tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post3123442465611302448..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #138Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger28125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-21755944979738931502010-01-23T00:48:26.756-05:002010-01-23T00:48:26.756-05:00Ah, the young always seems to think they know bett...Ah, the young always seems to think they know better than Mother, until it's proved otherwise.<br /><br />Congrats on the H/M!<br /><br />Dottie :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08688849410604429533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-88686512134954994102010-01-18T12:08:03.560-05:002010-01-18T12:08:03.560-05:00A fun read! Always listen to your mom is what I t...A fun read! Always listen to your mom is what I tell my kids.<br />;-)Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2694483499073639052010-01-17T21:22:33.999-05:002010-01-17T21:22:33.999-05:00my caveat
Something I Would Keep
The movement, gra...<br><br><a href="http://www.insearchofgiants.com/2010/01/commenting-on-silhouette.html" rel="nofollow">my caveat</a><br><br /><b>Something I Would Keep</b><br><br />The movement, grammar, dialogue are all expertly crafted (I get really irked when they're not...but then I'm high maintenance picky like that.)<br /><br /><b>Something I Might Tweak</b><br><br />the predictability - there are some really fresh bits to this piece, and I think you could definitely apply that same skill to the plotAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-70366758494898799882010-01-17T15:42:41.318-05:002010-01-17T15:42:41.318-05:00LOVE the voice of the cat! Being a cat person, I c...LOVE the voice of the cat! Being a cat person, I can totally see it! Sneaky. Mischevious, malevolent. ;) Great job! Loved it!Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22557858127161743962010-01-16T23:58:54.975-05:002010-01-16T23:58:54.975-05:00Nicely paced story, with a purrr-fectly predictabl...Nicely paced story, with a purrr-fectly predictable ending. Still, an original interpretation of the photograph.James R. Tomlinsonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-27400820775752951322010-01-16T14:04:00.131-05:002010-01-16T14:04:00.131-05:00Love the final line!Love the final line!Kurt Hendrickshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16183333362118745153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53486224804845591162010-01-16T06:53:26.985-05:002010-01-16T06:53:26.985-05:00Tim - this is a perfectly formed little fable. I ...Tim - this is a perfectly formed little fable. I think it would work really well as a teaching aide for 'stranger danger'. (I work in a school).<br /><br />Lovely build up to the inevitable sad ending.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90970716889270902922010-01-16T02:05:12.760-05:002010-01-16T02:05:12.760-05:00be wary of the dangers and listen to the mother. n...be wary of the dangers and listen to the mother. nice tale.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-64917266972393509782010-01-15T14:35:35.092-05:002010-01-15T14:35:35.092-05:00Had the fable feel to it somehow the unhappy demis...Had the fable feel to it somehow the unhappy demise fit to well! Clever.Michael Solenderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01120045114297450520noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-6770719057050910022010-01-15T06:07:57.048-05:002010-01-15T06:07:57.048-05:00Being cooped in your nest is sometimes good!Being cooped in your nest is sometimes good!Kartikhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01067636999700672077noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33825978822141637562010-01-12T14:26:35.194-05:002010-01-12T14:26:35.194-05:00So so stupid of the little one. I love the style o...So so stupid of the little one. I love the style of your piece. Very well done.lenahttp://www.thecolorsmagazine.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44697408800422311102010-01-12T11:31:54.012-05:002010-01-12T11:31:54.012-05:00My money was on cat, too. Sly, cunning creatures.
...My money was on cat, too. Sly, cunning creatures.<br /><br />Nice fabled tone here.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-4063699272896211042010-01-12T11:24:01.833-05:002010-01-12T11:24:01.833-05:00Being a cat lover and having seceral in the house ...Being a cat lover and having seceral in the house I knew it was a cat. Just had to be!!!<br /><br />Very Aesopian indeed. Well written!DILLIGAFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16520650650468676361noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-23822848087095621502010-01-12T11:10:24.497-05:002010-01-12T11:10:24.497-05:00lissen to yo mama!lissen to yo mama!laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44792400722933126192010-01-12T10:34:54.070-05:002010-01-12T10:34:54.070-05:00Well told. Great pacing. Loved the dialogue. And I...Well told. Great pacing. Loved the dialogue. And I guess I'm a little sick, cause this one made me smile.Deb Snoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18581547556317174982010-01-12T07:51:02.177-05:002010-01-12T07:51:02.177-05:00This made me sad. How many little ones get eaten ...This made me sad. How many little ones get eaten by cats. That's why my cat stays inside, so he can't be the murderer that he truly is. I really enjoyed this piece. Great writing.catvibehttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-14566800526121622652010-01-12T07:40:48.537-05:002010-01-12T07:40:48.537-05:00An enchantingly told cautionary tale!An enchantingly told cautionary tale!Tessahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05233122532137654099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74504883478583043732010-01-12T07:05:38.831-05:002010-01-12T07:05:38.831-05:00Sweet tale. I thought it might be a fox!Sweet tale. I thought it might be a fox!K. Solesnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72184703790984299182010-01-12T04:00:06.302-05:002010-01-12T04:00:06.302-05:00This is something really special. Defintely one of...This is something really special. Defintely one of my favouritesCraighttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344917148662934359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-76071815754710750122010-01-12T02:30:07.078-05:002010-01-12T02:30:07.078-05:00Fable feel to this one.
Nice.Fable feel to this one.<br />Nice.austerehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16839224877080864005noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-69834334873270027412010-01-12T01:50:11.387-05:002010-01-12T01:50:11.387-05:00Oh the mothers are so going to love this. :)
Very...Oh the mothers are so going to love this. :)<br /><br />Very enjoyable read with a good morale. :PAniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81332109393375109532010-01-11T22:10:58.645-05:002010-01-11T22:10:58.645-05:00Nice and clever. I like the dashes of rhyme and al...Nice and clever. I like the dashes of rhyme and alliteration.Melanie Odhnernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-23468652434964571102010-01-11T21:21:18.524-05:002010-01-11T21:21:18.524-05:00Fun! Lots of suspense...I was waiting with me brea...Fun! Lots of suspense...I was waiting with me breath held to see what kind of creature was down below!Leah McClellanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18183361669157109674noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-30585288788414777922010-01-11T20:57:32.802-05:002010-01-11T20:57:32.802-05:00I loved this... I may use it on my kids :-)I loved this... I may use it on my kids :-)Merry Monteleonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09435956005780500310noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90562787607763101242010-01-11T20:17:09.472-05:002010-01-11T20:17:09.472-05:00Mother knows best.Mother knows best.kashersnoreply@blogger.com