tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post293926908464616019..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #150Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger30125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-60698929960837455762010-01-22T10:03:21.682-05:002010-01-22T10:03:21.682-05:00I loved the weirdness of it all, the disco ball, f...I loved the weirdness of it all, the disco ball, felt like defrosted poultry...great imagery.<br /><br />Congrats!<br /><br />Dottie :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08688849410604429533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18851524611170573522010-01-19T12:59:05.047-05:002010-01-19T12:59:05.047-05:00It was weird. But I liked it. A lot.It was weird. But I liked it. A lot.Tarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09008153523366719973noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-50177929787662297392010-01-19T12:15:17.424-05:002010-01-19T12:15:17.424-05:00A packed full tryst into the future. Very entertai...A packed full tryst into the future. Very entertaining.BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83048806308178325562010-01-18T14:42:45.750-05:002010-01-18T14:42:45.750-05:00Unique take on the prompt...very nicely done!Unique take on the prompt...very nicely done!Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45198574111259828212010-01-18T11:51:43.894-05:002010-01-18T11:51:43.894-05:00An interesting bit of spec-fi wrapped up in this o...An interesting bit of spec-fi wrapped up in this one. Not bad.Rabid Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13307255127156087170noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-31213118057750363142010-01-18T06:27:56.806-05:002010-01-18T06:27:56.806-05:00This completes my top three picks. Your story, aft...This completes my top three picks. Your story, after reading all 236 entries, had a lasting impression on me. Best of luck to you!James R. Tomlinsonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-66421204005433874422010-01-17T20:36:02.085-05:002010-01-17T20:36:02.085-05:00my caveat
Something I Would Keep
I LOVE the first ...<br><br><a href="http://www.insearchofgiants.com/2010/01/commenting-on-silhouette.html" rel="nofollow">my caveat</a><br><br /><b>Something I Would Keep</b><br><br />I LOVE the first line - it's true for the characters and also for the reader, and gets us ready to understand what's happening. I also appreciate the action (thank you thank you thank you) that moves the piece forward.<br /><br /><b>Something I Might Tweak</b><br><br />I'm not sure you need the line "I never thought" about drug-dealer - I like the punch delivered by "Ever since legalization"Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-29696938734240041902010-01-17T14:50:57.737-05:002010-01-17T14:50:57.737-05:00If only dealing could be boring now! ;) Great read...If only dealing could be boring now! ;) Great read!Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10028987562627008512010-01-17T12:52:04.381-05:002010-01-17T12:52:04.381-05:00Nice, and strange, I do like good writing about a ...Nice, and strange, I do like good writing about a possible futureBlodeueddhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03435479623560871881noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80558638562973356822010-01-17T06:46:47.793-05:002010-01-17T06:46:47.793-05:00This is scary.
I shivered in the end. The disco b...This is scary. <br />I shivered in the end. The disco ball, Mayme and the joystick... <br />the thwack made me jump... <br />"thousand mile stare" is one of the best phrases in this contest...<br />the plot is unique... <br />the perspective is even better...<br />in the end i left with an image of the crow thwacking against the window...and Mayme watching vacantly... <br /><br />OH GOD...<br /><br />Brilliant.Preetihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00279859240371070699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-73714471397565177772010-01-16T19:59:28.610-05:002010-01-16T19:59:28.610-05:00Legalize drugs and mostly seniors will be your cli...Legalize drugs and mostly seniors will be your clients? Intriguing take on both the picture and drug dealing in the future.<br /><br />Well done.Sarah Laurensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09252565450452195395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-12618197839136146302010-01-16T08:36:38.099-05:002010-01-16T08:36:38.099-05:00It's a scary vision but one with a lot of trut...It's a scary vision but one with a lot of truth I'd say. Great imagery and voice.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45267806436224569032010-01-16T02:31:20.882-05:002010-01-16T02:31:20.882-05:00a thousand mile stare. superb!<i>a thousand mile stare</i>. superb!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49840631110209270752010-01-15T08:58:50.196-05:002010-01-15T08:58:50.196-05:00Awesome!Awesome!Kartikhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01067636999700672077noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53258766269823082172010-01-14T02:53:38.824-05:002010-01-14T02:53:38.824-05:00This one is fascinating; distinctly different.This one is fascinating; distinctly different.McKoalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01457446171624585099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49015712182525174872010-01-13T21:02:24.514-05:002010-01-13T21:02:24.514-05:00Thanks to everyone for your comments. I'm hav...Thanks to everyone for your comments. I'm having a blast reading all the fantastic entries. Best of luck to all.Kurt Hendrickshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16183333362118745153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-9859688631762642802010-01-13T15:29:31.634-05:002010-01-13T15:29:31.634-05:00I can only echo how great that line was.I can only echo how great that line was.Craighttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344917148662934359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24214593471355021412010-01-13T09:58:10.720-05:002010-01-13T09:58:10.720-05:00I was just reading last night about how they are t...I was just reading last night about how they are trying to get pot legalized in California and it will likely be on the November ballot(for recreation, it's already legal for medicinal). So your story was excellent timing considering...I loved your use of imagery here. Defrosted poultry is about the best description I can imagine for such a thing, and it really is like that, old old withered flesh, especially if the hands are cold. Nice job! REally really nice job, so nice I'm sticking it on my evergrowing favs list.catvibehttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-64946893105471842322010-01-12T19:11:32.181-05:002010-01-12T19:11:32.181-05:00All very good. The poultry line is worth reading ...All very good. The poultry line is worth reading 149 other entries to get to.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-52467743590692824792010-01-12T17:50:46.008-05:002010-01-12T17:50:46.008-05:00This story pops! I love the detail, the setting, a...This story pops! I love the detail, the setting, and dialogue. Good job. --JRAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-66099281334268228412010-01-12T17:10:39.616-05:002010-01-12T17:10:39.616-05:00Like the callousness of the last line. That really...Like the callousness of the last line. That really sums him up.Patsyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12263765378083045973noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2161864089347614602010-01-12T12:36:05.568-05:002010-01-12T12:36:05.568-05:00neat...neat...laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49466038220615297392010-01-12T12:14:52.666-05:002010-01-12T12:14:52.666-05:00You know what is weird? My entry #149 has referenc...You know what is weird? My entry #149 has references to movie watching and drugs too :|<br /><br />Funny story though :P<br /><br />NPallavhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09597178864833810868noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53141035567880545352010-01-12T12:06:51.911-05:002010-01-12T12:06:51.911-05:00I love the disco ball. Defrosted poultry. Thousand...I love the disco ball. Defrosted poultry. Thousand mile stare. Lots of good detail here. I wonder if they are there to control her pain or euthanize her? <br /><br />Surreal.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49120520583987496292010-01-12T10:56:37.249-05:002010-01-12T10:56:37.249-05:00Felt like the start of a damn good story...I want ...Felt like the start of a damn good story...I want more!!!DILLIGAFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16520650650468676361noreply@blogger.com