tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post3514922894288753810..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #9Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger26125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3438635358723220452008-03-04T13:17:00.000-05:002008-03-04T13:17:00.000-05:00Ahh-- so sweet! I love the romance of tradition. ...Ahh-- so sweet! I love the romance of tradition. Great use of color throughout. And I love the opening. "Her plump face wrinkled with the pleasure of laughter" captures the grandmother's character so perfectly. Upon rereading, I think that your use of color is very effective in setting the tone. The reader can't help but feel happy.Ainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08402176500997528105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-64856484588065445812008-03-04T09:12:00.000-05:002008-03-04T09:12:00.000-05:00Great ending! Very poetic and lovely descriptions...Great ending! Very poetic and lovely descriptions. High marks!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-75921634078963254402008-02-28T17:06:00.000-05:002008-02-28T17:06:00.000-05:00" holding onto the tall grasses to keep from falli..." holding onto the tall grasses to keep from falling into the azure well of the sky"<BR/><BR/>When I was about 8 or 9 I spent the entire month of May going to a meadow near where we lived, lying in the grass and looking up at the clouds. And I swear that I could feel the earth spinning on its axis as it hurtled through space. I used to hold onto the grass in case I was pulled into the sky. The feeling of vertigo was intoxicating which is probably why I went back day after day. The path to the meadow was through an apple orchard.<BR/><BR/>I'd forgotten all about it till I read that line. Thank you for bringing me back to a really happy moment in my childhood with your wonderful story. it's a memory I will treasure.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22720267317701714572008-02-27T14:54:00.000-05:002008-02-27T14:54:00.000-05:00What a charming and happy story. I love the food ...What a charming and happy story. I love the food imagery. And I really like "her dress the colour of apple flowers".<BR/><BR/>Charming.Thérèsehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05925229457609377645noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44201902530593614612008-02-26T21:55:00.000-05:002008-02-26T21:55:00.000-05:00Beautiful, Vesper! The part about holding on to t...Beautiful, Vesper! The part about holding on to the grass so as to not fall into the sky - The most brilliant single line of the whole contest imo. Bravo.Hoodiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17616427797201977083noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38750403348905892512008-02-25T12:24:00.000-05:002008-02-25T12:24:00.000-05:00The imagery in this story is beautiful executed! I...The imagery in this story is beautiful executed! I love how you've weaved various images from paragraph to paragraph too. Lovely story! Excellently written.bluesugarpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14775769108087898456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87425170976823372072008-02-24T19:07:00.000-05:002008-02-24T19:07:00.000-05:00This is just charming.This is just charming.pattinase (abbott)https://www.blogger.com/profile/02916037185235335846noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49018200830576440382008-02-24T14:41:00.000-05:002008-02-24T14:41:00.000-05:00sweet as marmalade! Charming story.sweet as marmalade! Charming story.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2568206860984768922008-02-24T10:34:00.000-05:002008-02-24T10:34:00.000-05:00A treasure indeed.A treasure indeed.BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-91940241067549332622008-02-24T05:22:00.000-05:002008-02-24T05:22:00.000-05:00It was a very pleasant and calming experience. Tha...It was a very pleasant and calming experience. Thank you for all those lines and images that caress the senses and for those positive energies conveyed!SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53172273938736763032008-02-23T15:29:00.000-05:002008-02-23T15:29:00.000-05:00This is utterly lovely, Vesper. I love the imagery...This is utterly lovely, Vesper. I love the imagery, there are some delicious lines in here. Beautiful work!