tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post3555547706046249318..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #2Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-78664284253882943782007-08-07T21:09:00.000-04:002007-08-07T21:09:00.000-04:00I like the voice and the circular form. There's a...I like the voice and the circular form. There's a different kind of justice way out there.<BR/><BR/>Great writing as usual. High marks!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-63909380820601248192007-08-05T07:19:00.000-04:002007-08-05T07:19:00.000-04:00Grinable!Grinable!Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-19279723669485032282007-08-03T11:17:00.000-04:002007-08-03T11:17:00.000-04:00A lot of characterization in a few words. I enjoye...A lot of characterization in a few words. I enjoyed this. Nice job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-60030798280396148422007-08-03T10:05:00.000-04:002007-08-03T10:05:00.000-04:00The voice of the narrator is the story. Pretty go...The voice of the narrator is the story. Pretty good.Khon Laohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13875982601155520479noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-37056914567940217662007-08-02T23:03:00.000-04:002007-08-02T23:03:00.000-04:00Even the "it's already been said" line has been us...Even the "it's already been said" line has been used. Ah, well. It *still* must be said that this was my favorite that I've read so far. The way you brought it full circle, and balanced the wry humor of his voice with the danger of his predicament, really sold it. Great work.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74025011421681646262007-08-02T16:20:00.000-04:002007-08-02T16:20:00.000-04:00It's already been said, but I'll say it again: goo...It's already been said, but I'll say it again: good, strong voice.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-75325945045201134772007-08-02T03:55:00.000-04:002007-08-02T03:55:00.000-04:00Strong voice and characterisation and good pace - ...Strong voice and characterisation and good pace - nicely done!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04871239587214383387noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22581081153673519252007-07-31T15:58:00.000-04:002007-07-31T15:58:00.000-04:00i LIKE it!i LIKE it!AngelConradiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09423318903817661244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80040047523761920992007-07-30T21:14:00.000-04:002007-07-30T21:14:00.000-04:00He's still thinking about Darlene and her red dres...He's still thinking about Darlene and her red dress even after a swift kick in the head. ha ha!<BR/>Good story.Jeffhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06106410070220667314noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1219989363587280692007-07-29T07:00:00.000-04:002007-07-29T07:00:00.000-04:00Yes, loved the pace, and the repeat in the the las...Yes, loved the pace, and the repeat in the the last line.apprenticehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13784785172285984036noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10730386113752327252007-07-28T15:47:00.000-04:002007-07-28T15:47:00.000-04:00Interesting look at a 'guy' thing. Sounds like th...Interesting look at a 'guy' thing. Sounds like they are all thinking with their heads instead of their brains. Good dialog and pacing. Nice writing.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12150744935921843170noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-47490929898608032772007-07-27T23:27:00.000-04:002007-07-27T23:27:00.000-04:00Very funny story. I like the bookended approach.Very funny story. I like the bookended approach.Anthony Rapinohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11581208296144295224noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-41314660721268776432007-07-27T10:51:00.000-04:002007-07-27T10:51:00.000-04:00terrific voice, lots of story in very few words. w...terrific voice, lots of story in very few words. well executed (no pun intended)<BR/><BR/>Victor J. BanisAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-76995573466714203102007-07-27T04:16:00.000-04:002007-07-27T04:16:00.000-04:00What a desperate character...I found it sad. Perpa...What a desperate character...I found it sad. Perpaphs it was that the writer disliked the protagonist, yes.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-28458620856133469952007-07-26T20:44:00.000-04:002007-07-26T20:44:00.000-04:00I always enjoy a protagonist that you dislike just...I always enjoy a protagonist that you dislike just a little. Adds some flavor.<BR/><BR/>I do think the poor guys friends overreacted just a little.<BR/><BR/>Nice story.Hoodiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17616427797201977083noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-489202467356810082007-07-26T15:08:00.000-04:002007-07-26T15:08:00.000-04:00Man, what a great voice you have. Thanks for the c...Man, what a great voice you have. Thanks for the chuckles.Jaye Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09407478042834459126noreply@blogger.com