tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post5367784762520525526..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #44Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-41112027123038859922008-07-24T16:56:00.000-04:002008-07-24T16:56:00.000-04:00I especially liked the physical contact between th...I especially liked the physical contact between them. I can feel the fire of her hope. Good storytelling.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-86818706541963880672008-07-20T00:11:00.000-04:002008-07-20T00:11:00.000-04:00crap... google ate my post here, too grrrnicely wr...crap... google ate my post here, too grrr<BR/><BR/>nicely wrought!laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-32394378887412444002008-07-19T13:35:00.000-04:002008-07-19T13:35:00.000-04:00Beautiful imagery in your writing. Thanks for a g...Beautiful imagery in your writing. Thanks for a great beginning/ending tale!Missyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16638784910676212171noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-60045224251642488842008-07-16T19:21:00.000-04:002008-07-16T19:21:00.000-04:00I must say I thought this was one of the most adro...I must say I thought this was one of the most adroitly written pieces. <BR/><BR/>"She deftly climbed to the ground flitting from branch to branch like the bird that was her namesake." <BR/><BR/>Lines like this, and others, gave it such validity. You write so poetically. Many good solid images.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-40311327324515699032008-07-16T08:10:00.000-04:002008-07-16T08:10:00.000-04:00I'm a sucker for this kind of story. I'm reminded...I'm a sucker for this kind of story. I'm reminded of the scene in an eighties movie (I'll have to look it up) where a boy rides his motorcycle into school and picks up Daryl Hannah to end the movie. What can I say, I loved it! This was beautifully written. You caught the mood and made me believe.Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-34069949948154294362008-07-15T23:29:00.000-04:002008-07-15T23:29:00.000-04:00awww.. this one so sweet and very beautifully told...awww.. this one so sweet and very beautifully told. Some sentences are really gems!!Lenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09787400183444796423noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-37967395816822825482008-07-15T22:27:00.000-04:002008-07-15T22:27:00.000-04:00Very nice. I enjoyed this a lot. Nicely written."R...Very nice. I enjoyed this a lot. Nicely written.<BR/><BR/>"Robin cried for her mother who would not escape, but she now had to think about the new life within her."<BR/><BR/>Powerful. I think I would have ended it there. Wow. Is she pregnant?<BR/><BR/>Well done.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-23881415913218850522008-07-15T21:57:00.000-04:002008-07-15T21:57:00.000-04:00Well written. Very sweet and sad... But there is...Well written. Very sweet and sad... But there is hope even in the worst of situations. -RitaMy crazy lifehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05631522969768435267noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-43877753011885419972008-07-15T21:18:00.000-04:002008-07-15T21:18:00.000-04:00ahh yes ... her knight in shining armor.ahh yes ... her knight in shining armor.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22224785932480477052008-07-15T16:40:00.000-04:002008-07-15T16:40:00.000-04:00Sarah's comment has voiced everything i wanted to ...Sarah's comment has voiced everything i wanted to say. I love the completeness of this piece and the hopeful ending.<BR/><BR/><I>The headlights of the bike washed the road before them in a glow of hope while falling darkness engulfed the hell behind. </I><BR/><BR/>Beautiful writing.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38023845528428270282008-07-15T15:28:00.000-04:002008-07-15T15:28:00.000-04:00That's something no one came up with till now!Beau...That's something no one came up with till now!<BR/><BR/>Beautiful narration of a victim of a broken home.I wonder what happened to her poor mother...<BR/><BR/>Very well written.Sameera Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05249126041067834608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-54851841860000244432008-07-15T15:15:00.000-04:002008-07-15T15:15:00.000-04:00I shouldn't read Sarah's comments first because I ...I shouldn't read Sarah's comments first because I want to say ditto, but I can't help it ... exactly what she said!Bethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-47012401292775706192008-07-15T15:13:00.000-04:002008-07-15T15:13:00.000-04:00Love the image you created of leaving a "dead end"...Love the image you created of leaving a "dead end" for new hope and promise. Beautifully done.J.C. Montgomeryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05681137099755243041noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-21535806442490452152008-07-15T14:46:00.000-04:002008-07-15T14:46:00.000-04:00Ah, that was beautifully told. We haven't had enou...Ah, that was beautifully told. We haven't had enough teen tales, which are so fitting for a motorcycle's promise of escape. <BR/><BR/>A lot of your lines and details really shone. I think my favorites were about "owning nothing breakable in this house" and the "warmth from his back spreading through her breast." <BR/><BR/>Wonderfully written story.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-88839450909898871512008-07-15T14:39:00.000-04:002008-07-15T14:39:00.000-04:00Solidly written tale.Solidly written tale.BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-6669564537308513132008-07-15T14:01:00.000-04:002008-07-15T14:01:00.000-04:00'The headlights of the bike washed the road before...'The headlights of the bike washed the road before them in a glow of hope while falling darkness engulfed the hell behind'<BR/><BR/>Great line here. Says it all. <BR/><BR/>Very well done<BR/>alexwrath999https://www.blogger.com/profile/10964105112015979524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83712989887752348592008-07-15T13:39:00.000-04:002008-07-15T13:39:00.000-04:00I like how she flees from a *dead end street*, tha...I like how she flees from a *dead end street*, that was clever.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.com