tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post3222550074250097665..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #48Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger23125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24847784371381819072009-01-20T21:54:00.000-05:002009-01-20T21:54:00.000-05:00Great job with pacing, storytelling, and voice!Tha...Great job with pacing, storytelling, and voice!<BR/><BR/>Thanks for being a wonderful part of the contest!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-85678172952330631622009-01-18T20:10:00.000-05:002009-01-18T20:10:00.000-05:00Jennifer - Thanks. It's what happened to Susannah...Jennifer - Thanks. It's what happened to Susannah that intrigues me... ;)<BR/><BR/>Catvibe - Cheers! Freaky is good.<BR/><BR/>Aniket - Absolutely! There was once a human being there.......<BR/><BR/> The original intention of that line was to refer to the people standing in front of, and behind the protagonist. On reflection, it more obviously pertains to the carrier bags...........iLL Manhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08107892879700381858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-32208156997138126092009-01-18T14:37:00.000-05:002009-01-18T14:37:00.000-05:00Well, even assassins have the right to love don't ...Well, even assassins have the right to love don't they! :-D Nice one there! Loved the line: "Neither of them look like they'll make it home intact." lolAniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-69870787172422945952009-01-17T09:38:00.000-05:002009-01-17T09:38:00.000-05:00Good work. Kind of freaky, eh?Good work. Kind of freaky, eh?Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-73516032322224544682009-01-15T22:33:00.000-05:002009-01-15T22:33:00.000-05:00I love the casual way he is thinking about "Suz" a...I love the casual way he is thinking about "Suz" and how it sets off the shocking thing he is about to do. Nicely done!jazhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09559917865938143791noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-89727871800701832302009-01-13T17:35:00.000-05:002009-01-13T17:35:00.000-05:00Rebecca/littlesiantnick- Thanks folks! Espadrille...Rebecca/littlesiantnick- Thanks folks! <BR/><BR/>Espadrilles with white socks too.....Yech!iLL Manhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08107892879700381858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24993489838663478542009-01-13T13:05:00.000-05:002009-01-13T13:05:00.000-05:00Excellent imagery.Excellent imagery.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11229737878240386379noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-86479908214079089852009-01-13T05:41:00.000-05:002009-01-13T05:41:00.000-05:00liked this, & liked the fact it leaves you won...liked this, & liked the fact it leaves you wondering. Tightly told, with good imagery.<BR/><BR/>to be fair those shoes deserved it ;-)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-43452270107441908532009-01-12T18:55:00.000-05:002009-01-12T18:55:00.000-05:00KLG - Thanks. It's all about the character trying...KLG - Thanks. It's all about the character trying to remain detached and emotionless, and only just succeeding.<BR/><BR/>Szelsofa - Ah! I understand now...<BR/>Sad to see you aren't taking part, I always enjoy your take on the subject matter. <BR/><BR/>Leatherdykeuk - I think so too, though there are always plenty of spooky/grisly tales that crop up in this competition. Cheers!<BR/><BR/>Ewen.iLL Manhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08107892879700381858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-57508602875844446842009-01-12T15:51:00.000-05:002009-01-12T15:51:00.000-05:00Fabulous. There are never enough random killer sto...Fabulous. There are never enough random killer stories :)Rachel Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13048590167153841615noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-15988945258361408622009-01-12T15:39:00.000-05:002009-01-12T15:39:00.000-05:00Yes, Ewen, I'm not taking part this time.I think t...Yes, Ewen, I'm not taking part this time.<BR/>I think that I confused some words in my previous comment. Of course it was not the unholy trinity that captured <I>me, </I>, but the way expression captured the world of 'glass, steel and feet' was that I liked the most. Sorry for the confusion.