tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post4511508000014693170..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #28Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger27125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-60350440775135697612011-07-29T08:01:17.012-04:002011-07-29T08:01:17.012-04:00A devastating world where the only peace is death....A devastating world where the only peace is death. You portrayed the sadness well. Solidly written!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3076532542059099552011-07-22T23:25:53.797-04:002011-07-22T23:25:53.797-04:00Wow, what a way you captured the intense despair a...Wow, what a way you captured the intense despair and hopelessness. Powerful.Wendyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03115002505324651653noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38076037086009344442011-07-21T17:20:28.001-04:002011-07-21T17:20:28.001-04:00Powerful.
Heart-wrenching.
Haunting.Powerful.<br />Heart-wrenching.<br />Haunting.Katherine Tomlinsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09696623795926663895noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-68388563386396858102011-07-21T09:17:08.201-04:002011-07-21T09:17:08.201-04:00I really appreciate your comments everyone. I have...I really appreciate your comments everyone. I haven't gotten around to everyone's stories yet but I will before the weekend is up.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-28582202045764743112011-07-20T22:58:52.053-04:002011-07-20T22:58:52.053-04:00A great story. The last line really lingers in the...A great story. The last line really lingers in the mind. Nice work.C. Sonberg Larsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09925003570881003478noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-35316221375158760182011-07-20T22:50:19.906-04:002011-07-20T22:50:19.906-04:00This is my favorite entry of yours, too. As other...This is my favorite entry of yours, too. As others have said, the sacrifice, the ambiguity, and the beautiful imagery all converge to make a memorable, soul-wrenching piece. <br /><br />That heat in his cheeks...*sob.*Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-63653114853971701332011-07-20T07:09:25.428-04:002011-07-20T07:09:25.428-04:00A lovely entry, Cat. Fine writing, evocative phras...A lovely entry, Cat. Fine writing, evocative phrasing, poignant. <br /><br />To do so much with just 250 words!Richard Levangiehttp://richardlevangie.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-20891524527776269872011-07-20T03:01:40.590-04:002011-07-20T03:01:40.590-04:00Cat - this is so painful and raw. You captured th...Cat - this is so painful and raw. You captured the desperation of the parents with touching clarity. I love that the mother shouted at the hallucinated angel. And when I say *love* I mean that it cut to my soul. Your last line is perfection.<br /><br />Beautiful Cat.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38967347698796541222011-07-19T15:56:04.767-04:002011-07-19T15:56:04.767-04:00Artfully written, Cat! I love the images you'v...Artfully written, Cat! I love the images you've created - seen and unseen. ~Janabluesugarpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14775769108087898456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-28893166268860898922011-07-19T06:09:34.232-04:002011-07-19T06:09:34.232-04:00So sad and very beautifully told, thank you. Take ...So sad and very beautifully told, thank you. Take care<br />xOld Kittyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13185547869183611159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-50824268456457163382011-07-18T22:17:05.296-04:002011-07-18T22:17:05.296-04:00Nicely done, too bad he couldn't sleep and rem...Nicely done, too bad he couldn't sleep and remain unaware. Whatever was out there...it needed him awake.<br /><br />Dottie :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08688849410604429533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-50500150452086491242011-07-18T21:24:45.162-04:002011-07-18T21:24:45.162-04:00Vivid! I like how this story took me to a differen...Vivid! I like how this story took me to a different place from all the others I've read so far.Jade L Blackwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15321787298101881675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-20972423330397582272011-07-18T08:53:15.733-04:002011-07-18T08:53:15.733-04:00I saw the whole scene happening before my eyes. Th...I saw the whole scene happening before my eyes. The helplessness of the parents, the anguish, the pain. <br /><br />Hard for any parent to read but harder if you've lost a small child. <br /><br />Such vivid, intensive, excellent writing, Cat. Well done!Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17286909482780350161noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-64929608684628659922011-07-17T03:10:40.757-04:002011-07-17T03:10:40.757-04:00This does hit hard and I wasn't able to reread...This does hit hard and I wasn't able to reread it for that very reason! Powerful words.fairyhedgehoghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14141089706966852951noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-26044483164057195952011-07-17T00:40:03.653-04:002011-07-17T00:40:03.653-04:00Not just hard for a mother to read. Hard for a fat...Not just hard for a mother to read. Hard for a father, too. By the way, I think you did a fine job with both parents, showing who they are through their actions.<br /><br />I am not sure if you meant this or not, but I get that Lil Ed is a bit of a savior child, allowing himself to be sacrificed. Good work, Cat. Scores high on my short list.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-14577871864050541662011-07-16T05:51:39.147-04:002011-07-16T05:51:39.147-04:00as others have said before me, it's like a ric...as others have said before me, it's like a rich painting, with the mother's pain being the most important element, but i admit i had to read the comments and the piece at least three times before i got it.<br />:)SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-78016469906152991522011-07-16T02:47:16.904-04:002011-07-16T02:47:16.904-04:00When lil' Ed said, “Wings Mommy, coming closer...When lil' Ed said, “Wings Mommy, coming closer”, I feared what was coming, but it still didn't make it any easier to read. You always hit hard with colors in your paintings and you've hit hard with your words here.<br /><br />You've outdone yourself with this one Cat of Arc. You really have. Its the best of yours that I've read, by far.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81353651218087051482011-07-15T23:20:54.388-04:002011-07-15T23:20:54.388-04:00I had to read through it twice, carefully, before ...I had to read through it twice, carefully, before I got it. But when i did, Kudos! Very well done.Jam Lebrillahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18154153162691004541noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10912527374108042552011-07-15T20:30:01.889-04:002011-07-15T20:30:01.889-04:00Thanks everyone! Especially to those double and tr...Thanks everyone! Especially to those double and triple readers here. I really appreciate the attention to the details. :-) There are so many great entries already, right? Wow! Love the response to the image so far.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-70903412576320508892011-07-15T15:25:25.250-04:002011-07-15T15:25:25.250-04:00Wow. This was powerful. I read three times, just t...Wow. This was powerful. I read three times, just to ensure I grasped every bit of your concept. You know what I liked best? The way you balamced description and imagery with character and dialogue. Stacked together, you've created a very provocative piece. The mother's pain was tangible.<br /><br />Thanks for sharing!Michele Zugnonihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12394802719932859470noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-26439592519676112332011-07-15T13:45:14.168-04:002011-07-15T13:45:14.168-04:00Great writing! I love the idea of a "rogue te...Great writing! I love the idea of a "rogue tear". Can see everything clearly and a great close.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-21192673573359411142011-07-15T13:41:00.897-04:002011-07-15T13:41:00.897-04:00Dystopian. Nice work.Dystopian. Nice work.Catrinanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-55429647083925410132011-07-15T13:19:40.094-04:002011-07-15T13:19:40.094-04:00I took me two read-throughs and a peek at the comm...I took me two read-throughs and a peek at the comments to understand Ed wasn't seeing whatever was 'real'. Now that I get that, I see just how painful that must have been for the Mom. Ouch. Very very ouch. :(Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-61940313239124868362011-07-15T12:42:10.845-04:002011-07-15T12:42:10.845-04:00Devastating. I'd say nicely done, but nice doe...Devastating. I'd say nicely done, but nice doesn't touch something this painful. Excellent.Preciehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05071233480999640713noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38750545866712256522011-07-15T12:32:07.375-04:002011-07-15T12:32:07.375-04:00Powerful imagery. Well done.Powerful imagery. Well done.Stephen Parrishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16883165490847664389noreply@blogger.com