tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post4979466574652720379..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #10Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18603883726877472712009-07-24T17:57:45.548-04:002009-07-24T17:57:45.548-04:00Picking up the pieces of hurt and going forward. ...Picking up the pieces of hurt and going forward. So hard.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-87010170717699352552009-07-20T05:40:01.253-04:002009-07-20T05:40:01.253-04:00And then turn sober. I like the rhyme in the poem ...And then turn sober. I like the rhyme in the poem but I like the message the most.Soniahttp://www.hourlongmoments.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74758462874428993912009-07-20T02:53:16.584-04:002009-07-20T02:53:16.584-04:00The struggle to wean yourself away from dependance...The struggle to wean yourself away from dependance is well told. I love that you left it on a hopeful note.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90743092308369266702009-07-18T04:52:21.626-04:002009-07-18T04:52:21.626-04:00Superb poem Shadow - really love how you described...Superb poem Shadow - really love how you described the addiction to alcohol in verse. Love the happy end.Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17286909482780350161noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-91263450854648146822009-07-16T12:19:58.968-04:002009-07-16T12:19:58.968-04:00This comment was meant for you, but I accidentally...This comment was meant for you, but I accidentally posted it in the #11 story's comments:<br /><br />Truth in honesty. Excellent.<br /><br />Nicely done,<br /><br />JadeJade L Blackwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15321787298101881675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-29975647658386581172009-07-16T11:23:00.940-04:002009-07-16T11:23:00.940-04:00I really like how you personify alcoholism. Great...I really like how you personify alcoholism. Great writing.Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-66739018979203950682009-07-15T14:32:22.551-04:002009-07-15T14:32:22.551-04:00After the first part, I thought I had got the them...After the first part, I thought I had got the theme of the poem. I was sooo wrong.<br /><br />Hope and time get one always back in track.Gughanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10369044715853545060noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-59660780145355112202009-07-13T17:16:01.186-04:002009-07-13T17:16:01.186-04:00I struggled with it a little bit until I read some...I struggled with it a little bit until I read some of the comments and >whack< was hit over the head with th clue stick that this is about addiction. After I got the clue, I really liked it. Very tough.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-89252029195236190972009-07-12T08:12:32.445-04:002009-07-12T08:12:32.445-04:00Like Katherine I sensed alcohol in this - probably...Like Katherine I sensed alcohol in this - probably cause I'm a happy alcoholic! ;-)<br /><br />Love the upbeat ending to a beautifully written sad poem.<br /><br />Four DinnersThe Preachermanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10224135811862587701noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-89012600150256910592009-07-12T00:50:13.879-04:002009-07-12T00:50:13.879-04:00This is wonderful and I can so relate! Thank you f...This is wonderful and I can so relate! Thank you for writing this piece.Sarah Laurensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09252565450452195395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-975409339289763762009-07-10T05:24:21.962-04:002009-07-10T05:24:21.962-04:00The evocative prose sucks the reader into this lon...The evocative prose sucks the reader into this lonely journey. Great depth - very well done, Shadow!Tessahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05233122532137654099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58849021897256357862009-07-09T17:20:52.811-04:002009-07-09T17:20:52.811-04:00I've always had difficulty with poetry, but fr...I've always had difficulty with poetry, but from a story standpoint, you moved the piece quite well.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10015581797510325112009-07-09T15:49:20.719-04:002009-07-09T15:49:20.719-04:00Really great work... I especially liked:
til ther...Really great work... I especially liked:<br /><br />til there came a time you left me alone<br />deserted, stranded, on paths overgrown<br /><br />But overall, I loved your meter - it flowed really well and was very evocative.Merry Monteleonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09435956005780500310noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72580962736972175982009-07-09T11:16:36.384-04:002009-07-09T11:16:36.384-04:00Shadow, this is a most excellent poem, and one I c...Shadow, this is a most excellent poem, and one I can relate to. As far as relating to the wine, I could see this as a conversation with addiction, and one in which the protagonist won. Great Shadow!Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-25206973356765352152009-07-09T11:03:43.389-04:002009-07-09T11:03:43.389-04:00Poignant. The lines flow so well, they draw you to...Poignant. The lines flow so well, they draw you to the end without a pause.JRVogthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501549592361240370noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-592733022967414382009-07-09T10:45:10.789-04:002009-07-09T10:45:10.789-04:00The poets are on a roll this time. :P
Loved the ...The poets are on a roll this time. :P<br /><br /><br />Loved the end. Hopeful and strong.<br /><br />And I know I'll be stepping on so many poetic feet here when I say, I still love poetry the most when it rhymes. :D But then, am speaking just for myself.<br /><br />The rhymes didn't seem forced at all and you wove a nice message around them. Great work!Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53636561461739862842009-07-09T09:56:22.822-04:002009-07-09T09:56:22.822-04:00I've known many people who loved their alcohol...I've known many people who loved their alcohol like this, and far fewer have chosen sobriety than I'd like to think about. This is a great example of how deep that connection can be, and how foul it can turn.Katherine Napiernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3057859391043341652009-07-09T09:38:28.642-04:002009-07-09T09:38:28.642-04:00shadow, with each new post your talent just contin...shadow, with each new post your talent just continues to shine :)laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-85022886129136967142009-07-09T09:22:39.653-04:002009-07-09T09:22:39.653-04:00Some really good lines in here. I particularly lik...Some really good lines in here. I particularly like "overwhelmingly dire, they left me numb" and "temporary foul distraction."<br /><br />The picture of a destructive relationship severing the connection to everyone important is well drawn.<br /><br />OOOH! Check it out: wvs is "flybin." If it was a real word it would fit somewhere in your poem!Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-52606301818345527912009-07-09T09:05:06.407-04:002009-07-09T09:05:06.407-04:00Wow. Beautifully drawn. Painful, but with a hopef...Wow. Beautifully drawn. Painful, but with a hopeful ending. I'm glad she made her own path at the end.Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.com