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81275258524856358332009-01-11T19:45:00.000-05:002009-01-11T19:45:00.000-05:00I really like the style here...it brought an aloof...I really like the style here...it brought an aloofness to the character. Good writing.K.Lawson Gilberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11204234196229710524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-40843943320886970292009-01-11T19:42:00.000-05:002009-01-11T19:42:00.000-05:00Laughingwolf - Thankyou!Szelsofa - Are you sitting...Laughingwolf - Thankyou!<BR/><BR/>Szelsofa - Are you sitting this one out? Glad to know you dug the story. ;)<BR/><BR/>Sarah - Cheers! I wanted that 'just a guy doing a job' feel, despite the grisly and immoral nature of his work.<BR/><BR/>September - Thanks. Glad I kept you hooked.<BR/><BR/><BR/>Ewen.iLL Manhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08107892879700381858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-62440826595523128312009-01-11T17:28:00.000-05:002009-01-11T17:28:00.000-05:00wow...I kept wondering what he was going to do but...wow...I kept wondering what he was going to do but didn't realize mr. jeans would be the casualty. Yes, I too wonder what he did to sweet Susannah.<BR/>Good job.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-89208348861988709222009-01-11T15:59:00.000-05:002009-01-11T15:59:00.000-05:00Sharp writing, Ewen. You worked in a lot of nice d...Sharp writing, Ewen. You worked in a lot of nice details, as his observations heightened with his anticipation. And I liked how his thoughts grooved back to himself, and his own loss, afterwards. He's a cool customer. <BR/><BR/>Very engaging story. Enjoyed it quite a bit.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-85114620072299342482009-01-11T15:55:00.000-05:002009-01-11T15:55:00.000-05:00I was hoping to see your entry, Ewen, and your vis...I was hoping to see your entry, Ewen, and your visuals satisfied me quite a bit.<BR/>I admit I had to read the piece at least twice to get it fully behind my skull, but I did love those visuals...<BR/>*the unholy trinity* especially captured me.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-6099601385356543042009-01-11T15:38:00.000-05:002009-01-11T15:38:00.000-05:00nice touch, ewen :)nice touch, ewen :)laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-78483374499423219452009-01-11T15:16:00.000-05:002009-01-11T15:16:00.000-05:00Harshad - Cheers! It's hard to lighten up grim sub...Harshad - Cheers! It's hard to lighten up grim subject matter, but I'm glad I made someone chuckle.<BR/><BR/>JaneyV - Thanks. I like to think Mr Grey Espadrilles crime was of the fashion variety, but beyond that........... ;)<BR/><BR/>Lena/JR - Money. He's an assasin/ hitman.<BR/><BR/>Sameera - You've correctly pointed out the 'failure' in my entry. It feels inconclusive, like there should be a continuation of the narrative. What can I say? I like to baffle and confuse.... ;)iLL Manhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08107892879700381858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-27092832658040988982009-01-11T13:32:00.000-05:002009-01-11T13:32:00.000-05:00Yeah, there's got to be a reason for "offing" some...Yeah, there's got to be a reason for "offing" someone, or at least a theory or two. Not easy with 250 words.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-67787683383530424892009-01-11T12:51:00.000-05:002009-01-11T12:51:00.000-05:00Wonderful imagery!Was it revenge or was he paid fo...Wonderful imagery!Was it revenge or was he paid for it?Could be the beginning of a novel :)<BR/><BR/>Well done!Sameera Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05249126041067834608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24370833747152490112009-01-11T12:35:00.000-05:002009-01-11T12:35:00.000-05:00would love to know more why he is doing it.. but i...would love to know more why he is doing it.. but its tough to put everything in 250 words :)<BR/>Well done :)Lenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09787400183444796423noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-89114762245298555772009-01-11T12:30:00.000-05:002009-01-11T12:30:00.000-05:00I love the peek into the mind of an assassin. It ...I love the peek into the mind of an assassin. It was a nice touch to have him worry about the children. Killer with a conscience? So what had Mr Grey Espadrilles done to Susannah?<BR/><BR/>I enjoyed this piece very much, Ewen. Well done.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90852421883399333692009-01-11T12:25:00.000-05:002009-01-11T12:25:00.000-05:00nice description...and loved the humor abt the pol...nice description...and loved the humor abt the polytehne bags and the old lady :-)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com