tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post2582410090775658718..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #3Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger33125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-68725804191325736382009-01-22T12:16:00.000-05:002009-01-22T12:16:00.000-05:00Cat, congratulations on a wonderful piece of writi...Cat, congratulations on a wonderful piece of writing! You are talented woman, indeed. Something in the water where you live, hmmmm?Terryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17075596786647102438noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-16397226097610924372009-01-21T06:01:00.000-05:002009-01-21T06:01:00.000-05:00No apologies necessary you poor only human person....No apologies necessary you poor only human person. From extrapolation your feedback says to me that I could do a little polishing on technical skill. Considering this is my first attempt at this kind of writing, I am thrilled at how well it came off! And am looking forward to trying it again after reading all the pieces. Thank you for the feedback! And I encourage you to head over to my blog for a nice treat for some of your other, less used recently, senses.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2354654534868632862009-01-20T23:08:00.000-05:002009-01-20T23:08:00.000-05:00Oops, sorry for the typo! I'm bleary-eyed. I mea...Oops, sorry for the typo! I'm bleary-eyed. I meant voice! Great job on voice too. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-82643990813392214412009-01-20T22:33:00.000-05:002009-01-20T22:33:00.000-05:002 pacings, cool! ;-) It is an honor to be in the ...2 pacings, cool! ;-) It is an honor to be in the 40s club. Thanks once again for this outstanding effort.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-35732033735412817512009-01-20T21:13:00.000-05:002009-01-20T21:13:00.000-05:00Great job on pacing, entertainment value, storytel...Great job on pacing, entertainment value, storytelling, and pacing! And welcome to the Forties Club!!<BR/><BR/>Thanks for being a wonderful part of the contest.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-89362938188605319292009-01-19T03:36:00.000-05:002009-01-19T03:36:00.000-05:00You captured the son's fustration in a brillia...You captured the son's fustration in a brilliant way. Very realistic.<BR/><BR/>A can feel the hurt & helplessness of the Mother after she read the message on her computer.<BR/><BR/>Very well done!Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17286909482780350161noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-12918097957267600332009-01-18T21:31:00.000-05:002009-01-18T21:31:00.000-05:00Sorry - the above comment is really MINE...lol - a...Sorry - the above comment is really MINE...lol - accidentally signed into my hubby's acct.<BR/><BR/>janabluesugarpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14775769108087898456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-57503795066492118132009-01-18T21:22:00.000-05:002009-01-18T21:22:00.000-05:00This, perhaps, is the scariest story yet!! (my old...This, perhaps, is the scariest story yet!! (my oldest is 13...) Every word true to life, and the relationships complicated to the core. Wonderfully written!<BR/><BR/>janaAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00792876497652233245noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-27915492068207892072009-01-18T12:37:00.000-05:002009-01-18T12:37:00.000-05:00The way you've written this story is really amazin...The way you've written this story is really amazing. Loved the way you ended it.<BR/>Gr8 job<BR/>:)<BR/>Thanks for reading my story<BR/>:)RiverSoulhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15417054068931773922noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10512685812997695192009-01-17T00:16:00.000-05:002009-01-17T00:16:00.000-05:00This writing in this story flowed so naturally, al...This writing in this story flowed so naturally, almost rhythmically, which made the kick-in-the-stomach ending even more painful. Your portrait of an angry teenager is perfect, and you nailed therapy-speak on the head. Your choice of wording in the last line (no reference to Tommy typing, but merely a mechanical message) emphasized the breadth of the chasm between mom and son. Wonderful job!Terryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17075596786647102438noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-43812992792893793882009-01-16T22:03:00.000-05:002009-01-16T22:03:00.000-05:00Thank you so much everyone, for your comments, the...Thank you so much everyone, for your comments, they mean very much to me. I am working my way through this contest and will get to each and every entry to visit you there. <BR/>And one more believer, yes it is good that he is still communicating, and yes Bernard and PJD, a darn waste of time and money his therapist is. And Sawan, it's real because it was inspired by true events, although it is absolutely fiction. For everyone and anyone who is wondering, it was inspired by true events with both of my sons that happened a long time ago, and those days have thankfully passed with all of relationships in good standing. I feel strong empathy for mothers(since I am one) AND children growing up in this age of therapy and 'medicine' and computers. It's a complicated morass at best and can only be solved on an individual basis.