tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post5430378329308212577..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #72Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-85266819383649104722007-08-07T22:24:00.000-04:002007-08-07T22:24:00.000-04:00Extremely well written with vivid characterization...Extremely well written with vivid characterization. Great use of showing instead of telling.<BR/><BR/>High marks!<BR/><BR/>Congratulations on 4th Place!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-76194190600736484292007-08-07T20:24:00.000-04:002007-08-07T20:24:00.000-04:00Holy toledo! I didn't even realize she was going ...Holy toledo! I didn't even realize she was going to kill him. I thought she had a low self esteem and she was ending the date so as not to make him suffer. Haha! <BR/><BR/>Now that I know, it's terrific! <BR/><BR/>Congratulations on the win too!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13906826333642933072007-08-07T14:14:00.000-04:002007-08-07T14:14:00.000-04:00Dottie, Sincere congratulations on a much deserved...Dottie, <BR/><BR/>Sincere congratulations on a much deserved win. Keep up the good workAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58679970394632328732007-08-05T00:16:00.000-04:002007-08-05T00:16:00.000-04:00Really like the twist at the end. Cleverly hinted ...Really like the twist at the end. Cleverly hinted at earlier in the story with the 'court ordered' therapist. I caught the therapist part but not the court ordered until the reveal. Nice work.<BR/><BR/>BDbriliantdonkeyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05159881776835603748noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-77830546688193695912007-08-04T20:27:00.000-04:002007-08-04T20:27:00.000-04:00Great combination of a confident voice, humor, and...Great combination of a confident voice, humor, and surprising intent. You packed a lot in, and it all worked. Fabulous piece.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-81905633745762934162007-08-03T13:01:00.000-04:002007-08-03T13:01:00.000-04:00I also sense a crime involved - especially with th...I also sense a crime involved - especially with the court-ordered therapist mentioned. Creepy.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-47725794111576741122007-08-02T19:47:00.000-04:002007-08-02T19:47:00.000-04:00Send it to McSweeney's!Send it to McSweeney's!Victor Bravo Monchego, Jrhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05251479110131293284noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-64675721905141116522007-08-02T19:30:00.000-04:002007-08-02T19:30:00.000-04:00Captivating. I loved it.Captivating. I loved it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38390662190453121952007-08-02T18:11:00.000-04:002007-08-02T18:11:00.000-04:00Dottie, those contrasts came through for me. Exce...Dottie, those contrasts came through for me. Excellent read.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-40162098387075386312007-08-02T15:10:00.000-04:002007-08-02T15:10:00.000-04:00If I hadn't found the contest so late in the game,...If I hadn't found the contest so late in the game, I may have been able to develop further the concept of contrasts. Like some of the other entrants, it was the light in the picture that struck me. light vs. dark, guide vs. follower, victim vs. aggressor and, yes, pygmy vs. anthropologist. <BR/>I wanted it to shift within the story, like light does as you walk through a forest. It will be fun to keep working it. I appreciate all thoughts and suggestions. To answer Ann's question SWF is about to bash Mr. Fifth Date's head in. But maybe she won't. As she said herself, the date was more promising than the others.Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-85325788990492462572007-08-02T14:50:00.000-04:002007-08-02T14:50:00.000-04:00What is Mr. Fifth Date suffering through? I loved...What is Mr. Fifth Date suffering through? I loved this one as well.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18750534895355000972007-08-02T10:38:00.000-04:002007-08-02T10:38:00.000-04:00Loved this. Good job!Loved this. Good job!Jaye Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09407478042834459126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-25309636357755404682007-08-02T10:07:00.000-04:002007-08-02T10:07:00.000-04:00Your character is vibrant - I really enjoy the voi...Your character is vibrant - I really enjoy the voice.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-86992569726320321052007-08-02T03:24:00.000-04:002007-08-02T03:24:00.000-04:00Ooh, creepy! Really well done, good voice and ten...Ooh, creepy! Really well done, good voice and tension and brilliant twist.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04871239587214383387noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-30910735137691413672007-08-02T03:01:00.000-04:002007-08-02T03:01:00.000-04:00bucking frilliant!<B><I>bucking frilliant!</B></I>AngelConradiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09423318903817661244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-72745618067376810332007-08-02T00:32:00.000-04:002007-08-02T00:32:00.000-04:00LOVE. IT.I like the end too. Leaves you wondering...LOVE. IT.<BR/>I like the end too. Leaves you wondering what "it" is for sure that Mr. Fifth Date might have to suffer through. ;)Hoodiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17616427797201977083noreply@blogger.com