tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post462545318741438492..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Forties Club Finalist #1Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger27125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3535351315266543222010-08-02T12:10:33.505-04:002010-08-02T12:10:33.505-04:00Great! I got the aha right about when Janey did. ...Great! I got the aha right about when Janey did. Love this one, very creepy in a sensual and beautiful kind of way.Catherine Viberthttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-29925574666633469232010-07-29T01:29:15.289-04:002010-07-29T01:29:15.289-04:00Kiki what a great read to kick off the contest! I...Kiki what a great read to kick off the contest! I love the description of the dyeing process - the imagery was vivid and intense. The only foreshadowing of the kick at the end, for me, was the line<br /><i>Yet my clients wrap themselves in these blankets, comforted by the soft leathery texture. </i><br />I remember thinking 'leather quilts? that's odd." Then wham!<br /><br />Loved this one Kiki. Well done.<br /><br />(PS I didn't notice any grammar gaffes either so I don't think that person you absolutely don't share any DNA with should worry too much.)JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-35000320491909037522010-07-28T16:30:21.630-04:002010-07-28T16:30:21.630-04:00Fantastic visuals and atmosphere. I doubt Mother i...Fantastic visuals and atmosphere. I doubt Mother is going to be around much longer!Vincent Kalehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04625863843215035035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-50543040557519734202010-07-28T16:27:34.361-04:002010-07-28T16:27:34.361-04:00It all seemed so delightfully domestic until the e...It all seemed so delightfully domestic until the end.<br /><br />Nice twist. Very vivid imagery. I especially loved the "holding court" line.Jonihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18109855683749612076noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-1010445668842532182010-07-28T05:34:15.980-04:002010-07-28T05:34:15.980-04:00Did not see the twist coming, what a great set up!...Did not see the twist coming, what a great set up! Beautiful description, too.McKoalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01457446171624585099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-23500005274539468392010-07-27T20:31:40.145-04:002010-07-27T20:31:40.145-04:00Hi Kiki!
Starting shuddering about half way throu...Hi Kiki!<br /><br />Starting shuddering about half way through.... yikes... no more quilts for me....<br /><br />Dottie :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08688849410604429533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-60437681790112295142010-07-26T20:38:56.782-04:002010-07-26T20:38:56.782-04:00I love the shift from light to dark. Disturbing, ...I love the shift from light to dark. Disturbing, but delicious.Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14751567478811396094noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-68343352976460829432010-07-26T20:14:43.832-04:002010-07-26T20:14:43.832-04:00Oh, sick sick sick. I saw it coming but you still ...Oh, sick sick sick. I saw it coming but you still got me.Alliehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16688259930865787451noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-54992720604442955702010-07-25T22:25:38.109-04:002010-07-25T22:25:38.109-04:00Now that's the kind of creepy tale only a woma...Now that's the kind of creepy tale only a woman could conjure up. Excellent. I'm still chuckling as I write this.MRMacrumhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01414173517957120477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-25181057688002916842010-07-25T19:00:51.161-04:002010-07-25T19:00:51.161-04:00The contrast between the craft of homespun quiltma...The contrast between the craft of homespun quiltmaking and the reality of the story was shocking...and very unexpected. I agree with J.R., though- the word cremation threw me off and I had to re-read. Well done, though.Unknownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01351485314292761498noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44318311278350378862010-07-24T18:03:33.914-04:002010-07-24T18:03:33.914-04:00I wonder if a fine Chianti goes with the leathery ...I wonder if a fine Chianti goes with the leathery softness of those quilts? *shudder*<br /><br />Well done!Sandra Cormierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00231342310371529022noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-21193966401844132122010-07-24T11:13:20.329-04:002010-07-24T11:13:20.329-04:00Such colorful imagery and then that last stab -- b...Such colorful imagery and then that last stab -- beautifully done. As I read it, I automatically changed the mother's voice to something hoarse, and yet the ending still surprised me. Nice job.