tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post359177423545453497..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #34Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger28125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5351844322327930092010-01-19T17:08:42.742-05:002010-01-19T17:08:42.742-05:00Dear Entrants #1-105,
I have read your pieces so ...Dear Entrants #1-105,<br /><br />I have read your pieces so that I can fairly participate in the Readers' Choice vote. (I read all of them through last week, before I started commenting.) I <i>will</i> be coming back around to offer <a href="http://www.insearchofgiants.com/2010/01/commenting-on-silhouette.html" rel="nofollow">my keep/tweak comment</a>, but I didn't want anyone to snark. <br /><br />Cheers,<br />Aerin (#236)<br /><br />BTW, it's perfectly fine if you still want to snark, but this way you can choose a more appropriate subject, like the new Starbucks paninis or the people over 35 who are exclusively on MySpaceAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90280103541532971802010-01-18T20:29:14.129-05:002010-01-18T20:29:14.129-05:00Confusion is there because you are glimpsing at a ...Confusion is there because you are glimpsing at a piece of a puzzle. It would seem I haven't written this piece's purpose clearly. Then again, revelation is not necessarily made known through clarity. <br /><br />I'm glad people have pointed out what I had hope were obvious elements (apocalyptic tones etc). There are also a lot of underling tones that connect to other moments not revealed. I believe this is lends toward questions.<br /><br />Thank you for reading and for your comments. They were what I had hoped for.V.B. Purcellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11783355473268970355noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81009012032284278742010-01-17T18:01:28.148-05:002010-01-17T18:01:28.148-05:00I love the way you took the grand scope of a post-...I love the way you took the grand scope of a post-apocolyptic world down to such an individual level. The MC's voice really came through.Deb Smythenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87075986101737438202010-01-17T17:26:25.516-05:002010-01-17T17:26:25.516-05:00I guess the end of the road is nothing more than a...I guess the end of the road is nothing more than a dump. Plastic doesn't break down and is very menacing. Your setting has left these images slushing around in my head.james r tomlinsonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-85629973351964662072010-01-17T00:47:25.511-05:002010-01-17T00:47:25.511-05:00I'll admit to coming to the comments for some ...I'll admit to coming to the comments for some clarification on this one - I didn't follow it very well at first. However, I was intrigued enough to want to follow up, because there were some lovely touches in here.McKoalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01457446171624585099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-79246655835958395632010-01-12T14:25:07.994-05:002010-01-12T14:25:07.994-05:00great twist on the end of the world scenario.great twist on the end of the world scenario.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-41862133807021063612010-01-12T13:04:17.948-05:002010-01-12T13:04:17.948-05:00Being that the stories are only 250words, I though...Being that the stories are only 250words, I thought I would keep my comment to a minimum. I'm sorry that my previous comment "huh?" (previously removed) was lacking - what I meant to say was I had trouble following what was happening here and I found the story just a little bit confusing. I think if the story could have been expanded more, I could have gleaned a better understanding of all that was going on, and possibly why. Besides that, I do enjoy off-the-beaten-track stories, and the subject here concerning society thrust into the gutter sets my mind wandering into "what-if" mode. Thanks for the insight.Jimmie Veenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-19611869854112955282010-01-11T21:00:58.216-05:002010-01-11T21:00:58.216-05:00It's amazing that this person has faith at all...It's amazing that this person has faith at all given the circumstances. Bleak and bleaker. Nice imagery.catvibehttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-21809049605722452752010-01-11T16:07:10.212-05:002010-01-11T16:07:10.212-05:00Bleak. So nearly hopeless except for the prayer at...Bleak. So nearly hopeless except for the prayer at the end. This really creates a mood! Good work.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-11306452448994863762010-01-11T07:00:19.878-05:002010-01-11T07:00:19.878-05:00An undertaker at the end of the world?
