tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post5924804393950924460..comments2023-09-22T07:03:03.280-04:00Comments on The Clarity of Night: Entry #82Jason Evanshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14851992219298316168noreply@blogger.comBlogger30125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-24686267995738564932010-01-19T16:26:52.995-05:002010-01-19T16:26:52.995-05:00Dear Entrants #1-105,
I have read your pieces so ...Dear Entrants #1-105,<br /><br />I have read your pieces so that I can fairly participate in the Readers' Choice vote. (I read all of them through last week, before I started commenting.) I <i>will</i> be coming back around to offer <a href="http://www.insearchofgiants.com/2010/01/commenting-on-silhouette.html" rel="nofollow">my keep/tweak comment</a>, but I didn't want anyone to snark. <br /><br />Cheers,<br />Aerin (#236)<br /><br />BTW, it's perfectly fine if you still want to snark, but this way you can choose a more appropriate subject, like Sarah Palin's hair or the enigmatic career of Justin Timberlake.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-32757405134430352192010-01-18T12:08:50.915-05:002010-01-18T12:08:50.915-05:00Really good imagery, and a nice final line to leav...Really good imagery, and a nice final line to leave it on. Good job.Rabid Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13307255127156087170noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-36263630199970952992010-01-18T03:58:58.302-05:002010-01-18T03:58:58.302-05:00aw, this was so sweet, Aimee.
i have to admint tha...aw, this was so sweet, Aimee.<br />i have to admint that the first reading the words made little, if any sense to me, but the end cleared it up: for the second reading it was lovely, very logical and sweet. all from a child's perspective. great.SzélsőFahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11600289147447182465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-85003545805270498592010-01-17T15:22:00.495-05:002010-01-17T15:22:00.495-05:00Heartwarming moment and definitely poetic in flow....Heartwarming moment and definitely poetic in flow.BernardLhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09722619048888613647noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-52855097485803366642010-01-17T15:12:07.021-05:002010-01-17T15:12:07.021-05:00Great job!
I can relate to this so completely; mu...Great job!<br /><br />I can relate to this so completely; much of my childhood was spent in the back seat of a car. I remember watching the moon out the window, thinking it was following us because it never got further away no matter how far we drove.Kurt Hendrickshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16183333362118745153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-46228953013780176112010-01-17T09:57:50.600-05:002010-01-17T09:57:50.600-05:00Thank you all for the additional comments! I toyed...Thank you all for the additional comments! I toyed with writing it in reverse, but found I had to leave that line last to tie it all together. :) Thanks so much!Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-62958138969136621452010-01-17T07:29:46.635-05:002010-01-17T07:29:46.635-05:00Those car rides certainly are long journeys for yo...Those car rides certainly are long journeys for young children. I must admit, at first I thought this might be a kidnapping because of that emptied Minnie Mouse backpack; initially I didn't know what the click was (the seatbelt). Excellent writing.james r. tomlinsonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-23028444948302384132010-01-17T07:23:27.837-05:002010-01-17T07:23:27.837-05:00love the final line, made me smile...think you cap...love the final line, made me smile...think you captured a little girl entertaining herself on a journey perfectly..i stuggled to picture the scene with the first cfew lines but all soon became clear..very niceJaniehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01307744393832704228noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-41554653382323407792010-01-16T22:38:59.004-05:002010-01-16T22:38:59.004-05:00You have a lovely voice.
Mary was quite real. Tha...You have a lovely voice.<br />Mary was quite real. Thanks for the trip. :)rainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04258822737734173873noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-23448630972509192772010-01-15T17:45:03.246-05:002010-01-15T17:45:03.246-05:00Magical and endearing. You captured the mind of a ...Magical and endearing. You captured the mind of a child very well! I enjoyed reading your story.Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49194897735764354242010-01-13T10:05:03.896-05:002010-01-13T10:05:03.896-05:00A whiff of nostaglia, for sure. You definitely too...A whiff of nostaglia, for sure. You definitely took me back. Lovely writing.Deb Smythenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-74323855822982803802010-01-12T21:42:28.580-05:002010-01-12T21:42:28.580-05:00Thank you all so very much! I'm glad you could...Thank you all so very much! I'm glad you could all see what I was trying to show! :) Thank you!Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-42772671663499232042010-01-12T16:18:29.233-05:002010-01-12T16:18:29.233-05:00I left it thrice and can't believe I have not ...I left it thrice and can't believe I have not commented. This is excellent writing. It was like being taken back to childhood.lenahttp://www.thecolorsmagazine.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-49909217576178449742010-01-12T13:29:48.976-05:002010-01-12T13:29:48.976-05:00Poetic, sweet and feelgood.
