tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post4746321291115617203..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #7Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger44125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53383499431141394632009-01-20T21:17:00.000-05:002009-01-20T21:17:00.000-05:00Thanks for being a wonderful part of the contest!Thanks for being a wonderful part of the contest!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-47900640130182037142009-01-20T01:19:00.000-05:002009-01-20T01:19:00.000-05:00@ Terry: yup, might develop this one into somethin...@ Terry: yup, might develop this one into something bigger, lets see :) Thank you for your appreciation :)<BR/>@ Catvibe: yes, it takes a lot of courage, but I am glad she did it. <BR/>@ Aniket: glad and happy to be the character in your scenario :) Enjoyed the read for sure!<BR/>@ Margaret: it sure takes time to gain the strength and courage to do this. Glad she freed herself. Thank you :)<BR/>@ Jana: Thanks a lot :)Lenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09787400183444796423noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-69252290680327805342009-01-18T22:21:00.000-05:002009-01-18T22:21:00.000-05:00I also like how you brought it back around at the ...I also like how you brought it back around at the end, too. Great to see the heroine find her courage. :) <BR/><BR/>janabluesugarpoethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14775769108087898456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-69751468251185657022009-01-18T09:25:00.000-05:002009-01-18T09:25:00.000-05:00Great to see that Mary finally found the courage &...Great to see that Mary finally found the courage & strength to break free from her Father.<BR/><BR/>Very well written. Well done.Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17286909482780350161noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-77013249922694727662009-01-18T04:24:00.000-05:002009-01-18T04:24:00.000-05:00I have written a scary movie of sorts on Ascension...I have written a scary movie of sorts on Ascension.... do read it when you get time! http://foolishnessofthings.blogspot.com/2009/01/fyeo-ascension-revisited.html<BR/><BR/>You are a character in it as well! :-DAniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-17618928396721247322009-01-17T07:12:00.000-05:002009-01-17T07:12:00.000-05:00Nice writing. It would be really hard to slam the...Nice writing. It would be really hard to slam the door in the face of ones own father, abusive or not, but I'm glad, really glad she did.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-42523940493712487802009-01-16T23:33:00.000-05:002009-01-16T23:33:00.000-05:00Lena, you skillfully created a vivid picture about...Lena, you skillfully created a vivid picture about the circle of life. I thought your transition from the 13-year-old Mary to the adult Mary was done really well. This is a story that you might think about developing, you tell it with such clarity. Great interpretation.Terryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17075596786647102438noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-65097141996515081342009-01-16T13:46:00.000-05:002009-01-16T13:46:00.000-05:00@ Kunjal: thank you :)@BrownPhantom: you seriously...@ Kunjal: thank you :)<BR/>@BrownPhantom: you seriously yelled "get out"? now those people must hate me :D<BR/>@ pjd: well.. maybe.. but then i guess once can really imagine the details missed here, i thought i gave enough hints. Maybe should make a bigger story out of this one :)<BR/>@Yamini: thank you :)<BR/>@ Hiren: than you very much for such wonderful feedback. Am glad you liked it!<BR/>@kunal: am glad you participated. keep writing!<BR/>@ david: thank you :)<BR/>@ Scott: yup, some people never find courage to break free. Am glad Mary did.<BR/>@ September: thank you. Really appreciate such warm words.<BR/>@ Aniket: umm... she is sweet and nice.. she only slammed the door :D<BR/>and come on, who says i am more than a newbie here. We all are getting experience :) See you around.<BR/>@ Umesh: first, glad you read it. second, glad you liked it. third, glad you commented :P Really glad. Thank you :)Lenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09787400183444796423noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-25672719017741012572009-01-16T12:05:00.000-05:002009-01-16T12:05:00.000-05:00Nice Storyi like the whole story nicely composedNice Story<BR/>i like the whole story nicely composedAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3384739888796072412009-01-16T11:22:00.000-05:002009-01-16T11:22:00.000-05:00Oh she should of done somethings to him like the t...Oh she should of done somethings to him like the teenage chick did in that another story out here (am sure you've read it... You've read them all :-D ) but am glad she moved out in time! :P <BR/><BR/>I too have read most of the posts out here... and your comments have been among the sweetest and most appreciative all along on almost every post! :-D It really means a lot to us newbies! Can't thank you enough! Will be watching your blog closely! :-DAniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39260159209635382782009-01-16T10:30:00.000-05:002009-01-16T10:30:00.000-05:00Bravo that she was able to break free. Some peopl...Bravo that she was able to break free. Some people accept the role of victim for a lifetime.Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-26578053761295052082009-01-15T17:01:00.000-05:002009-01-15T17:01:00.000-05:00Beautifully written!Beautifully written!David Cranmerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04749857752139212888noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45202524792765754722009-01-15T06:50:00.000-05:002009-01-15T06:50:00.000-05:00i have commented on ur blog too on this post.. its...i have commented on ur blog too on this post.. its really a good small story of chasing back to be free.