tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post446662723323235050..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Forties Club Finalist #58Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger36125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-440783364650043522010-08-02T09:04:42.023-04:002010-08-02T09:04:42.023-04:00Thanks, Catherine. I'm glad you liked it.
Lov...Thanks, Catherine. I'm glad you liked it.<br /><br />Love the pictures on your blog!fairyhedgehoghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14141089706966852951noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83173842259934108102010-08-02T08:27:50.175-04:002010-08-02T08:27:50.175-04:00Oh, this brought a great smile. I love the scene ...Oh, this brought a great smile. I love the scene you painted, and the ending is delicious. Someday when she grows up, she's going to realize what she's got. Let's just hope she hangs on to it!Catherine Viberthttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-50744012535974932632010-08-01T04:45:40.049-04:002010-08-01T04:45:40.049-04:00JEM, thank you! I've just popped over to your ...JEM, thank you! I've just popped over to your blog and I love the look of it!<br /><br />Vincent, thank you! I hadn't thought of it like that. By the way, I like the celebration of punctuation on your blog!fairyhedgehoghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14141089706966852951noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38432208355362940372010-07-31T22:16:27.129-04:002010-07-31T22:16:27.129-04:00I liked the clean simplicity of this story. You re...I liked the clean simplicity of this story. You really got me with one simple moment: when Kate reaches for the diamond ring and Anna hesitates. In that briefest of instances, I know what Anna and Kate's futures are going to be like. <br /><br />"All that is gold does not glitter."<br /><br />Great story!Vincent Kalehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04625863843215035035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-75802566566867893142010-07-31T20:48:41.450-04:002010-07-31T20:48:41.450-04:00Love how she presented the last treasure as an aft...Love how she presented the last treasure as an afterthought when it's actually the valuable one.<br /><br />Despite that, kids always know what the true treasures are - the ones with the memories attached. Well done!J. Elis Morganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07768747366196080032noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-46254330200545156482010-07-31T12:24:15.824-04:002010-07-31T12:24:15.824-04:00Michael, thank you! I like the idea of a tool box ...Michael, thank you! I like the idea of a tool box full of treasures.<br /><br />Sandra, thank you. The silver birch twig was an actual treasure of mine when I was little.<br /><br />Sarah, thanks! You have a wonderful imagination, I would never have taken that next step and thought of a curse!fairyhedgehoghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14141089706966852951noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-28979770410562056932010-07-31T00:33:30.290-04:002010-07-31T00:33:30.290-04:00Wonderful job, Gina!
I love the treasure hunt thr...Wonderful job, Gina!<br /><br />I love the treasure hunt through the box, looking for her very favorites amongst her favorites. I also loved that it's what's important to her that makes it a real treasure and not what "value" it might have in the adult world.<br /><br />Took me to the place that the ring is cursed and that will be the rest of the story.Sarah Laurensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09252565450452195395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-20836489112075895692010-07-31T00:31:43.502-04:002010-07-31T00:31:43.502-04:00Some of my childhood treasures are simple like tha...Some of my childhood treasures are simple like that. I have a pewter ring that doesn't hold its shine as long as I'd like, but the Algerian hand symbol speaks to me.<br /><br />A sweet, charming story!Sandra Cormierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00231342310371529022noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87759764137330079642010-07-30T21:47:26.237-04:002010-07-30T21:47:26.237-04:00Nothing like rummaging through your treasure box l...Nothing like rummaging through your treasure box looking for your favorites! I loved that line, and still do stuff like that, only my treasure box is now filled with tools.<br /><br />Don't cry for me, though Argentina...the next time I'm rummaging around for a Phillips head screwdriver I'll be thinking of that ring!Michael Morsehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07451637745981389920noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18005837175952726232010-07-30T07:00:58.331-04:002010-07-30T07:00:58.331-04:00bekbek, thank you! I'm glad the story worked f...bekbek, thank you! I'm glad the story worked for you.<br /><br />Aaron, they never do.<br /><br />Deb, glad it took you back to happy memories.fairyhedgehoghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14141089706966852951noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58375005776710890612010-07-29T19:47:50.885-04:002010-07-29T19:47:50.885-04:00You really took me back. I loved hunting for "...You really took me back. I loved hunting for "treasure" in the woods as a kid. Nice job.Deb Smythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10990130480508998598noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-59197318094308835492010-07-29T18:41:18.962-04:002010-07-29T18:41:18.962-04:00Kids. Why won't they listen. Nice work. I beli...Kids. Why won't they listen. Nice work. I believed the story.Aaron Wilsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07685361642254300953noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-50626374090360966262010-07-29T17:03:58.948-04:002010-07-29T17:03:58.948-04:00Nothing new to say here except it's going on m...Nothing new to say here except it's going on my list of faves. I can tell you that I thought the ring (the last one, not the cracker!) might be a precious artifact, but I think you stay clearly in the realm of its importance to HER, and let the rest of it stay to our imaginations. Well done.bekbekhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17935766604154823539noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-52091281524859069972010-07-29T10:02:31.517-04:002010-07-29T10:02:31.517-04:00Thanks, Joni!
