tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post3403543379140073533..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #149Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-7666613466555370522009-07-27T10:03:22.401-04:002009-07-27T10:03:22.401-04:00Easy to give away. Very hard to get back. On her...Easy to give away. Very hard to get back. On her knees indeed.<br /><br />High marks for pacing.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-42500080021067359622009-07-20T19:26:17.132-04:002009-07-20T19:26:17.132-04:00LOL @ Deb's comment!
I liked this, but agree t...LOL @ Deb's comment!<br />I liked this, but agree this would be much nicer as a longer piece! Still a very enjoyable read.Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18757327323663706442009-07-20T17:33:08.239-04:002009-07-20T17:33:08.239-04:00It's such a pity that you were constrained by ...It's such a pity that you were constrained by the word limit as I think that this would blossom into a great story if you could give it more depth. You did very well.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-91147687899613018672009-07-19T14:20:33.740-04:002009-07-19T14:20:33.740-04:00I agree with Pete. Would have loved a para in betw...I agree with Pete. Would have loved a para in between to ease the transition. I too loved her character and her inner dialogues.<br /><br />She should have gone out with Chandler, for he too makes jokes when he is nervous. Coming to think of it, I do too. :)Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-6327352348530748642009-07-18T08:30:55.781-04:002009-07-18T08:30:55.781-04:00It's amazing how many people think being a blo...It's amazing how many people think being a blood sucking vampire preferable to retaining one's soul.BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-4956921281114766902009-07-18T08:27:50.677-04:002009-07-18T08:27:50.677-04:00This flowed smoothly for me, even though it made m...This flowed smoothly for me, even though it made me shiver a little. I don't care for Lucifer much. <br />Good imagery.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-31797975381876732202009-07-18T02:24:51.955-04:002009-07-18T02:24:51.955-04:00Oh, Deb S... hiss, hiss! Good one. :-)
Went a l...Oh, Deb S... hiss, hiss! Good one. :-)<br /><br />Went a little fast for me... especially the falling to the knees and the total submission to the vampire. I get that he's got a magical/mystical control over women in his presence, but a little too fast. I do like her inner dialog about forgiveness, and the "no matter" bit.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-20272565662204210452009-07-17T08:08:26.734-04:002009-07-17T08:08:26.734-04:00I especially enjoyed the visuals of the second par...I especially enjoyed the visuals of the second paragraph. The sinister man (vampire) was really well captured.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-21790931255612657992009-07-16T13:33:51.657-04:002009-07-16T13:33:51.657-04:00good pace...good pace...quin brownehttp://www.quinbrowne-words.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72851643470279482242009-07-16T10:22:09.424-04:002009-07-16T10:22:09.424-04:00Yep, blind dates suck.Yep, blind dates suck.Deb Snoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-21542747862342668162009-07-15T20:23:45.976-04:002009-07-15T20:23:45.976-04:00Everyone has their price. In this instant, it'...Everyone has their price. In this instant, it's much costlier than most.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-67092909587279620662009-07-15T20:03:23.790-04:002009-07-15T20:03:23.790-04:00I like the internal dialogue.I like the internal dialogue.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-29937154814363404922009-07-15T18:33:38.049-04:002009-07-15T18:33:38.049-04:00should've stuck with the door... and ignored t...should've stuck with the door... and ignored the jar ;) lollaughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.com