tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post5617420771928889193..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Brain SurgeryJason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38452400527625805432010-01-29T09:59:46.405-05:002010-01-29T09:59:46.405-05:00I am thinking this very clever, you.
And I'm a...I am thinking this very clever, you.<br />And I'm always saying it, but I think endings in writing make something. If the ending is good and those final words stand out; the whole will stay in the readers mind long after the words are read. <br />I am believe these words of yours, do.<br />I am liking this, you; muchly.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-20387332151589568812009-11-21T21:47:13.973-05:002009-11-21T21:47:13.973-05:00This is a great metaphor, and a painful thought .....This is a great metaphor, and a painful thought ... almost like cutting the umbilical cord, but there are so many it takes a lifetime to cut them all ... ouch!Amias (ljm and liquidplastic)https://www.blogger.com/profile/14722413697537828830noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-39683196156499707612009-11-20T21:21:12.846-05:002009-11-20T21:21:12.846-05:00holy crap, this is disturbing.
As it was intended,...holy crap, this is disturbing.<br />As it was intended, I imagine.<br />What a horrid way to deal with a 'problem' child.<br />Power in the hands of those much more demented than those they claim to fix. ugh.<br />We humans are a sick lot. Often.Jeanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02099808690177823190noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2224786202061971042009-11-20T08:45:13.784-05:002009-11-20T08:45:13.784-05:00@ Aine & Jason:
Darkness shall prevail! Toget...@ Aine & Jason:<br /><br />Darkness shall prevail! Together we can take over Toonsville and not even the combined power of buttercup, blossom and bubbles would be enough to stop us. Mwuhahahaha!Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-28609135582983590882009-11-20T00:07:57.160-05:002009-11-20T00:07:57.160-05:00Aniket, as you learn from Aine below, she wanted t...Aniket, as you learn from Aine below, she wanted to be a pathologist. Weirdly enough, I did too! I guess we all share the urge get in there and dig around!!<br /><br />Nevine, no, I don't think they go away. At best, they turn into dark little islands. But somehow, we always figure out how to sail a boat there.<br /><br />Aine, didn't that fetal pig visit for Thanksgiving? Or maybe it was Easter family dinner. Loved that!!<br /><br />PixieDust, unfortunately, this man was destroying who those boys were. And most of them could hardly qualify as truly delinquent. In fact, I wonder if ADHD might have earned a lobotomy back then.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-68649511021722948642009-11-19T18:28:59.259-05:002009-11-19T18:28:59.259-05:00I'm most likely projecting, but the fact that ...I'm most likely projecting, but the fact that the man in the van calls to the boys in detention makes me think of all the children who've been given up on...<br /><br />This was touching on many levels...<br /><br />:-)<br /><br />love,<br />mePixieDusthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14255641743057365106noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-25276418335138432142009-11-19T09:02:42.355-05:002009-11-19T09:02:42.355-05:00Aniket, LOL!! I loved dissection! Used to want t...Aniket, LOL!! I loved dissection! Used to want to become a pathologist. I even carried my fully dissected fetal pig home (from college) to show my mom on Thanksgiving morning while she was working on the turkey dinner. (Yeah, you can imagine how she loved that...) I guess that qualifies me as one who has dark desires, too...<br />:)Ainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08402176500997528105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-6258331051551711612009-11-19T08:38:25.040-05:002009-11-19T08:38:25.040-05:00And when we've snipped those connections, have...And when we've snipped those connections, have we truly severed them forever? Very fine words for an extremely painful procedure. Whether the lobotomy is literal or figurative, we suffer.Nevine Sultanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08794887684860140819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-66079483565365778952009-11-19T01:38:30.077-05:002009-11-19T01:38:30.077-05:00I have a feeling if I ever gave it a try I'll ...I have a feeling if I ever gave it a try I'll kinda like disecting. I've always had equal pleasures in disecting other things as I get from creating one. <br /><br />I have broken so many toys just to look how they function inside.<br /><br />I realize this qualifies to get enrolled into therepy sessions in most cases, but am well in control of my dark desires. Trust me. :)Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-90454307085131882492009-11-18T23:35:25.022-05:002009-11-18T23:35:25.022-05:00Shadow, I've got some Ibuprofen.