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04871239587214383387noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2477295137527918552008-02-23T14:49:00.000-05:002008-02-23T14:49:00.000-05:00Oh, Vesper, I just loved this. How wonderful to tr...Oh, Vesper, I just loved this. How wonderful to trace an entire family's history and happiness through a single tree. <BR/><BR/>Gorgeous images sprinkled throughout: her grandma's smile, relating her first kiss and her wedding dress to the apples, that "inquiring moon." Lovely. <BR/><BR/>One of my favorites so far! :)Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90008875111619717022008-02-22T14:43:00.000-05:002008-02-22T14:43:00.000-05:00You captured a lifetime in this little tale - a ch...You captured a lifetime in this little tale - a childhood mystery revealed. Beautiful!Missyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16638784910676212171noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-78997654932373178592008-02-22T11:35:00.000-05:002008-02-22T11:35:00.000-05:00Hey Vesper,I always love your openings and endings...Hey Vesper,<BR/>I always love your openings and endings, they always bring you in and leave you with contentment. Very nicely done.Ello - Ellen Ohhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311917335471167591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72799726979667834862008-02-22T07:55:00.000-05:002008-02-22T07:55:00.000-05:00I thought you captured childhood imagination perfe...I thought you captured childhood imagination perfectly in that first paragraph " look hard... trying to catch a sparkle".<BR/>enjoyed this.Gonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17979621132151870323noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38008261449869867222008-02-22T06:53:00.000-05:002008-02-22T06:53:00.000-05:00I would like to thank all of you for reading my li...I would like to thank all of you for reading my little piece and for the very kind comments. :-)<BR/><BR/>Vesper, no name is unique but what's inside each of us truly is (and even the outside, of course)...<BR/><BR/><I>Vesper at Chick With a Quill</I>Vesperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12417602625059442986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-25054515384183883672008-02-22T00:10:00.000-05:002008-02-22T00:10:00.000-05:00Lyrical and hopeful. I truly enjoyed this one! The...Lyrical and hopeful. I truly enjoyed this one! The line Bernita pointed out was also my favorite.<BR/><BR/>btw, TWO Vespers? I'm having a brain implosion!<BR/>:-)Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11794946908789120139noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-32327652384971671462008-02-21T23:58:00.000-05:002008-02-21T23:58:00.000-05:00Wow, the two vesper thing had me for a moment. I ...Wow, the two vesper thing had me for a moment. I thought this story was very sweet, heart-warming.Bethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-61221203641284932352008-02-21T16:33:00.000-05:002008-02-21T16:33:00.000-05:00Wonderfully littered with the falling leaves of im...Wonderfully littered with the falling leaves of imagery this entry. One to be "treasured"!DBA Lehanehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12902739256082564278noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90675875367300317882008-02-21T15:42:00.000-05:002008-02-21T15:42:00.000-05:00This is a lovely piece." to keep from falling into...This is a lovely piece.<BR/>" to keep from falling into the well of the sky" - yes.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-15921540624835924692008-02-21T15:39:00.000-05:002008-02-21T15:39:00.000-05:00when i saw this post i was totally freaked out..."...when i saw this post i was totally freaked out..."I DIDN'T WRITE THAT!"....then i remembered that there's another "vesper" out there. funny how blog identities totally *become* you. i've been "vesper" on the internet for four years now....it's like another aspect of my identity...<BR/><BR/><BR/>strange. yet nice.Adminhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09031370976246712353noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3520143765002683982008-02-21T14:40:00.000-05:002008-02-21T14:40:00.000-05:00on a mound of memories she stands... very well tol...on a mound of memories she stands... very well told....paisleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08231453820728399262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58302474866702616362008-02-21T13:50:00.000-05:002008-02-21T13:50:00.000-05:00Nice work Vesper. I love the first line. I'm alw...Nice work Vesper. I love the first line. I'm always a sucker for "magic". <BR/><BR/>Even though I was looking forward to a tale of pirates or fairies, this was very nice.<BR/><BR/>Good use of imagery (as always for you) such as "suave rain of flowers".<BR/><BR/>PaulAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22554901270512212492008-02-21T13:45:00.000-05:002008-02-21T13:45:00.000-05:00Very charming and heartwarming. I like how the mem...Very charming and heartwarming. I like how the memories are made precious by the tree.JRVogthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501549592361240370noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-34135800511973853602008-02-21T13:18:00.000-05:002008-02-21T13:18:00.000-05:00Lovely story!Lovely story!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com