tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post4752861576314470521..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #5Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger38125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-79247359960819247952009-07-24T17:52:11.155-04:002009-07-24T17:52:11.155-04:00A real-feeling moment. Solidly written. High mar...A real-feeling moment. Solidly written. High marks for pacing, entertainment, and technical elements.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-48435302980596364592009-07-22T07:44:37.340-04:002009-07-22T07:44:37.340-04:00Ha! Super twist!Ha! Super twist!Rachel Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13048590167153841615noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-16933927374409107872009-07-20T13:23:42.827-04:002009-07-20T13:23:42.827-04:00Piquaint with a nice finish!Piquaint with a nice finish!Cormac Brownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02990698766444728760noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-82580778651831995282009-07-20T03:16:43.199-04:002009-07-20T03:16:43.199-04:00That's the best last line ever! Merry I loved...That's the best last line ever! Merry I loved this piece. It was well written complete and very satisfying. Well done.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-76904965511508374912009-07-17T08:03:57.816-04:002009-07-17T08:03:57.816-04:00Love the last line! And I have too much hazlenut c...Love the last line! And I have too much hazlenut creamer in my coffee right now. Arg.Deb Snoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-32743851485792127002009-07-16T19:53:09.401-04:002009-07-16T19:53:09.401-04:00Classy. Loved it.Classy. Loved it.Amanda F.https://www.blogger.com/profile/11302784595594793121noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-15014919625472192132009-07-16T11:39:24.346-04:002009-07-16T11:39:24.346-04:00Very nice, accurate to the last drop. :)Very nice, accurate to the last drop. :)Jade L Blackwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15321787298101881675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74646523638943396102009-07-15T17:09:14.882-04:002009-07-15T17:09:14.882-04:00classy!!!classy!!!moonrathttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06294151043419378509noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24525219726631372812009-07-15T07:36:23.691-04:002009-07-15T07:36:23.691-04:00LOL! And ouch! Good vivid take on what I'm s...LOL! And ouch! Good vivid take on what I'm sure most have experienced at some point!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04871239587214383387noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-34115720626971414012009-07-15T00:28:03.254-04:002009-07-15T00:28:03.254-04:00Such wit! Classy! ;)Such wit! Classy! ;)Gughanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10369044715853545060noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-445640013539689432009-07-14T18:10:26.246-04:002009-07-14T18:10:26.246-04:00Thanks for such great comments everyone. I'm ...Thanks for such great comments everyone. I'm having a ball reading all of your entries, too - it's amazing how many different takes there are to a single glass of wine.<br /><br />Ello,<br /><br />That's funny because this is pretty close to my natural voice, rather than a character... which is maybe why Aerin had it pegged.<br /><br />RKCharron,<br /><br />Telepathic would be a great twist - I wish I'd thought of that, though I'd need more than 250 words for that story. I put it in italics because it was first person and my narrator was thinking it in her head, but she didn't realize she'd said it out loud until Mark reacted.Merry Monteleonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09435956005780500310noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-77063960918982847302009-07-14T14:29:38.971-04:002009-07-14T14:29:38.971-04:00Very nicely done. I loved it. The last line is p...Very nicely done. I loved it. The last line is perfect.Hoodiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17616427797201977083noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87823944348652770002009-07-13T18:59:02.244-04:002009-07-13T18:59:02.244-04:00Hi :)
Thanks for sharing this story.
I enjoyed the...Hi :)<br />Thanks for sharing this story.<br />I enjoyed the character very much. <br />Only I was confused as to if she actually said it out loud or if he was telepathic (which would be great).<br />Nice!<br />twitter.com/RKCharron<br />:)RK Charronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07363516910545064180noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10546733339798746662009-07-13T15:30:53.113-04:002009-07-13T15:30:53.113-04:00Were you a writer for Murphy Brown? This was a fun...Were you a writer for Murphy Brown? This was a funny piece.Lizhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02479420775438541054noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-17818235737859898422009-07-13T08:06:41.782-04:002009-07-13T08:06:41.782-04:00I love the character in this. Your humor is great....I love the character in this. Your humor is great. Thank you very much for such a fun read.Ryanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05155314544060618259noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-31561186496482287982009-07-13T02:04:29.766-04:002009-07-13T02:04:29.766-04:00Merry, I love this. What a great finishing line. ...Merry, I love this. What a great finishing line. I'm going to be smiling at this one for a long time. The voice is terrific throughout. Nice work!!PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72091270119764348742009-07-12T00:33:56.047-04:002009-07-12T00:33:56.047-04:00Spare the snark, spoil the reader. But you still s...Spare the snark, spoil the reader. But you still spoil us all with such great humor. Awesome!Sarah Laurensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09252565450452195395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-29992191394663703032009-07-11T13:37:07.780-04:002009-07-11T13:37:07.780-04:00I loved it! Charming, funny and so real.I loved it! Charming, funny and so real.lucyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15794908366190951214noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45715657704108037562009-07-10T22:52:46.468-04:002009-07-10T22:52:46.468-04:00Literally LOL! :)Literally LOL! :)Preciehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05071233480999640713noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-48410834998151080442009-07-10T21:29:34.220-04:002009-07-10T21:29:34.220-04:00That last line made me laugh out loud. Very, very ...That last line made me laugh out loud. Very, very good, this one. Love the title, too.Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-75013447489105411832009-07-10T13:22:08.636-04:002009-07-10T13:22:08.636-04:00the title alone should win a prize. i love the sar...the title alone should win a prize. i love the sardonic humor in this - sharp but genuine. (does anyone really spit tastings out? i mean besides people who drink adulterated coffee?)joaquin carvelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03193680725157157864noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-27745616876245468862009-07-09T22:33:46.480-04:002009-07-09T22:33:46.480-04:00HA! That was awesome! That is so me! Did you peek ...HA! That was awesome! That is so me! Did you peek in the last time I had a hangover and raged at my hubby? Cause seriously this was me!<br /><br />Great characterization and dialogue! Loved it!Ello - Ellen Ohhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311917335471167591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-41463672293937618052009-07-09T21:36:31.796-04:002009-07-09T21:36:31.796-04:00Ahaha! That one made me laugh out loud. I can tast...Ahaha! That one made me laugh out loud. I can taste her bitterness from here.<br /><br />Silly girl not to spit out the wine LOLSandra Cormierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00231342310371529022noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-88541820163986508692009-07-09T16:51:32.979-04:002009-07-09T16:51:32.979-04:00If I'd read this without knowing its author I ...If I'd read this without knowing its author I still would have guessed you, Merry. Smooth, expertly written, flows well, even has a "creamy" feel like hoity-toity coffee. Just so nicely done, tying the subject of the story to the rhythm and word choices - love love love.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-73648083370355254172009-07-09T15:29:42.104-04:002009-07-09T15:29:42.104-04:00Hi Guys,
Thanks so much for all the great comment...Hi Guys,<br /><br />Thanks so much for all the great comments. I'm glad you liked it.<br /><br />Tessa,<br /><br />To Spit or Not to Spit would be a great title, but I'm afraid of what might come up in google searches :-)<br /><br />Strugglingwriter,<br /><br />Oh, I didn't think of that... wouldn't that be a nice way to get around the word count? :-)Merry Monteleonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09435956005780500310noreply@blogger.com