tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post5898454171546532547..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #62Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger30125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-19299617590344365382008-07-24T17:14:00.000-04:002008-07-24T17:14:00.000-04:00Very intrigued by the characters. Great concept, ...Very intrigued by the characters. Great concept, and well handled. Such a careful reconnection. High marks overall.<BR/><BR/>Congratulations on the Honorable Mention!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18522710885353573642008-07-21T04:32:00.000-04:002008-07-21T04:32:00.000-04:00It was a nice story. There's so much to it behind ...It was a nice story. There's so much to it behind the words and I loved that.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-71672298564119202062008-07-20T20:06:00.000-04:002008-07-20T20:06:00.000-04:00Yoyoyo y'all! Thanks for all the kind words. Now...Yoyoyo y'all! Thanks for all the kind words. Now that Reader's Choice voting is closed (hey, I'm all about winning, Ello, love!), I wanted to say - I heart all the love, but I would welcome constructive criticism, too. (And - "I didn't understand this part" doesn't really work.) SPECIFICS, please. If you have time. HA.<BR/><BR/>Cheers and glasses of champagne to you all!<BR/>AerinAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58352094411378031682008-07-20T15:37:00.000-04:002008-07-20T15:37:00.000-04:00The others have said it all! The story is so beaut...The others have said it all! The story is so beautifulAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-2189691143188130802008-07-19T21:22:00.000-04:002008-07-19T21:22:00.000-04:00This is so tightly written--it feels like a chapte...This is so tightly written--it feels like a chapter and not a vignette. I love the bittersweet and honest nature of this, and how the daughter takes the lead at the end.<BR/>Great job!!!Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11794946908789120139noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-76982875973328338172008-07-19T19:44:00.000-04:002008-07-19T19:44:00.000-04:00This was a tale that really tugs at the heart and ...This was a tale that really tugs at the heart and it was so well done.<BR/><BR/>Good job.Julie Weathershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13725236516593676381noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58719931456106280762008-07-18T23:30:00.000-04:002008-07-18T23:30:00.000-04:00"Fourteen-year-old palms" is a magic phrase. Well ..."Fourteen-year-old palms" is a magic phrase. Well done and well said.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-41014096939510644002008-07-18T00:02:00.000-04:002008-07-18T00:02:00.000-04:00Ooh, lovely vignette. What I liked most is the bit...Ooh, lovely vignette. What I liked most is the bits that were <I>not</I> mentioned, if you understand what I mean. It's like eavesdropping. Mean skills, Aerin!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16532403180123519635noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-25361535969032173952008-07-17T22:26:00.000-04:002008-07-17T22:26:00.000-04:00There's a lot here - but it left me curious about ...There's a lot here - but it left me curious about things that are left ambiguous or unstated. Why were they going back to the rock? How did the daughter react to learning that the mother didn't have regrets? What was the occasion of their reunion?<BR/><BR/>Good stuff. I'd read more...Posol'stvo the Medvedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00573435137467134333noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-67201707380259744922008-07-17T17:53:00.000-04:002008-07-17T17:53:00.000-04:00Good stuff Aerin. I like doing those sort of 'sna...Good stuff Aerin. I like doing those sort of 'snapshot' style pieces myself. No twists and turns, just the feel and the atmosphere of a moment in time.iLL Manhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08107892879700381858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-84608857559000264812008-07-17T17:19:00.000-04:002008-07-17T17:19:00.000-04:00You stink Aerin! Now I have no chance at winning r...You stink Aerin! Now I have no chance at winning reader's choice! ;o) My jealousy aside, man you are good! What I loved about this piece is it felt so real, so honest and told a story beyond the 250 word count. I could see them and I could watch their body language. There was magic in the words.Ello - Ellen Ohhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311917335471167591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-56063737208826717212008-07-17T15:28:00.000-04:002008-07-17T15:28:00.000-04:00What a great way of storytelling you have! :)What a great way of storytelling you have! :)Sameera Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05249126041067834608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-58412583633850804162008-07-17T14:26:00.000-04:002008-07-17T14:26:00.000-04:00Not sure why, but apart from liking the overall st...Not sure why, but apart from liking the overall story very much, the phrase "adolescent corn" struck my fancy. I will likely pilfer it!