Aerin, that's so kind.
Precie,...Thanks, Joni!<br /><br />Aerin, that's so kind.<br /><br />Precie, that makes me very happy.<br /><br />Laurel, I'm so glad you like it.<br /><br />Thank you everyone for your kind comments.fairyhedgehoghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14141089706966852951noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-71213766963108991942010-07-28T23:08:26.360-04:002010-07-28T23:08:26.360-04:00I love everything about this. The innocence of the...I love everything about this. The innocence of the girls, the sentimental attachment to something Daddy found, and the intuition that it is truly special.<br /><br />Fresh and sweet.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-41648721369615662572010-07-28T21:47:38.557-04:002010-07-28T21:47:38.557-04:00I wish Kate were one of my childhood friends. Love...I wish Kate were one of my childhood friends. Love what her collection says about her!Preciehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05071233480999640713noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24332520965408842962010-07-28T20:16:02.040-04:002010-07-28T20:16:02.040-04:00I hate commenting after Pete and Whirl do because ...I hate commenting after Pete and Whirl do because there's nothing clever left to say.<br /><br />I love the magic of this piece and the gentle "aha" moment of what's truly valuable.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2304928012356890702010-07-28T18:30:05.861-04:002010-07-28T18:30:05.861-04:00A neat little package. I liked it very much. Gre...A neat little package. I liked it very much. Great writing.Jonihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18109855683749612076noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90685397900522455682010-07-28T13:39:09.978-04:002010-07-28T13:39:09.978-04:00Thanks, Sameera!
Whirl, my Mum used to have a but...Thanks, Sameera!<br /><br />Whirl, my Mum used to have a button box like that as well. We used to tip it out on newspaper and sort through it occasionally and it was so interesting.<br /><br />Oddy, I'd like to think it really was valuable! Thanks for your kind words.<br /><br />Jane, I'd love to read this for the next voice thingie! Thanks for such lovely comments. I think when you've met the writer it changes how you see their writing.fairyhedgehoghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14141089706966852951noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90426430987621970912010-07-28T13:01:40.342-04:002010-07-28T13:01:40.342-04:00Gina I echo all the comments. This is a perfect p...Gina I echo all the comments. This is a perfect piece because it captures the innocence of childhood with such a light hand. I could hear you tell it as I read (you <i>have</i> to read this for our next voice thingy) and I felt transported back to a time of secrets and imagination that made my early years. The ending - as with all of it - was *simply perfect*.<br /><br />Well done!JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72638236096398680492010-07-28T11:41:08.695-04:002010-07-28T11:41:08.695-04:00With her luck, it'll probably be really valuab...With her luck, it'll probably be really valuable or something. LoL<br /><br />I love the thought of keeping treasures-this was awesome. :)Oddyoddyo13https://www.blogger.com/profile/05557994037779209704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44554349651819282802010-07-28T10:39:13.685-04:002010-07-28T10:39:13.685-04:00Reminds me of the tin of old buttons my gran used ...Reminds me of the tin of old buttons my gran used to have. Yes, there was TV, chess, cards, a <i>garden</i>, but I always asked to rummage in the tin of old buttons.<br /><br />And yes, the wv is UNDIES.Whirlochrehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09846196906206886945noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-25740016432832042232010-07-28T10:32:58.369-04:002010-07-28T10:32:58.369-04:00A nice slice of life!A nice slice of life!Sameera Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05249126041067834608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-77977366527059765302010-07-28T09:52:34.939-04:002010-07-28T09:52:34.939-04:00Thank you, McK and JRT!
Aimee, this was a real wi...Thank you, McK and JRT!<br /><br />Aimee, this was a real wish-fulfilment story for me.<br /><br />Szelso, thank you!fairyhedgehoghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14141089706966852951noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-51811900691910305352010-07-28T09:42:19.947-04:002010-07-28T09:42:19.947-04:00it's refreshing to see a children-oriented pie...it's refreshing to see a children-oriented piece in this competition.<br />i liked how realistic the conversation is. take for example when anna suddenly looses interest or kate's monologue in the last paragraph. greatly written.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.com