<BR/><BR/>thanks for ur comments on my post too. becaus of u i came to know about such a beautiful place in this blogworld.kunalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09300572468184782916noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-70481840961390957692009-01-15T01:52:00.000-05:002009-01-15T01:52:00.000-05:00Nicely done - mirroring the words at the beginning...Nicely done - mirroring the words at the beginning at the end - turning the table around and taking control. Wow. Simple and powerful. Every word counted.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18107810408245790482009-01-15T01:42:00.000-05:002009-01-15T01:42:00.000-05:00splendid ... you have related the story to the rea...splendid ... you have related the story to the real essence of the picture "Ascension" and not just to the escalators in the picture ... thats great !!! Liked your narration very much ... the way you have used 13 and 25 yrs and tried to show the gal's gradual build up of the urge to break free from the suffering and distress of many years ... really nice.Hirenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01178594986974262099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2812833932747578852009-01-15T01:23:00.000-05:002009-01-15T01:23:00.000-05:00Awesome piece :)Awesome piece :)Obscure Optimisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08541424160034383432noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-89877955005978162622009-01-14T12:48:00.000-05:002009-01-14T12:48:00.000-05:00The beginning sequence reminded me (in an emotiona...The beginning sequence reminded me (in an emotional sense) of the beginning of Secret Life of Bees. While I like this very much, it seems like maybe it's trying to do too much in 250 words. You might want to expand it and give it the room it needs to reach its potential.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-19448989607017444462009-01-14T07:31:00.000-05:002009-01-14T07:31:00.000-05:00This inspires me to yell "Get out" at some people ...This inspires me to yell "Get out" at some people and many situations . GET OUT ..<BR/>It felt good :).BrownPhantomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17727840657080964378noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-76404685420509528412009-01-14T01:52:00.000-05:002009-01-14T01:52:00.000-05:00hi Lena, I love the ending:)nice inspiring story.hi Lena, I love the ending:)<BR/>nice inspiring story.Kunjalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15346731417236906278noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2881172748194809802009-01-14T01:44:00.000-05:002009-01-14T01:44:00.000-05:00@ Senorita: thank you :)@ Ceedy: yup, requires a l...@ Senorita: thank you :)<BR/>@ Ceedy: yup, requires a lot of courage. Thanks!<BR/>@ Vesper: :) glad you liked it. Thanks :)<BR/>@ Sid: thanks a lot! Glad you enjoyed the story :)Lenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09787400183444796423noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53673872784071045262009-01-13T15:32:00.000-05:002009-01-13T15:32:00.000-05:00Beautifully written, Lena.:)As always, you've conj...Beautifully written, Lena.<BR/>:)<BR/>As always, you've conjured up a story thats inspired many more others.<BR/>:) <BR/>Loved this story.<BR/> <BR/>The word liberation comes to mind when i read this one<BR/>:)<BR/>Gr8 work<BR/>:)RiverSoulhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15417054068931773922noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-20792480447954462992009-01-13T12:16:00.000-05:002009-01-13T12:16:00.000-05:00What a turn! It’s good to read about justice. Well...What a turn! It’s good to read about justice. Well done!Vesperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12417602625059442986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-60565017527747119402009-01-13T10:41:00.000-05:002009-01-13T10:41:00.000-05:00Yes she has ascended and it takes courage to final...Yes she has ascended and it takes courage to finally say it...<BR/><BR/>godd one there :)ceedyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17767787593275846653noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-8582597214528745662009-01-12T00:29:00.000-05:002009-01-12T00:29:00.000-05:00nicely written...very visual...loved the last line...nicely written...very visual...loved the last line...Senhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16374845085065556358noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-46930853686359485132009-01-11T02:59:00.000-05:002009-01-11T02:59:00.000-05:00@ Geraldine: thank a lot :)@ BernardL: it sure doe...@ Geraldine: thank a lot :)<BR/>@ BernardL: it sure does.<BR/>@ Peggy: thanks!<BR/>@ Aggie: unless we are strong enough to make them :)<BR/>@ Sarah: I'm glad she did it, too :) thank you for your appreciation :)<BR/>@ JaneyV: thanks a lot!!<BR/>@ strugglingwriter: glad you liked it :)<BR/>@ anil: i know you did!! thanks :)<BR/>@ lissa: thank you. I am glad she finally took the decision :)<BR/>@ laughingwolf: thank you :)<BR/>@ Wattersedge: I am glad you liked it , thank you :)<BR/>@ K.Lawson Gilbert: it sure is. thank you :)<BR/>@ Ruinwen: thanks a lot for your kind words :)<BR/>@ Sami: thanks dear :)<BR/>@ Leatherdykeuk: I am glad you think so :)<BR/>@ Aerin: thank you very much :)<BR/>@ Kim: yes, thats true, some cant handle the pain and grief and end up having the bottle their own friend. It is sure good for her that she finally escaped!<BR/>@ Patsy: thank you. i am happy you liked my story :)<BR/>@ JR's Thumbprints: it definitely does :)Lenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09787400183444796423noreply@blogger.com