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-27663736309398548762008-07-17T12:10:00.000-04:002008-07-17T12:10:00.000-04:00Beautifully crafted story that is both relevant an...Beautifully crafted story that is both relevant and penetrating. Well done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-70468404438846843252008-07-17T11:30:00.000-04:002008-07-17T11:30:00.000-04:00This is beautiful, but not at all sappy. I like t...This is beautiful, but not at all sappy. I like the amount of tension you built into the story without creating a fall off the cliff kind of ending. It all felt true.Dottie Camptownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00891885810903269126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-18373604436085446392008-07-17T09:27:00.000-04:002008-07-17T09:27:00.000-04:00Oh great job Aerin. Such mood, and a whole life to...Oh great job Aerin. Such mood, and a whole life told so beautifully in poignant breaths. <BR/>The cord between the mother and daughter, and the things unsaid, well.. you said them well. <BR/>All the best, <BR/>JoanitaBeingtheBeehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11403785145128396266noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-65033453140853173782008-07-17T08:06:00.000-04:002008-07-17T08:06:00.000-04:00You managed a lot in a little space. How you comm...You managed a lot in a little space. How you communicated her age, fourteen-year-old palms, was perfect. This read smoothly, and also presented us with an intriguing situation. And the honesty of the mother, and the way the daughter took that honesty, and the mother's transformation (if I'm interpretting her correctly). I really liked this a lot. It takes skill to be so clear and concise.Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-68108072706010759062008-07-17T07:56:00.000-04:002008-07-17T07:56:00.000-04:00I usually find first person present tense off-putt...I usually find first person present tense off-putting, but this is so well done! Very, very good.charlenetegliahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14061754720849284938noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-77407273597850530522008-07-17T07:33:00.000-04:002008-07-17T07:33:00.000-04:00Oh Aerin -you know I adore your writing! I love t...Oh Aerin -you know I adore your writing! I love the atmosphere here. Nostalgic, regret? hopeful…<BR/><BR/>She gave away her baby and then went into obstetrics - So much stuff here, brilliantly understated to let the reader delve into the story and explore.<BR/><BR/><I>Starlight drops into her dirty blonde hair. Did she inherit that wistful look or is it something all of us born here share?</I><BR/><BR/>Magic Aerin. Love it!JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-53501880814592598162008-07-17T04:37:00.000-04:002008-07-17T04:37:00.000-04:00I loved this! I also loved the fact that it's a wo...I loved this! I also loved the fact that it's a woman driving the bike. Smashing, thanks. Karentea and cakehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05772019840779001852noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-40723484285933552112008-07-17T03:24:00.000-04:002008-07-17T03:24:00.000-04:00Ohhh, a lovely, wistful story, Aerin.You didn't ha...Ohhh, a lovely, wistful story, Aerin.<BR/>You didn't have to describe a single one of their feelings. I felt it for them.<BR/>Well done.rainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04258822737734173873noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24428204258245022322008-07-17T02:39:00.000-04:002008-07-17T02:39:00.000-04:00Very sweet. Was she conceived there?The "Skip brou...Very sweet. Was she conceived there?<BR/>The "Skip brought me here" keeps ringing out - but she doesn't tell her daughter that.<BR/>This was written very nicely.Esther Avilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06840416881970211377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-13768485186139370322008-07-17T00:40:00.000-04:002008-07-17T00:40:00.000-04:00I like the scenario, the mileau... trading respons...I like the scenario, the mileau... trading responsibilities (the daughter) for freedom only to discover what's missing. Nice Hallmark feel to it.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-5222742787353709712008-07-17T00:25:00.000-04:002008-07-17T00:25:00.000-04:00A bitter-sweet taste... Beautifully written, Aerin...A bitter-sweet taste... Beautifully written, Aerin!Vesperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12417602625059442986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-7027611782577398552008-07-16T23:33:00.000-04:002008-07-16T23:33:00.000-04:00I thought I had it, but wasn't sure until the comm...I thought I had it, but wasn't sure until the comments. Nicely done.<BR/><BR/>I read this book recently written just like this, which was so haunting. I can't think of the name, but it's a best seller! lolBethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17335415338155220244noreply@blogger.com