tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post5382749301155664453..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #29Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger24125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-36129529209141904172009-07-28T10:31:02.306-04:002009-07-28T10:31:02.306-04:00I loved this one. The voice and story are original...I loved this one. The voice and story are original and impressive. The twist at the end packs a wallop. Great job!Jaye Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09407478042834459126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22462313262471962092009-07-24T18:20:45.080-04:002009-07-24T18:20:45.080-04:00A very strong portrayal of this scene. Great char...A very strong portrayal of this scene. Great characterization! Really showing how it's done. I found the end very poignant. She's forgotten that people can love her.<br /><br />Congratulations on Fifth Place!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33267753069716816802009-07-24T04:57:11.436-04:002009-07-24T04:57:11.436-04:00Aw, aw aw! There's a great sense of timing in ...Aw, aw aw! There's a great sense of timing in this.McKoalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01457446171624585099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18365138664748948022009-07-22T06:14:40.738-04:002009-07-22T06:14:40.738-04:00Love the way the whole thing moved....it was so sm...Love the way the whole thing moved....it was so smoothly written!Soniahttp://www.hourlongmoments.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-55803477232774977922009-07-20T16:17:15.459-04:002009-07-20T16:17:15.459-04:00Nicely woven piece - I especially like the snowfla...Nicely woven piece - I especially like the snowflake metaphor.Jade L Blackwaterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15321787298101881675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49626575702627004462009-07-19T19:19:14.757-04:002009-07-19T19:19:14.757-04:00I love the sentence
Snowflakes argue in the hallwa...I <i>love</i> the sentence<br /><i>Snowflakes argue in the hallway</i>.<br /><br />Beautiful piece. Well written and enjoyable.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-80552530633290884442009-07-16T11:51:00.241-04:002009-07-16T11:51:00.241-04:00I also love the way you write. Great pacing.I also love the way you write. Great pacing.Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-6292849205517415142009-07-14T13:53:36.143-04:002009-07-14T13:53:36.143-04:00The potentcy of this lies just below the surface. ...The potentcy of this lies just below the surface. Beautifully crafted. Good job.Hoodiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17616427797201977083noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45009905412716446172009-07-14T02:12:54.454-04:002009-07-14T02:12:54.454-04:00The detail and some of the word choices in this ar...The detail and some of the word choices in this are what make it very good.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-6084754099311898502009-07-13T13:39:05.732-04:002009-07-13T13:39:05.732-04:00Well told tale.Well told tale.BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74362990074260208652009-07-13T05:13:45.176-04:002009-07-13T05:13:45.176-04:00Sharp, edgy...and a clever twist. Bravo!Sharp, edgy...and a clever twist. Bravo!Tessahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05233122532137654099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-8014077134831952742009-07-12T07:57:08.523-04:002009-07-12T07:57:08.523-04:00Really nice flow to the story. I love the way you ...Really nice flow to the story. I love the way you write.<br /><br />Four DinnersThe Preachermanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10224135811862587701noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13364404366331115502009-07-12T04:59:09.078-04:002009-07-12T04:59:09.078-04:00This comment has been removed by the author.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-46874773922545755002009-07-11T20:05:32.764-04:002009-07-11T20:05:32.764-04:00This comment has been removed by the author.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3136852707975448912009-07-11T08:35:07.710-04:002009-07-11T08:35:07.710-04:00I love your opening paragraph, and agree the flow ...I love your opening paragraph, and agree the flow of this is flawless. Very nicely written!Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-64171791644374582162009-07-11T01:37:41.385-04:002009-07-11T01:37:41.385-04:00I love this piece for so many reasons. My nickname...I love this piece for so many reasons. My nickname being Micky, not one of them. :D<br /><br />This is one of my favorites so far. It has love, sadness, grief, lust, gluttony all in just 250 words.<br /><br />Bravo!Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-12878019232473373062009-07-10T22:37:30.802-04:002009-07-10T22:37:30.802-04:00Nice characterization.Nice characterization.Preciehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05071233480999640713noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83938303837987236832009-07-10T21:49:10.211-04:002009-07-10T21:49:10.211-04:00The movement of this story seems effortless. From...The movement of this story seems effortless. From her peering out the window to opening the door to receiving the message, the flow is not forced. You did surprise me with that ending.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-7907861942221725002009-07-10T16:03:55.497-04:002009-07-10T16:03:55.497-04:00superb twist! :)superb twist! :)laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-83200088615569788762009-07-10T15:46:12.716-04:002009-07-10T15:46:12.716-04:00Excellent. Gorgeous description of the snow reflec...Excellent. Gorgeous description of the snow reflected on the ceiling.<br /><br />Good job!Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-11148286352931099102009-07-10T15:10:11.502-04:002009-07-10T15:10:11.502-04:00Oh very nicely done - good job!Oh very nicely done - good job!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04871239587214383387noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-89592317746702118902009-07-10T15:02:26.386-04:002009-07-10T15:02:26.386-04:00Nicley done!
alexNicley done!<br /><br />alexwrath999https://www.blogger.com/profile/10964105112015979524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22413458198327439922009-07-10T14:54:12.370-04:002009-07-10T14:54:12.370-04:00Mixed messages. I like the snowflakes arguing, th...Mixed messages. I like the snowflakes arguing, that was a nice detail. Poignant ending.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-11593282218420162312009-07-10T14:21:38.267-04:002009-07-10T14:21:38.267-04:00very nice ending:)very nice ending:)Kunjalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15346731417236906278noreply@blogger.com