tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post2574233363377637277..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #219Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-7770036823443287612010-01-19T23:25:32.378-05:002010-01-19T23:25:32.378-05:00Well done, Louise. I LOVED IT! Even though it was ...Well done, Louise. I LOVED IT! Even though it was chilling and sad.Unknownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02700316710030111115noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81303159196395317912010-01-19T16:27:39.062-05:002010-01-19T16:27:39.062-05:00Thanks everyone for your really nice comments (-:
...Thanks everyone for your really nice comments (-:<br /><br />Aerin, you're right. Thanks for pointing it out. I tend to go crazy with my exclamation points!<br /><br />It's been great reading all the amazing stories in this contest.<br /><br />I'm so glad I stumbled across "The Clarity Of Night" (-:Louisehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02069113114977496650noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-11684049581105580602010-01-19T13:51:27.842-05:002010-01-19T13:51:27.842-05:00Oh you could feel for them!Oh you could feel for them!Kartikhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01067636999700672077noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-43848596627520067022010-01-19T13:15:53.449-05:002010-01-19T13:15:53.449-05:00God what a horrible predicament. But you put me i...God what a horrible predicament. But you put me in it very well. Excellent.catvibehttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38486561122008901112010-01-18T21:48:29.310-05:002010-01-18T21:48:29.310-05:00I feel the tragedy in this, which means you've...I feel the tragedy in this, which means you've written it well. In recent years, people from around here have died in Oregon and Sierra snows in similar circumstances, and this brings to mind what those early moments on the first day must have been like. Simply terrifying and so lonely.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-56319672416926149412010-01-18T19:08:04.765-05:002010-01-18T19:08:04.765-05:00Love the vulture theme here. Nice work!
~ Corra M...Love the vulture theme here. Nice work!<br /><br />~ Corra McFeydonAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-37051661902440822732010-01-18T14:04:52.244-05:002010-01-18T14:04:52.244-05:00oh! Such a peaceful end!oh! Such a peaceful end!Rachel Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13048590167153841615noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-26585092934226046582010-01-17T23:44:37.042-05:002010-01-17T23:44:37.042-05:00Strong ending.Strong ending.Craighttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344917148662934359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-27146943672655258892010-01-17T17:01:49.955-05:002010-01-17T17:01:49.955-05:00I love the realism of this. Authentic dialogue an...I love the realism of this. Authentic dialogue and situation nicely drawn together. The ending is tragic but I can think of worse ways to go than being lulled to sleep, snuggled by the one you love.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-65054782305924925292010-01-16T19:35:51.296-05:002010-01-16T19:35:51.296-05:00Well written, tense, with a great voice. Dialog i...Well written, tense, with a great voice. Dialog is perfect. Nice work.Zombies-R-Usnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-91954709835816273062010-01-16T19:30:06.771-05:002010-01-16T19:30:06.771-05:00Oh how sad and to know that actually happens. :(Oh how sad and to know that actually happens. :(Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53296995303410833282010-01-16T14:02:01.819-05:002010-01-16T14:02:01.819-05:00nicely done! chilling!!nicely done! chilling!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-65203950458118097152010-01-16T10:37:58.914-05:002010-01-16T10:37:58.914-05:00Nice job of portraying your characters through dia...Nice job of portraying your characters through dialogue.Deb Smythenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-75834660210236389002010-01-16T07:41:19.158-05:002010-01-16T07:41:19.158-05:00I like the setting of your story, and the conflict...I like the setting of your story, and the conflict. The dialogue is very natural, especially: "How long more..." It certainly beats the stuffiness of "How much longer..." Nicely done.James R. Tomlinsonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83759474562005264712010-01-16T07:21:39.074-05:002010-01-16T07:21:39.074-05:00Nice.
The conversation ensued flawlessly. I loved ...Nice.<br />The conversation ensued flawlessly. I loved this for the sheer fact it read smoothly and my attention did not waver at all. <br /><br />The last part where they reach out to each other was particularly touching. <br /><br />Beautiful. :-)Preetihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00279859240371070699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-11245815853322142842010-01-15T23:05:13.259-05:002010-01-15T23:05:13.259-05:00Caveat
Something I Would Keep
The dialogue - so ni...<br><br><a href="http://www.insearchofgiants.com/2010/01/commenting-on-silhouette.html" rel="nofollow">Caveat</a><br><br /><b>Something I Would Keep</b><br><br />The dialogue - <i>so</i> nicely done, it moves, it conveys double meanings, it's never clunky - good job<br /><br /><b>Something I Might Tweak</b><br><br />I'm not a fan of overusing exclamation points, so the three after "dead" are a little overkill for me.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-75786643005798711412010-01-14T20:09:34.997-05:002010-01-14T20:09:34.997-05:00way cool, louise!way cool, louise!laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-52738863849510189702010-01-14T06:45:35.136-05:002010-01-14T06:45:35.136-05:00Love the dialogue. Very tongue-in-cheek yet tender...Love the dialogue. Very tongue-in-cheek yet tender.<br /><br />Loved reading it.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-86242775627549763372010-01-13T23:32:40.757-05:002010-01-13T23:32:40.757-05:00Too real! Very well written. So sad that this does...Too real! Very well written. So sad that this does happen.<br /><br />Jean AnnJean Ann Williamsnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-67761446172187601512010-01-13T19:48:05.785-05:002010-01-13T19:48:05.785-05:00Chilling, heh heh... Very lifelike dialogue that c...Chilling, heh heh... Very lifelike dialogue that carries the story really nicely.McKoalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01457446171624585099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-25895034099218208662010-01-13T19:08:13.894-05:002010-01-13T19:08:13.894-05:00Chilling. Literally. I love the every day way she ...Chilling. Literally. I love the every day way she snaps at him and then the tender gesture.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.com