009-01-12T13:40:00.000-05:002009-01-12T13:40:00.000-05:00lol! super ending....cool job!lol! super ending....cool job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22175443354972657582009-01-12T13:39:00.000-05:002009-01-12T13:39:00.000-05:00HA HA!!!!! Great ending!HA HA!!!!! Great ending!Ello - Ellen Ohhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311917335471167591noreply@blogger.com