tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post3986738097614319555..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #16Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44371482773651857092008-03-04T13:29:00.000-05:002008-03-04T13:29:00.000-05:00Great job with dialogue! These two sound like a c...Great job with dialogue! These two sound like a classic duo. I'd love to see what happens next!Ainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08402176500997528105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-43895465198988011152008-03-04T09:17:00.000-05:002008-03-04T09:17:00.000-05:00A nice glimpse into a larger story. I love the "b...A nice glimpse into a larger story. I love the "bait" idea. Those little sparkles in a story raise it to something higher. High marks!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39107853451573179152008-02-28T22:15:00.000-05:002008-02-28T22:15:00.000-05:00I am so in awe of you dialogue writers; kudos, kud...I am so in awe of you dialogue writers; kudos, kudos.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10747169503069513552008-02-27T14:46:00.000-05:002008-02-27T14:46:00.000-05:00Bait, Norway, copper. All combined to make a fun r...Bait, Norway, copper. All combined to make a fun read.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22429362848191877842008-02-25T11:59:00.000-05:002008-02-25T11:59:00.000-05:00Immediately, this made me think of either prisoner...Immediately, this made me think of either prisoners or run away slaves from the 1800s conspiring to escape their circumstances. Norway is just as good as any place - particularly when it is far away. The dialog is captured perfectly and sounds as if it could have been written by Twain or Eudora Welty. Well done!bluesugarpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14775769108087898456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-59557962093785109812008-02-25T07:27:00.000-05:002008-02-25T07:27:00.000-05:00I especially like the peculiar, practical logic ab...I especially like the peculiar, practical logic about only turning his head once.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2923631564045556682008-02-24T20:35:00.000-05:002008-02-24T20:35:00.000-05:00Liking it a lot. The voice carries so much in the...Liking it a lot. The voice carries so much in their accents and your word choice.<BR/><BR/>Not sure of their age. Early on I thought they were older, but when I saw Norway I figured they must be little kids.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-21782547252002198442008-02-24T10:07:00.000-05:002008-02-24T10:07:00.000-05:00A believable flavor of realism.A believable flavor of realism.BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-66329190815842946662008-02-24T09:15:00.000-05:002008-02-24T09:15:00.000-05:00Excellent use of snappy dialogue to create an intr...Excellent use of snappy dialogue to create an intriguing and pacey story, Well done!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04871239587214383387noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49750711327607663822008-02-23T20:14:00.000-05:002008-02-23T20:14:00.000-05:00Bold move in making this purely dialogue. It flowe...Bold move in making this purely dialogue. It flowed very nicely, and with a real colloquial flare. <BR/><BR/>I really liked the lighter nature of this one, and the "bait" idea was a great touch. Nicely written!Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5641100971936755012008-02-22T22:33:00.000-05:002008-02-22T22:33:00.000-05:00$20 in pennies, huh? Gosh, I'm itching to know mo...$20 in pennies, huh? Gosh, I'm itching to know more! Delightful banter.Missyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16638784910676212171noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-19096054015085730172008-02-22T15:24:00.000-05:002008-02-22T15:24:00.000-05:00excellent dialog... puts me in mind of huck finn.....excellent dialog... puts me in mind of huck finn.....paisleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08231453820728399262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53409432543406377922008-02-22T15:06:00.000-05:002008-02-22T15:06:00.000-05:00The purity of the dialogues makes this very pacey ...The purity of the dialogues makes this very pacey and snappy.DBA Lehanehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12902739256082564278noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-60069118141121485442008-02-22T13:33:00.000-05:002008-02-22T13:33:00.000-05:00I agree, very well done and believable!I agree, very well done and believable!Bethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-64140985810527987052008-02-22T13:16:00.000-05:002008-02-22T13:16:00.000-05:00This one is very different - well done. I like yo...This one is very different - well done. I like your strict use of dialog here - it works nicely!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com