tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post440864531215670480..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #54Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger27125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-8501435972140531352009-01-23T18:31:00.000-05:002009-01-23T18:31:00.000-05:00Thankfully the weirdness is usually confined to th...Thankfully the weirdness is usually confined to the narrative universe. Lets the real Ellens live in peace with their boring underwear.Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53049121037100765932009-01-23T17:12:00.000-05:002009-01-23T17:12:00.000-05:00Wow! The universe works in strange ways.Wow! The universe works in strange ways.Victor Bravo Monchego, Jrhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05251479110131293284noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-12897912972676150522009-01-20T22:01:00.000-05:002009-01-20T22:01:00.000-05:00Congratulations on 3rd Place!Great job on pacing, ...Congratulations on 3rd Place!<BR/><BR/>Great job on pacing, entertainment value, technical skill, storytelling, and voice! And welcome to the Forties Club!!<BR/><BR/>Thanks for being a wonderful part of the contest.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-34911611131263004112009-01-20T12:14:00.000-05:002009-01-20T12:14:00.000-05:00I'm sorry that I didn't get the chance to read you...I'm sorry that I didn't get the chance to read your story before the contest end. Glad to have the chance to do it now. Congratulations on your win!Terryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17075596786647102438noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80706895517906320202009-01-18T20:31:00.000-05:002009-01-18T20:31:00.000-05:00Sureal portrayal....interesting story....live warm...Sureal portrayal....interesting story....live warm static partner could lead to many interesting mischiefs...ceedyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17767787593275846653noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74796881745932257122009-01-18T13:19:00.000-05:002009-01-18T13:19:00.000-05:00Your student picked up on all of the thematic plan...Your student picked up on all of the thematic plants I put in the story, he just came out with a better interpretation. Really, having her be a mannequin is brilliant and I'm tempted to lie and say that's what I meant to do. I have a friend from high school who is an actuary and CPA. Her professional (and FB) motto is, "I account for things." I tried to have that in my head as I described Henry's world.<BR/><BR/>Finally, JR, I think your class talking about my story is one of the greatest compliments I've received as a writer. Thank you for letting me know.Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-4196650129868116752009-01-18T00:30:00.000-05:002009-01-18T00:30:00.000-05:00Dottie, His argument included the following: Ellen...Dottie, His argument included the following: Ellen's "stationary bike," Ellen's location "'X' on the mall map", the woman's request "Don't touch any of them." His trump card (after I mentioned the warm breasts, the birth certificte & the shopping bag): Henry's "Aberrant Manifestation." <BR/><BR/>We spent an entire class period discussing your story, which BTW I liked very very much.<BR/><BR/>As for my blog post, I put that narrative together in less than an hour. I'm glad you liked it, but it's not that good. I just hope the written voice in my flash fiction piece can hold its own.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-20956479239043377112009-01-17T23:43:00.000-05:002009-01-17T23:43:00.000-05:00Ohh...so interesting. I liked it.Good work.Ohh...so interesting. I liked it.<BR/>Good work.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1821758548995352642009-01-17T18:30:00.000-05:002009-01-17T18:30:00.000-05:00JR, your post is better than my entire story. Car...JR, your post is better than my entire story. Carefully, carefully tell your friend that mannequins do not have warm breasts. Or do they? This will involve some research and perhaps a night or two in lock-up for me as well.Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-88273616570816295522009-01-17T17:23:00.000-05:002009-01-17T17:23:00.000-05:00I hope you don't mind, but I had a heated discussi...I hope you don't mind, but I had a heated discussion with a convicted murderer who thought Ellen was a mannequin. I didn't know what to do, didn't know what to say, so I simply agreed with him.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-7581886206959271562009-01-16T22:08:00.000-05:002009-01-16T22:08:00.000-05:00That confirms what I've always suspected: actuarie...That confirms what I've always suspected: actuaries are naughty. Loved your story! - janabluesugarpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14775769108087898456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-35903326698622895722009-01-16T18:25:00.000-05:002009-01-16T18:25:00.000-05:00"Don't touch any of them." Seems it might creep h..."Don't touch any of them." Seems it might creep him out to know that someone else's "next of kin" might be taking the same liberties with is very own wife. What's with the security in that joint? Oh, yeah, it's a mall. All the mall cops must be at the donut shop.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-41043224275330949152009-01-16T12:45:00.000-05:002009-01-16T12:45:00.000-05:00Surreal. What would have she done to Static Henry ...Surreal. What would have she done to Static Henry :).BrownPhantomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17727840657080964378noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-9686024136294915562009-01-16T11:48:00.000-05:002009-01-16T11:48:00.000-05:00So she's just stuck in one position forever? This...So she's just stuck in one position forever? This is definitely one of the strangest entries I have read! Nice job.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90360445141367712102009-01-16T10:53:00.000-05:002009-01-16T10:53:00.000-05:00I don't get it, but it was very, very interesting....I don't get it, but it was very, very interesting. I'd like to know more...Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-73173655155565427792009-01-14T12:33:00.000-05:002009-01-14T12:33:00.000-05:00hope there aren't any frozen ppl on the beach wher...hope there aren't any frozen ppl on the beach where he is going...<BR/><BR/>strange story:)<BR/><BR/>NPallavhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09597178864833810868noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80954777705346077852009-01-13T21:39:00.000-05:002009-01-13T21:39:00.000-05:00Very unique take...loved itVery unique take...loved itK.Lawson Gilberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11204234196229710524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-50296109764878682372009-01-13T17:22:00.000-05:002009-01-13T17:22:00.000-05:00what a wonderful story...panties, elevators and th...what a wonderful story...panties, elevators and the stillness of a vacation..Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-14219542904419263402009-01-12T17:26:00.000-05:002009-01-12T17:26:00.000-05:00Dottie, I always look forward to your entries, and...Dottie, I always look forward to your entries, and now I remember why. :) Really brilliant work. <BR/><BR/>I love the mix of surreal and humdrum. Something so arresting about all those stilled shoppers. And the fact that he felt her up, then stole her panties just about knocked me out. <BR/><BR/>One of my favorites, for sure. Great job.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-67002862049409343532009-01-12T13:32:00.000-05:002009-01-12T13:32:00.000-05:00Temporal, time travel stasis..very interesting ide...Temporal, time travel stasis..very interesting idea, cool story.peggyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04915565997583564023noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-12056182482521351872009-01-12T12:28:00.000-05:002009-01-12T12:28:00.000-05:00Thanks for the clarification,was just confirming :...Thanks for the clarification,was just confirming :)Sameera Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05249126041067834608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13818632516571938872009-01-12T11:21:00.000-05:002009-01-12T11:21:00.000-05:00Sameera, I'm not sure there is a medical or scient...Sameera, I'm not sure there is a medical or scientific explanation for what's happened to poor Ellen and the other shoppers, but I'm sure there is a metaphor in there somewhere.Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-88718669781273937822009-01-12T08:40:00.000-05:002009-01-12T08:40:00.000-05:00thts a nice dark tale...cool twist!thts a nice dark tale...cool twist!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-29051091165095096832009-01-12T06:04:00.000-05:002009-01-12T06:04:00.000-05:00That was eerie!One doubt,is she dead or preserved ...That was eerie!One doubt,is she dead or preserved or something else?Sameera Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05249126041067834608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-6442519462375522692009-01-11T23:43:00.000-05:002009-01-11T23:43:00.000-05:00This gives new meaning to handrails. I know, I kn...This gives new meaning to handrails. I know, I know, bad joke. It seems Henry couldn't wait. For the trip, of course.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.com