tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post554473914479513657..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #3Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger18125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33042817827478569422007-04-30T21:06:00.000-04:002007-04-30T21:06:00.000-04:00Unexpected end. Your descriptions are well chosen...Unexpected end. Your descriptions are well chosen.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-44129915693220664102007-04-24T21:19:00.000-04:002007-04-24T21:19:00.000-04:00totally fascinating! i love that the options are s...totally fascinating! i love that the options are still open for what happens next ... there's a zoom-in thing going on here that is so subtly done, the shift of light from whatever the boys were up to into the privacy and maybe sorrow of another's life; whatever the boys might have thought they would take, Tim's been given something else entirely ... lovely writing!Shellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03972087708536071956noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-4641243772448486892007-04-24T12:43:00.000-04:002007-04-24T12:43:00.000-04:00I too enjoyed the twist. A death theme are runnin...I too enjoyed the twist. A death theme are running through this one and I love all the different takes on it.Bethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-9852121696068017002007-04-22T20:01:00.000-04:002007-04-22T20:01:00.000-04:00Excellent piece. And I wonder too what will happe...Excellent piece. And I wonder too what will happen when the old man comes in and finds a stranger in his house, even if that stranger is doing him a favor. I really think you should expand this and make this into something longer, continuing from where this leaves off.Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-45013351368078303802007-04-22T19:51:00.000-04:002007-04-22T19:51:00.000-04:00Maht, this was great, and the ending was so unexpe...Maht, this was great, and the ending was so unexpected. It's only now, however, after already sending off my entry, that I see you have a character named Tim. Well, So do I ... and it's too late! Bloody hell. Oh well. We must be connecting on some mysterious level. This seems to happen to me! :)S. Kearneyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03976476273818980832noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-15853113147439242202007-04-22T15:54:00.000-04:002007-04-22T15:54:00.000-04:00What an elegant ending! I got the feeling that no...What an elegant ending! I got the feeling that not only did Tim experience his first image of death, but he became the man he was meant to be in the moment he began to clean the old man's home.<BR/><BR/>Good job, Maht.heartinsanfranciscohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07535397382991383931noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-71670468293719106452007-04-22T15:06:00.000-04:002007-04-22T15:06:00.000-04:00Nicely done.Nicely done.Judehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14121286194338647357noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38118125877232165952007-04-22T12:31:00.000-04:002007-04-22T12:31:00.000-04:00Great writing Maht and I really liked the end. It'...Great writing Maht and I really liked the end. It's very hopeful. You've created a real atmosphere in so little words.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08533913253403252799noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-75820442713147026502007-04-21T18:10:00.000-04:002007-04-21T18:10:00.000-04:00The ending was a jewel placed in a well crafted se...The ending was a jewel placed in a well crafted setting. Very nice. I was touched.Jonihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18109855683749612076noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-65362086034634085582007-04-21T12:49:00.000-04:002007-04-21T12:49:00.000-04:00Hurray for humanity! Well, written piece. I like...Hurray for humanity! Well, written piece. I like how the images go from death, to decay, to all that life is meant to be.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13066454835496612642007-04-21T08:10:00.000-04:002007-04-21T08:10:00.000-04:00Unexpected & stirring, Maht! :-)Unexpected & stirring, Maht! :-)Suzan Abrams, email: suzanabrams@live.co.ukhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08818807164881810296noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-67134244504769265682007-04-20T16:48:00.000-04:002007-04-20T16:48:00.000-04:00Clever in its simplicity - nicely done, Maht.Clever in its simplicity - nicely done, Maht.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03665385782194826703noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3310934046792848652007-04-20T15:15:00.000-04:002007-04-20T15:15:00.000-04:00I adore this - lovely writing, and good ending. Yo...I adore this - lovely writing, and good ending. You've said so much with just a little.Samhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05943062466398436785noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-3537154197765987852007-04-20T13:28:00.000-04:002007-04-20T13:28:00.000-04:00The tension was brilliant but its the twist at the...The tension was brilliant but its the twist at the end that gets you.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02744937536946299450noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58943230976108547132007-04-20T11:20:00.000-04:002007-04-20T11:20:00.000-04:00Liked the twist at the end. We had an old widower...Liked the twist at the end. We had an old widower living in our neighborhood when I was a kid...I never thought of how his life must have changed until my dad died and I saw the differences in my mom. This was great.kcterrilynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13531823806841801437noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-32103803120074048472007-04-20T10:57:00.000-04:002007-04-20T10:57:00.000-04:00"This was his first real image of death, the effec..."This was his first real image of death, the effects of it and what life could become to those left behind."<BR/><BR/>I really liked this line. Nice twist at the end.Jaye Wellshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09407478042834459126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-46203216255598129842007-04-20T09:42:00.000-04:002007-04-20T09:42:00.000-04:00Nice work Maht. I like how the tension seems to bu...Nice work Maht. I like how the tension seems to build throughout the story.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-76643318063403826492007-04-20T07:17:00.000-04:002007-04-20T07:17:00.000-04:00Now that's a NICE twist!Now that's a NICE twist!Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.com