Very nice indeed.Poetic, sweet and feelgood.<br /><br />Very nice indeed.DILLIGAFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16520650650468676361noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-33515016585155458652010-01-11T23:22:37.436-05:002010-01-11T23:22:37.436-05:00ROAD TRIP!
Oh, and thank the dear Lord for porta...ROAD TRIP! <br /><br />Oh, and thank the dear Lord for portable DVD players.<br /><br />This effervesces with radiant childhood energy. Lovely and sweet.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-89380045581918466512010-01-11T19:31:16.297-05:002010-01-11T19:31:16.297-05:00very well done, aimee :)very well done, aimee :)laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-22600436381440743322010-01-10T20:41:34.263-05:002010-01-10T20:41:34.263-05:00Aw, this reminded me clearly of my family's ro...Aw, this reminded me clearly of my family's road trips as a child. I loved the vibration and the sound and the way it opened my imagination.Katehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16995806117529635229noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-70586677489250100662010-01-10T14:20:58.257-05:002010-01-10T14:20:58.257-05:00Thank you all for the nice notes! I struggled with...Thank you all for the nice notes! I struggled with this photo until I asked my kids what they saw. Bird was the first, then they started remembering stuff. My 5 years old said "we saw a bird once out the window" and the idea was born. :) <br /><br />I'm glad I could bring you all back to your childhoods for a moment! :)Aimee Lainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15201246474625590886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-77615599592547830062010-01-10T13:37:43.238-05:002010-01-10T13:37:43.238-05:00Beautifully written. Had to read it twice. But was...Beautifully written. Had to read it twice. But was enchanted by the fog bit. It is one of the most unconscious actions that we indulge in. and you've brought it out perfectly. could almost see the faraway look in Mary's eyes as she doodled.Preetihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00279859240371070699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-11316398081063000252010-01-10T10:55:25.810-05:002010-01-10T10:55:25.810-05:00I used to count them too and who hasn't done t...I used to count them too and who hasn't done the fog thing? :) And was equally impatient. My bro. and I used to sing songs too all through the trip.<br /><br />These was such a sweet sweet tale. I felt connected to the story as it felt so like mine. I'm sure most will feel the same way. And for that I thank you!Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-10990588303819334672010-01-10T10:46:59.272-05:002010-01-10T10:46:59.272-05:00I was trying to make the connection as to how this...I was trying to make the connection as to how this was inspired by the contest, and then I got it, it was the breath on the window, and the silhouettes of shapes she made. Beautifully written. How wonderful to be in the mind of a child again!catvibehttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-65249534344877367322010-01-10T08:05:35.081-05:002010-01-10T08:05:35.081-05:00The imagery is simply breath-taking and astounding...The imagery is simply breath-taking and astounding. I just love the breath fog doodles thing!Kartikhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01067636999700672077noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-38724264982403246932010-01-10T07:32:02.773-05:002010-01-10T07:32:02.773-05:00What a nice little pieceWhat a nice little pieceBlodeueddhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03435479623560871881noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-12463453146900548222010-01-10T05:10:48.328-05:002010-01-10T05:10:48.328-05:00Once I read to the end and fully understood what y...Once I read to the end and fully understood what you were doing I reread this and was overwhelmed by how magical it is. <br /><br />Beautiful work Aimee.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15498010.post-15798963477273391542010-01-10T02:52:16.097-05:002010-01-10T02:52:16.097-05:00Sweet and well done.Sweet and well done.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.com