Meghana, the...Shadow, I've got some Ibuprofen.<br /><br />Meghana, the first part of this poem refers to a real "doctor" who performed crude lobotomies on delinquent boys in the back of a van, or right in the school. It's not even clear how many he did before he was disgraced and stopped. Some boys died.<br /><br />Tabitha, thanks for the kind words, especially about the end. :)<br /><br /><br />Four Dinners, once or twice I've been lobotomized by Jennifer Connelly.<br /><br />Karen, thank you! This poem was captured in a welling of thought and emotion.<br /><br />Walking Man, I suppose there are all sorts of insidious ways.<br /><br />Laurel, there *is* an underlying desperation. Thankfully, no over-medication though. (Or any medication, actually.) I was touched by the emotion it evoked in you. <br /><br />Angie, sometimes I do overdo the layers. ;)<br /><br />Rick, I have a pretty good headache right now. Maybe I'd better check my scalp for a knife. But seriously, thanks for the kind words!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49931395759298046502009-11-18T22:10:26.537-05:002009-11-18T22:10:26.537-05:00Whoa, sharp work! I, too, am getting an empatheti...Whoa, sharp work! I, too, am getting an empathetic headache.Rickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14546882686381428986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-42391828672231073442009-11-18T10:24:49.398-05:002009-11-18T10:24:49.398-05:00"mallet thwap"...ah! Had to read it seve..."mallet thwap"...ah! Had to read it several times. Kudos on the layering.Angie Ledbetterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16407006980893727627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22503655990705135872009-11-18T09:13:08.359-05:002009-11-18T09:13:08.359-05:00This one makes me so sad. The reference to the cru...This one makes me so sad. The reference to the crude procedure in the first verse makes the desperation apparent. Whatever the subject wants to escape must be terrible.<br /><br />I wondered, not to be too prosaic, but is there any veiled reference to seeking a state of overmedication? It does seem to be the current equivalent of the old fashioned lobotomy.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-25099329311907628152009-11-18T06:46:25.867-05:002009-11-18T06:46:25.867-05:00When did the lords of the world learn to lobotomiz...When did the lords of the world learn to lobotomize us without the scalpel and ice pick?<br /><br />Wonderful piece Jason.the walking manhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10058913927297370740noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5487482179957716862009-11-18T05:14:34.088-05:002009-11-18T05:14:34.088-05:00I think this is one of your best! I love the idea ...I think this is one of your best! I love the idea of the schoolboys-detention, but the last four lines of the poem are superb!Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-40108793001517348862009-11-18T05:10:54.693-05:002009-11-18T05:10:54.693-05:00wow! Now that is really good old bean.
I'm au...wow! Now that is really good old bean.<br /><br />I'm au fais with lobotomy...I tend to dribble like I've just had one whenever Kylie Minogue appears on my TV set...;-)DILLIGAFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16520650650468676361noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-30024061472419676752009-11-18T03:28:33.319-05:002009-11-18T03:28:33.319-05:00Love the last two lines Jason! The whole thing is ...Love the last two lines Jason! The whole thing is brillant. Give a guy a pen hey :) well done as always!Tabitha Birdhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08196816108272065974noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-16173686889904250072009-11-18T03:13:50.573-05:002009-11-18T03:13:50.573-05:00it rehashed that cheap sense of perversion i have ...it rehashed that cheap sense of perversion i have associated with all medical procedures<br />like a bystander, an ogler.<br /><br />the last line seals the deal.<br />quite quite brilliant, as always.Meghana Naiduhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11938703634449807919noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-11176196760756392492009-11-18T01:44:39.126-05:002009-11-18T01:44:39.126-05:00i think i've got a headache...i think i've got a headache...Shadowhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05999801833389058410noreply@blogger.com