tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post2572155790878501895..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Forties Club Finalist #47Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-52659893008728347822010-08-02T18:53:44.711-04:002010-08-02T18:53:44.711-04:00Wow! What a rough life! I like the sense of power ...Wow! What a rough life! I like the sense of power in this.Michelle D. Argylehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09696465137285587646noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83859999451147501552010-07-30T23:01:53.244-04:002010-07-30T23:01:53.244-04:00Tough life to say the least! Sounds like the child...Tough life to say the least! Sounds like the child soldiers in some of the more downtrodden African countries, blood diamonds and such. Though this exactly scenario could play out in a number of places today, sadly. <br /><br />Nice tone. You achieved a very detached sense of self here, which I'd believe necessary to survive in that environment.Vincent Kalehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04625863843215035035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80060507047190411422010-07-29T23:37:29.690-04:002010-07-29T23:37:29.690-04:00I'm with Janey and Laurel and Deb...heartbreak...I'm with Janey and Laurel and Deb...heartbreaking in its realism.Preciehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05071233480999640713noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-25971824097073434132010-07-29T09:13:02.564-04:002010-07-29T09:13:02.564-04:00Echo Janey and Laurel.Echo Janey and Laurel.Deb Smythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10990130480508998598noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-66391882171022051822010-07-29T07:14:50.324-04:002010-07-29T07:14:50.324-04:00If this didn't have such a strong ring of trut...If this didn't have such a strong ring of truth to it it would still be a powerful piece, but unfortunately it does and it's devastating for that reason.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24670110522382665542010-07-28T23:47:50.914-04:002010-07-28T23:47:50.914-04:00Chilling narration, and reminiscent of some of the...Chilling narration, and reminiscent of some of the child army recruits being used up in parts of the world.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24353782140410698602010-07-28T11:40:07.814-04:002010-07-28T11:40:07.814-04:00Dear Friends,
I appreciate your comments. Thank y...Dear Friends,<br /><br />I appreciate your comments. Thank you very much!<br /><br />You are right in your own ways about the story here. I never meant it to be closed.<br /><br />Looking forward to reading some of your stories!<br /><br />Cheers! :)Wuff Alhttp://agingmind.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-79916841370156157352010-07-28T01:42:08.252-04:002010-07-28T01:42:08.252-04:00Hi Wuff Al
Kind of reminds me of Lord of the Flie...Hi Wuff Al<br /><br />Kind of reminds me of Lord of the Flies or Animal Farm...possibly his harsh existence. Only 12 years old and already the Master of his domain.<br /><br />Excellent!<br /><br />Dottie :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08688849410604429533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-51069303629153661642010-07-27T23:51:31.756-04:002010-07-27T23:51:31.756-04:00Aww!A twelve-year-old Master.
That was something!V...Aww!A twelve-year-old Master.<br />That was something!Very well written.I liked that engaging speech by him.I wonder what all things I did as a twelve-year-old,err,nevermind.Erratic Thoughtshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14852558150033296079noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-78175618335125445202010-07-27T21:37:53.488-04:002010-07-27T21:37:53.488-04:00I so wish he were like a hundred retelling that st...I so wish he were like a hundred retelling that story ... but the age really did fit. :)Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-7874424807309186912010-07-27T07:00:50.604-04:002010-07-27T07:00:50.604-04:00Felt a lot like the first 5 minutes of 300. I too ...Felt a lot like the first 5 minutes of 300. I too loved the detached voice and the flow of it.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-8313382031460448542010-07-27T00:06:38.876-04:002010-07-27T00:06:38.876-04:00A dark story which flows well - I like how you'...A dark story which flows well - I like how you've written the dialog so specifically to meet the needs of the speaker.<br /><br />I'm still pondering your unique use of "uncovered"... for some reason, it's making me think about hawks with hoods... guess I have more writing to do.Jade L Blackwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15321787298101881675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-76005882174245038362010-07-26T17:17:41.601-04:002010-07-26T17:17:41.601-04:00Brutal and chilling, and not all that far from som...Brutal and chilling, and not all that far from some what's happened in some parts of the world in recent decades.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-66623872266273600112010-07-26T17:03:41.679-04:002010-07-26T17:03:41.679-04:00I get the sense that these army of boys go along w...I get the sense that these army of boys go along with what their twelve-year-old master says because they are role playing. Or at least that's what I'd like to believe.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-88820577973303431842010-07-26T12:02:22.548-04:002010-07-26T12:02:22.548-04:00Yow. Such a harsh life that must be!Yow. Such a harsh life that must be!Oddyoddyo13https://www.blogger.com/profile/05557994037779209704noreply@blogger.com