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58569005720899318482010-07-22T15:08:26.774-04:002010-07-22T15:08:26.774-04:00Glad I won't be sleeping under a quilt tonight...Glad I won't be sleeping under a quilt tonight! *Shivers* This one will stay with me for a while. Nice job.Deb Smythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10990130480508998598noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44779386620825543552010-07-21T21:25:08.910-04:002010-07-21T21:25:08.910-04:00Okay, I wanna know who the heck is ordering these ...Okay, I wanna know who the heck is ordering these quilts! Do they know what they're ordering or do they think it's just regular leather. Is it like when people buy those aynthetic gems made from the ashes of loved ones? Who are these freaky buyers? I've been preoccupied with this issue for over a day...probably a good sign that it's such a memorable story. :) Well done!Preciehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05071233480999640713noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-12836352920789281352010-07-21T20:29:02.979-04:002010-07-21T20:29:02.979-04:00Love the colors, textures, and visuals. Nice touch...Love the colors, textures, and visuals. Nice touch with the final "skin and dye."Jade L Blackwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15321787298101881675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10601703231150299472010-07-21T06:06:48.057-04:002010-07-21T06:06:48.057-04:00Okay now you're scaring me, Kiki. What has Aer...Okay now you're scaring me, Kiki. What has Aerin done to you? Back to back creepy posts. You could be my partner if I ever turn a serial killer. I like the way you think. :D<br /><br />Every bit worthy of the 40s club.<br /><br />@Laurel: Body count = 1 <br />Let's keep a count, shall we?Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90774288828747884772010-07-21T02:12:36.337-04:002010-07-21T02:12:36.337-04:00Wow, now that is a hard act to follow. I'm ama...Wow, now that is a hard act to follow. I'm amazed at the level imagery you can produce in so few words.Craighttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344917148662934359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74965649034528738532010-07-20T21:16:45.352-04:002010-07-20T21:16:45.352-04:00Nice, tight writing with a vividness. I think you...Nice, tight writing with a vividness. I think you could have punched up the tension a bit, but otherwise quite worthy of the 40s club!PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-20403386675798699442010-07-20T19:58:38.608-04:002010-07-20T19:58:38.608-04:00I was picturing the crafting my mother in law does...I was picturing the crafting my mother in law does right up until the end ... creepy.Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-84291382281525629092010-07-20T19:13:14.825-04:002010-07-20T19:13:14.825-04:00Take out: "Another cremation" and it cou...Take out: "Another cremation" and it could pass off that they're getting ready to shear some sheep. I know it's difficult to do in 250-words, but I think more insight into the mom is needed.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10429623983254926912010-07-20T19:02:04.213-04:002010-07-20T19:02:04.213-04:00What an interesting twist on the concept!What an interesting twist on the concept!Oddyoddyo13https://www.blogger.com/profile/05557994037779209704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-35629846864870661412010-07-20T18:11:44.631-04:002010-07-20T18:11:44.631-04:00Got a hint of what was coming, but still creepily ...Got a hint of what was coming, but still creepily handled. It's that anticipation that one hopes doesn't mean what one thinks it means. Wonderful.Sarah Laurensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09252565450452195395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-17871153139840247622010-07-20T15:55:42.748-04:002010-07-20T15:55:42.748-04:00I'm not sure what JC means about grammar - sor...I'm not sure what JC means about grammar - sorry if I missed that on the read-through.<br /><br />Er, I mean - fantastic, person-I've-never-met. Great job on this-piece-I've-never-seen-before.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18864167399998792062010-07-20T15:52:07.906-04:002010-07-20T15:52:07.906-04:00Ooooh, excellent twist. The colors and description...Ooooh, excellent twist. The colors and descriptions are vivid. Great job.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17034419617457525778noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33482155765630596732010-07-20T13:59:23.441-04:002010-07-20T13:59:23.441-04:00Creepily good. Probably not the best use of gramma...Creepily good. Probably not the best use of grammar, but it fits this piece.<br /><br />Ooo, I'm still shuddering at the thought. (Especially since I quilt)J.C. Montgomeryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05681137099755243041noreply@blogger.com