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-56998265749048630502009-01-16T18:38:00.000-05:002009-01-16T18:38:00.000-05:00Oh, damn.I wish Tommy would tell her what a useles...Oh, damn.<BR/><BR/>I wish Tommy would tell her what a useless waste of money the therapist is. Sheesh.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-16379099650780953992009-01-15T22:29:00.000-05:002009-01-15T22:29:00.000-05:00hey, in my book the door's still open... he is com...hey, in my book the door's still open... he is communicating...!! excellent story... it would be awful if he sed nothing...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-37134308457943164232009-01-14T22:37:00.000-05:002009-01-14T22:37:00.000-05:00you portrayed the troubled boy well - sad story, b...you portrayed the troubled boy well - sad story, but what is most interesting is how well you wrote this - up to the end. <BR/>(thankful my girls aren't like that but know enough of them that my heart goes out to families with them - including the family in this story - which means you did an excellent job)Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49555924222078425302009-01-13T11:02:00.000-05:002009-01-13T11:02:00.000-05:00The use of computer in the last line the very obje...The use of computer in the last line the very object that the mom wants to confiscate ties the story well...ceedyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17767787593275846653noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-56258277386657661672009-01-10T18:51:00.000-05:002009-01-10T18:51:00.000-05:00This is a very powerful story. I love how you hav...This is a very powerful story. I love how you have portrayed the fractured relationship so well in a short form. The computer "voice" in the end is chilling. I know these people! Excellent work.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-16704530611912142162009-01-09T20:40:00.000-05:002009-01-09T20:40:00.000-05:00I like the nonverbal ending of your story; it show...I like the nonverbal ending of your story; it shows how deep the boy's hatred is.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-6481002550613290882009-01-08T13:14:00.000-05:002009-01-08T13:14:00.000-05:00Jeez, how could some one be so real in her words??...Jeez, how could some one be so real in her words?? Beautifully written Catherine!Anil Sawanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09598267987035726165noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13797428086146730282009-01-08T12:10:00.000-05:002009-01-08T12:10:00.000-05:00A harsh subject... the double alienation by being ...A harsh subject... the double alienation by being a teenager and by living in the on-line age...<BR/><BR/>Well written.Vesperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12417602625059442986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-46545282533849635072009-01-08T12:09:00.000-05:002009-01-08T12:09:00.000-05:00Somebody needs an outward bound course.Somebody needs an outward bound course.Rachel Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13048590167153841615noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-34318849607055740192009-01-08T08:05:00.000-05:002009-01-08T08:05:00.000-05:00You could feel the pressure building between the t...You could feel the pressure building between the two opposing forces. A powerful read. :)Ruinwen Dagoriellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17838849121945131543noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-23261916345040114872009-01-07T21:33:00.000-05:002009-01-07T21:33:00.000-05:00Ohhh - that last sentence gave me the chills!!!! ...Ohhh - that last sentence gave me the chills!!!! Excellent, Cat!K.Lawson Gilberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11204234196229710524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39237968999498509722009-01-07T19:27:00.000-05:002009-01-07T19:27:00.000-05:00harsh, but true to life...harsh, but true to life...laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-32923014913010106482009-01-07T13:53:00.000-05:002009-01-07T13:53:00.000-05:00The tension between mom and son was palpable. Very...The tension between mom and son was palpable. Very nicely done.wrath999https://www.blogger.com/profile/10964105112015979524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3113464198217519642009-01-07T13:43:00.000-05:002009-01-07T13:43:00.000-05:00Having lived through 2 teen age sons, I feel for t...Having lived through 2 teen age sons, I feel for the mom. Tensions abound daily...good stuff.peggyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04915565997583564023noreply@blogger.com