I'm los...An undertaker at the end of the world?<br />I'm lost.austerehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16839224877080864005noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58979100932530964202010-01-10T23:15:32.539-05:002010-01-10T23:15:32.539-05:00I think the opening line is great:
"...should...I think the opening line is great:<br />"<i>...should’ve checked the sky and see if it was still mourning the loss of the world</i>"<br />Definitely post-apocalyptic, to me. I also am lost with a few minor details, however the strong, bleak voice makes it not matter to me. <br />The scene is vividly written, great use of words.Terrihttp://misterri.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-31446459194016489742010-01-10T20:23:02.326-05:002010-01-10T20:23:02.326-05:00Sorry, but being honest, this confused me. I didn&...Sorry, but being honest, this confused me. I didn't get many of the references. Like, for instance, fallen bagels creating Jackson Pollock impressions on the floor... just couldn't see how. <br /><br />Plus, if it's apocalyptic and the mc is one of the few survivors (as hinted by 'who else would put those maggoty baggies in the cauldrons?), I wondered who put the dead bodies in the baggies in the first place, and seeing as they're infested by maggots, not too well either.kashersnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1388693845712910852010-01-09T20:11:57.491-05:002010-01-09T20:11:57.491-05:00so mote it be, veronica...so mote it be, veronica...laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-41740105995236192922010-01-09T15:11:52.597-05:002010-01-09T15:11:52.597-05:00Two reads later, I'm still not sure about the ...Two reads later, I'm still not sure about the post-apocalyptic theory. It sounds like a mortician going through a tough time for sure though. But I like the ambiguity that this piece has created in its interpretations :)Kartikhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01067636999700672077noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-37548369050662878982010-01-09T13:50:09.150-05:002010-01-09T13:50:09.150-05:00Interesting, but I got a little lost, still I unde...Interesting, but I got a little lost, still I understood it was about life and death. Will miss MJ.Amias (ljm and liquidplastic)https://www.blogger.com/profile/14722413697537828830noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-37835695437223803902010-01-09T08:21:41.753-05:002010-01-09T08:21:41.753-05:00I understood body bags for baggies. I was totally...I understood body bags for baggies. I was totally drawn into your dystopian tale. Is this part of a larger writing? I really liked it.Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44531808387551800262010-01-08T17:50:15.117-05:002010-01-08T17:50:15.117-05:00Strong piece. He seems like he almost doesn't ...Strong piece. He seems like he almost doesn't care anymore and that doesn't bother him even though it should. Perhaps he is just nitpicking the small things because the big stuff is just too much to deal with. Thought provokingCraighttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344917148662934359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-75741683553412025072010-01-08T13:33:29.615-05:002010-01-08T13:33:29.615-05:00An apolyptic mortuary attendant?
This is bloody g...An apolyptic mortuary attendant?<br /><br />This is bloody good stuff Veronica!<br /><br />Bloody good!DILLIGAFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16520650650468676361noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-65001115492430824552010-01-08T13:27:55.589-05:002010-01-08T13:27:55.589-05:00Sigh. All in a day's work. And what work it is...Sigh. All in a day's work. And what work it is? Damn. <br />There is a machinic, droll faced approach to the piece added to which is a certain slobbishness and inertia. <br />It all sums up to a narrative that left me gaping at the screen. I thoroughly loved reading it.Preetihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00279859240371070699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-9609374952742775212010-01-08T13:18:55.720-05:002010-01-08T13:18:55.720-05:00Bleak but amusing -- I love the Pollack vomiting!Bleak but amusing -- I love the Pollack vomiting!Rachel Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13048590167153841615noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-84585546259254578892010-01-08T13:14:08.219-05:002010-01-08T13:14:08.219-05:00I agree with JaneyV. I also find this piece bleak ...I agree with JaneyV. I also find this piece bleak and yet enjoyable. Well done.Meghanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03375626649089998707noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-30655849918796402182010-01-08T13:05:47.123-05:002010-01-08T13:05:47.123-05:00I'm guessing the title is an homage to I am Le...I'm guessing the title is an homage to I am Legend and that baggies are the dead bodies. I imagine that the clothes become quite baggy as they decompose. I think Bernita has it again. A Janitor for the Apocalypse. I love his madness. Bleak yet thoroughly enjoyable.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-7487055316435600742010-01-08T11:43:53.671-05:002010-01-08T11:43:53.671-05:00sounds quite dystopian to me, too. nice visuals wi...sounds quite dystopian to me, too. nice visuals with the Pollack and all the food gone crap. kind of makes me want to throw out. i think this was the writer's best intention. she did it very well.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58959568322162164962010-01-08T05:37:41.544-05:002010-01-08T05:37:41.544-05:00I take it "baggies" are body bags?
A jan...I take it "baggies" are body bags?<br />A janitorial figure after a nuke holocaust is my take.Very well done.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-17914842656991720072010-01-08T02:10:00.996-05:002010-01-08T02:10:00.996-05:00This evokes a feeling of hopelessness in me. So sa...This evokes a feeling of hopelessness in me. So sad. But greatly put into words.Lenahttp://www.thecolorsmagazine.com/noreply@blogger.com