tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post5397356745790254994..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #26Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger25125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22884970490134971072010-01-18T11:50:22.180-05:002010-01-18T11:50:22.180-05:00Thank you all for you comments
James : The guy is...Thank you all for you comments<br /><br />James : The guy is already dead when the story begins, he is actually lying on 'the Tower of Silence' (the final resting place of Zoroastrians. In the Zoroastrian faith the bodies of dead are placed atop the tower of silence and so exposed to the birds of prey. The reason given for this practice is that earth, fire and water are all considered as sacred elements, which should not be defiled by the dead.)<br />The first POV is of the dead guy asking the bird to set him free by picking his flesh while the second POV is of the bird itself waiting for the same thing.Krunalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08309143186145830120noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18945927826421949332010-01-18T08:29:21.662-05:002010-01-18T08:29:21.662-05:00A dead guy and a bird, good stuff. It's not of...A dead guy and a bird, good stuff. It's not often that we get two cool POV's in one flash piece.Deb Smythenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-28000998570900574892010-01-17T18:13:58.560-05:002010-01-17T18:13:58.560-05:00I'm not sure the dual POV's work in tandem...I'm not sure the dual POV's work in tandem. I'd like to know how that first person died, and perhaps the other person's thoughts regarding the death.james r tomlinsonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53064968459817369212010-01-13T13:45:43.622-05:002010-01-13T13:45:43.622-05:00very cleverly written. juxtaposing two POVs!very cleverly written. juxtaposing two POVs!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-29179377378375287732010-01-12T02:32:34.383-05:002010-01-12T02:32:34.383-05:00nicely done split...nicely done split...Ankshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17916012910034912977noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-31944732910731807032010-01-11T21:18:41.329-05:002010-01-11T21:18:41.329-05:00Very cool! I like the part from the bird's PO...Very cool! I like the part from the bird's POV. Hee hee. :-)catvibehttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-64045371257022535392010-01-11T14:27:29.893-05:002010-01-11T14:27:29.893-05:00Cool perspectives here. The prey is not the victim...Cool perspectives here. The prey is not the victim but more a partner, like they are waiting for the same thing.<br /><br />I also like the POV change from looking up to looking down.<br /><br />Good take.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-26529429473050160912010-01-11T06:34:53.770-05:002010-01-11T06:34:53.770-05:00I liked the first part, before the pov switch. May...I liked the first part, before the pov switch. Maybe build that up.austerehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16839224877080864005noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-46731674722554188582010-01-10T16:23:30.117-05:002010-01-10T16:23:30.117-05:00Enjoyed both parts of what seemed to me as a respe...Enjoyed both parts of what seemed to me as a respectful ritualistic pact.kashersnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-79604563270763857532010-01-09T19:30:18.723-05:002010-01-09T19:30:18.723-05:00very well done, krunal :)very well done, krunal :)laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-46810227590979562992010-01-09T06:43:35.789-05:002010-01-09T06:43:35.789-05:00.. death is like a game to be played with over and..... death is like a game to be played with over and over again. nice read.Amias (ljm and liquidplastic)https://www.blogger.com/profile/14722413697537828830noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18582334534469322502010-01-08T21:32:04.989-05:002010-01-08T21:32:04.989-05:00Excellent writing. Great job on the POV switch.Excellent writing. Great job on the POV switch.TLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01613912638668399684noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-51148145437642659592010-01-08T20:51:20.893-05:002010-01-08T20:51:20.893-05:00The shifting POV is what makes this story.
Well ...The shifting POV is what makes this story. <br />Well done.Terrihttp://misterri.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-73165425236640895162010-01-08T14:00:04.713-05:002010-01-08T14:00:04.713-05:00I think I'll be the bird....;-)
That was real...I think I'll be the bird....;-)<br /><br />That was realy good old bean. Like Aniket said....hard to do that in 250 words....you managed it.<br /><br />Excellent stuff!!!DILLIGAFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16520650650468676361noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13299022016053071162010-01-08T10:09:04.543-05:002010-01-08T10:09:04.543-05:00I've just been off on a learning journey to fi...I've just been off on a learning journey to find out about the Zorastrian faith and I see that ritual exposure is the way they liked to do it until poisoning killed the majority of the vultures. <br /><br />I love the duality of the prey and the predator speaking. Both soothing the other. Both understanding that this is symbiosis. Very good.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-91929535669810189452010-01-08T09:40:56.715-05:002010-01-08T09:40:56.715-05:00it's great to see two points of views with one...it's great to see two points of views with one goal in mind... an interesting take.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-7218790082177645912010-01-08T06:30:19.755-05:002010-01-08T06:30:19.755-05:00As you fade away, you only see the silhouettes .. ...As you fade away, you only see the silhouettes .. nicely done!Kartikhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01067636999700672077noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72565303555202485932010-01-08T01:56:09.248-05:002010-01-08T01:56:09.248-05:00I liked the sense of patience slowly crumbling awa...I liked the sense of patience slowly crumbling away in this piece.Craighttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344917148662934359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-63824244305185374012010-01-08T00:06:31.322-05:002010-01-08T00:06:31.322-05:00I see this as a tale of faith vindicated. Those i...I see this as a tale of faith vindicated. Those in power kill and revile the infidel, but it's the infidel that holds the truth. Interesting.<br /><br />(my word verification is <i>misms</i>. very interesting.)PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3366210677363390292010-01-07T22:52:24.805-05:002010-01-07T22:52:24.805-05:00Love the shifting POV. Well done.Love the shifting POV. Well done.Sarah Laurensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09252565450452195395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22223140010937760142010-01-07T16:53:59.488-05:002010-01-07T16:53:59.488-05:00Nicely woven.Nicely woven.Rachel Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13048590167153841615noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-77642754700396751972010-01-07T14:46:16.788-05:002010-01-07T14:46:16.788-05:00a real sense of proud frustration comes through he...a real sense of proud frustration comes through here. the stream of consciousness is well executed.Jaredhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08616991031174431847noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-56608584403223969432010-01-07T14:44:55.370-05:002010-01-07T14:44:55.370-05:00Multiple POVs and time-shifts are considered death...Multiple POVs and time-shifts are considered death-traps for short fiction. Or so I've been told. <br /><br />Congratulations for safely coming out of it, and showing me how its supposed to be done.<br /><br />Superb.Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53176024750706635582010-01-07T14:44:00.047-05:002010-01-07T14:44:00.047-05:00Very well written! And I echo Lena about the point...Very well written! And I echo Lena about the points of view.<br /><br />NevineNevine Sultanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08794887684860140819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-65561694315166645942010-01-07T14:33:53.743-05:002010-01-07T14:33:53.743-05:00It is an interesting idea to show 2 points of view...It is an interesting idea to show 2 points of view here. Wish though it could be a little bit longer. But rules are rules. Well done!Lenahttp://www.thecolorsmagazine.com/noreply@blogger.com